Date: 12/09/08 09:20 pm Title: Chapter 7
OMG!!!! This is sooo good!!! I love it the magic and the story Bill tells Geroge. it's like the stories Geroge's father told him when he was a child only it's real:) I love it:) Did I tell you I love it? :)
Author's Response: Thank you! I have to admit, I'm still extremely nervous with how people will take the fantasy aspect, so to have this kind of response is great. <3 Thanks for sticking with this.
Date: 12/09/08 07:54 pm Title: Chapter 7
okay.. there's one half of the problem, well of finding the traitors anyway...
the next bit ought to be very interesting...
Author's Response: These boys have so many problems, too many they don't even know about. Probably only because I love to torture characters so much. Go figure.rnrnThanks for the comments <3
Date: 12/09/08 05:58 pm Title: Chapter 7
The thing with the magic was so neat; does it take a lot of thinking to come up with these ideas or do they just kind of come to you?
Once more, with feeling: Can't wait for your update! :D
Author's Response: Thank you for taking the time to read this and leave me a few words!rnrnYou know, usually I sit down and really think about where I want to take a story, and develop it in a specific way, but this story just kind of came together on its own. Everything that appears in here just spung to mind and fit perfectly, which is really a first, and really, kinda, sorta nice :)
Date: 12/09/08 03:05 pm Title: Chapter 7
Orr for fuck sake, just get them together!!
I feel so sorry for the twins, but more so Tom.
Bill to me is a lot stronger than Tom, but at the same time he isn't.
I doubt that makes sense, sorry if it doesn't.
Seriously, you need to get Tom and Bill together, every time I see this updated I'm like, oooo, maybe they'll find each other this chapter, but no, then I remember that you said chapter fucking twelve.
My neck is still cringing from a few chapters back.
I was blaming Jost for doing this to Bill, I thought that maybe it was he who forged Tom's signature, or did something to make Bill leave.
But now, I want to like him, but at the same time I don't.
Ergh! You confuse my feelings too much woman!
If I've said it once I'll say it again, I adore Tom, not matter how you write him, he's always the best.
Even though he's barely been in, well, not as much as Bill and Georg, he's by far my favourite chapter.Speaking of chapters, I CAN'T WAIT FIVE MORE FOR THEM TO MEET!
And knowing you there's going to be more fucking angst. I just hope there are no more threats against Bill's life.
Author's Response: Come on, coming into this you knew it was character and plot driven, not pairing driven. I need to fully develop everything before we can get to the hot twin smex. But I swear it's coming ... just, you know, not for another ... four or five chapters.rnrnAs I started writing this I wanted to balance out the twins, I always want to, but I admit, Bill is getting much stronger than Tom. I judge this by the fact that I've got rough drafts of the next few chapters already written and Bill without Tom is complete sorrow, but Tom without Bill is one big mess. Bill is technically a lot stronger than Tom.rnrnDon't hate Jost ... well, at least don't hate him until he comes back into the picture ... in the next chapter, and a lot more things start to happen that move the plot along a bit faster. I admit, he's an ass, I've written him that way deliberately when he shows up again, but he's got motivations and justifications and I think in the end he'll shine through.rnrnI have noticed the lack of Tom, which is certainly remedied in the next chapter which is predominantly his and Gustav's, and while it isn't that I dislike writing him, though I find him more of a challenge than Bill, the focus of the story is actually on Georg, and through him Bill. If in this story Georg and Gustav were BFFs then the chapters would be mostly about them. But once the twins eventually get together, I think everything will balance itself out.rnrnI'm hoping for a new chapter before next week, because honestly I'm starting finals, and as a senior in college, that means EVERYTHING else in my life gets pushed to the side and they're all that matters.rnrn<3 thanks so much
Date: 12/07/08 11:21 am Title: Chapter 6
Aw, poor Geo. D; I feel for you, buddy.
Can't wait for the next update~ :3
Author's Response: Aww, I know. I love Georg, but I had to burst his bubble for an important reason, besides the Tom/Bill stuff coming up. I promise, he'll be happy by the end.rnrnNext update coming soon! Thanks for the review!
Date: 12/03/08 07:39 am Title: Chapter 6
moremoremoremore!! =00
omgomgomg!! this is soooo awsome!! xD
i really want more now (A) *bats her eyelashes* pretty please? (A)
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm having to balance college and my writing right now, so I can't promise another update until next week, but I'm certainly working hard on this story! More will come.
Date: 12/02/08 09:24 pm Title: Chapter 6
Oh wow!!! I can't believe he kissed Bill!!! I wonder what Tom with say or do if he finds out? Wow this is getting really good I can't wait to read more:0) YAY!!!!!
Author's Response: I know, I HAD to make him kiss Bill, because I HAD to break his heart so he'd get a reality check and be able to move on and focus on an entirely different person. Thanks so much for sticking with the fic as it starts to get really fantasy.
Date: 12/02/08 09:23 pm Title: Chapter 6
O____O.....wow
That's a shocker....
Don't laugh, but i kinda thought he came from like a little hiddenverysecretneverfoundedbyotherhumans kinda town from like the north. Dx
And Georg is a butt. Dx
Bill loves Tom.
And Tom loves Bill.
How hard is it to understand? :O
Great Update!
More soon?
Author's Response: lol, I have to laugh, mainly because I wondered if anyone was expecting the whole, you know, I come from an compeletely different world, kind of spin, which is REALLY fantasy. Well, at least it didn't turn you completely off to the story. Thanks so much for the review!
Date: 12/02/08 05:21 pm Title: Chapter 6
ohhh wow.. Poor Georg, he's really all confused now.. and Bill thinks Tomi betrayed him... poor baby...
Author's Response: lol, poor Georg. He's going to spen the ENTIRE story confused, but it makes him adorable, really. Thanks for reading!
Date: 12/02/08 05:11 pm Title: Chapter 6
Georg, the fucking dickhead.
Why did he kiss him!?!!!
He shouldn't have, Bill is Tom's!
Regardless of what may or may not have happened.
And then he had the cheek to shout at him about being with Tom!
I hope that that was the last of the Biorg.
I was expecting Bill to use himself and Tom as an example when he explained love.
Orr, a liked Suzie, she was canny, is there no way that she and Georg could get together.
Oh my god, I don't believe that I've just asked for het.
But whatever, Georg needs to realise, somehow, that he does in fact love Suzie, and the whole gay thing was just a fluke. Or he's bi.
When you said about the knife going into Bill's throat, I thought you meant like, it was about an inch deep.
You do know that you missed the perfect opportunity for Tom to sweep in then and save Bill.
Which could have been so fucking sweet and cute!
Even if Bill can defend himself, he always needs Tom to protect him.
I love how Bill is about fruit, it makes me laugh, or at least giggle.
Angry Bill, yes, yes, yes, yes, yes.
His reaction was spot on, he seems rather passive, no completely passive, but slightly, so this reaction worked really well.
And as much as I'm against Biorg, when he was crying was rather adorable.
I've been meaning to ask, how long is this going to be, roughly?
And WHEN IS TOM COMING?!
AND, is Georg going to be able to go to their world (and Suzie of course, since they're going to live there).
And if you can't answer them, pfft, you suck.
Update tomorrow. I'm not even going to be polite and ask you to.
Author's Response: LMFAO. I wrote this and then sat back and was like, "I SOOOO know who's going to spaz after reading this." <3 But it had to happen. I had to break poor Georgie's heart so he'd get a reality check and move on.rnrnI adore how I wrote Suzie. I love that girl, and if I weren't going to make my first attempt at getting the G's together, Georg would so be getting back together with her. But alas, they're not to be. This is a G/G and I'm sticking to that ... mostly because I've already outlined the entire fic and it's all going to fit together nicely just the way I have it now.rnrnAnd speaking of outlining this fic ... yeah, it's about twenty chapters right now, but that's liable to change if I take things out or put things in. Oh ... errr ... yeah ... about Tom showing up ... *mumblechaptertwelveorsomumble* Yeah. But I SWEAR, it'll be worth the wait. God, I hope it'll be worth it.rnrnI'm not saying Georg is going to go back with them, but certainly a bunch of people from both sides are going to be crossing back and forth. I'm not confirming or denying any names.rnrn*nervous* No updates until next week ... big US Labor paper to work on. *runs away*
Date: 11/30/08 10:33 pm Title: Chapter 5
I love the dynamic between Tom and Gustav, it's so...cuddly, I dunno, haha.
I spotted a few typos, but other than that, another stellar chapter!! (And cliffhanger... >_>)
Author's Response: Ack, sorry the response took so long. That was not my intention.rnrn*sigh*rnrnThanks so much for your appreciation on the dynamics between the characters, because I am working hard to develop both the characters and their relationships with each others. The plot is important, but this a character driven piece.rnrnOh ... and ... err ... typos ... yeah. *grumble* Gonna go see if I can spot them.
Date: 11/30/08 02:51 am Title: Chapter 5
.....O_____O.....
wow. amazing. Dx
Please tell me that there is more soon???!!?
Author's Response: Thank you! I promise I'm already working on the next chapter.
Date: 11/29/08 06:49 pm Title: Chapter 5
Okay, before I start to review, this may come off of paradox's account, but it's abc. I don't know if I've signed out of hers or not.
OH MY FUCKING GOD. I want to call you every name under the sun.
NO, NO, NO, NO, NO. I'm going to pretend I didn't read that last line, at least until the next chapter when Georg wakes up and it was a dream.
Lol if that's actually what you planned to do.
My brain never processed what I was reading for that last part, I just read it and saw man, held secure and hand around Bill's waist and was like, mint! Tom's here!
But then no, you squashed my hopes and fucking danced all over them.
I actually wanted Georg to stay and work things out with Suzie, I want him to be happy, even if she is a bitch. But even more than that, I want him to be happy without Bill, so that Bill can go be with Tom.
I was in R.E the other day, I wasn't paying much attention, but I heard the teacher go on about some rights, but then she spelt it Rites, and I was like, wow! They're in Jen's fic!
Georg annoys me yet he doesn't, he's selfish, but cute and protective.
I instantly don't like him because he's taken over Tom's place, but then again, the way he acts with Bill makes me forget about that.
If that makes sense.
Update tomorrow, please?
Please.
Please!
The last sentence made(makes) me cringe, I keep looking at it every two seconds and it's making my neck go all funny.
I've shuddered about ten times.
I really liked the scene of Tom and Bill crossing the divide, it was fitting, to me at least, and I felt sorry for them.
And the, 'when I'm king' thing and what followed it made me smile.
I love how Tom thinks of Bill in this.
Oh, the twins hiding in the garden to be intimate.
Awww.
I can proper imagine it, and Tom leant over books all day long.
Me likes.
Btw, you need to update tomorrow, just in case I haven't gotten that through to you.
Author's Response: lmao. You're coming through on the right account. Alas, it is not a dream. Psh, you know I would never give up the oportunity to torture Bill to a dream. I'm going to tramatize him as much as humanly possible.rnrnAbout Suzie, I actually wanted to write her as just the bitch ex, but during this chapter and the next that I'm working on right now, she's becoming a lot more than that. I can't bring myself to hate her, even if it was my intention. Oh, and I promise, Georg is going to find happiness, but not with Bill, obviously. :) I love my Georgie too much not to let him be happy.rnrn*woot woot* for my fic sneaking into RL ... I think. I'd hate to be distracting you from school.rnrnI really don't want you to hate Georg. I want everyone to love him, but I understand why he's rubbing you and others wrong. He is moving in on Tom's territory. He's playing with something that isn't his. But I think it'll all get better by the time Tom shows up and they have their alpha male grunt-off over Bill (and Tom naturally wins).rnrnI want to update as fast as possible, because I'm already playing around with a new fic idea, so I do expect I'll be finishing this story a lot faster than the other, but I can't promise an update tomorrow. At the very least I have to finish this by Christmas.
Date: 11/29/08 03:29 pm Title: Chapter 5
Oh you did it again!!! Ahhhh!!! Poor Bill! Really good once again:) More story about Tom and Gustav too:0) I really hope Tom can find Bill soon and I hope Geroge can help Bill out of this one. There is something up. I think Tom was set up something horrible and poor Bill is going to end up in the middle. I wonder if there is a third person who wants to take the crown away from Tom and Bill?
Author's Response: As I outlined the story I knew for the most part it was going to center around, intitally, Georg and Bill, and then the twins, but I'm really trying to keep Tom and Gustav in the picture as much as possible, considering how important they are. And most certainly, whatever is going on, Bill is caught right smack in the middle, because he's out little trouble magnet. :) Thanks for the review!
Date: 11/29/08 01:27 pm Title: Chapter 5
eek.. poor Billa... and Georg was being such a sweetie... bet Tom is gonna explode in the next chapter...
Author's Response: lol, the only thing I love more than Georg, is torturing Bill. :) Thanks for the review!
Date: 11/24/08 07:59 pm Title: Chapter 4
Honestly, I'm starting to think something's up with David and how he just so happened to know about the murderers coming...Hm. Please update soon, I love the world you've created!
Author's Response: I like the way I've written David in this fic, and honestly, he's the last person you have to wonder about switching sides or double crossing. However, he's got a lot of secrets and he's not entirely truthful to the twins. There's a lot more to him than you might imagine and he'll come back into the picture soon enough in a very interesting way. And worry not, I'm already hard at work on the next chapter. Thanks for reviewing!
Date: 11/23/08 09:31 pm Title: Chapter 1: When Meeting New People ...
Nice one:) It's nice to read a little back story on George and know that Bill is ok for now. George now knows a little more about Bill as well. The way Bill describes the rites and a little more about where he comes from and why he left... it was really well done. I can't wait for things to really get going with Tom and David entering into the picture. Nicely done and can't wait for number 5!
Author's Response: <3 thanks. When I set out to write this story I knew it was going to be pretty big, mostly because I wanted to dedicate myself to flushing out the characters and making them as round as possible, especially considering this is an AU and nothing is established unless explicitly stated so. Thanks so much for sticking with the story and reviewing!
Date: 11/23/08 06:56 pm Title: Chapter 4
Guh, bitch, fucker damn.
Don't ask me why, but those words just needed to be put into the review.
The chapter was the bitch, not you, it was a bloody tease.
I'm just itching for more!
I know you love Georg and that, but he needs to fuck off and let Tom take his place.
And then Tom and Bill need to leave this word and go back into their own, being all fluffy and cuddly.
But I can't see that happening for a while.
Personally, if I were Bill, I'd rather die than have Tom hate me. If he loves him and has nothing but admiration and respect for him, then what's the point in running away. They seem like each others worlds.
And tbh, Bill should have know that Tom wouldn't do that to him.
Didn't Bill say in a previous chapter that Tom was coming to save him? If he did say it and I'm not imagining things, then was it a mistake? Or meant to be there?
I was worried for a while that the person Bill needed to help him was Georg's dead father, and Bill doesn't know that he's dead.
And I know that the time scale wouldn't work out, but hey, it's AU.
Oh, and do they have cars in Bill's world? Or was that comment about the cars he had seen in this world or what he'd learnt of it?
Must I tell you how much I fucking love this?
It's addicting.
I love every word of it!
Author's Response: lmao. <3 *snort* lol your reactions are ALWAYS the best.rnrnDon't worry about the Georg/Bill. I promised you it was one sided and I meant that. Of course, come on, who couldn't fall for our adorable Bill?rnrnOkay, so I promise Bill's apparently contradicting emotions and actions concerning Tom will be cleared up in a few chapters. I promise. Though my rational is that he was scared, and then Jost was there making his choices for him. Bill is only just now starting to realize what it all means. There actually is a scene is a future chapter where he'll have to decide if lliving without Tom is really living at all, even if he's under the impression that if he goes back he'll be killed.rnrnIn a previous chapter I alluded to someone coming for Bill but (unless I made a MAJOR typo) I never named any names, because its always been David Jost who sprung him and who's coming to help him and I didn't want to spoil anything. Though now I need to go back all paranoid and such and make sure I didn't royally screw myself like that. I mean, I promise, Tom is coming, but Bill doesn't know that.rnrnlol, Georg's dead father ... I say nothing. The man is truly dead but I say nothing. :)rnrnOh, and I know the car thing is awkward, mostly because this chapter went through several edits and there was a lot more dialogue in there about Bill's time in Georg's world before they met up and it involved this cabby and it just ... didn't go anywhere and needed to be cut out and some how this snuck in here by accident and no one caught it. That line probably shouldn't be in the fic ... ignore it, please?rnrnlol, this is so long ... but I'm more than happy to always answer any questions you have, unless they give a major plot point away, and then I'll have to settle for placating you with cookies and another chapter by thursday. Deal?
Date: 11/23/08 06:25 pm Title: Chapter 4
boy.. I agree one fucked up tradition... and poor Billa doesn't know that Tom Wasn't behind all that mess..
curling up to wait for the next bit...
Author's Response: lol, that's exactly the reaction my beta had when she read this chapter. <3 Thanks so much for taking a few seconds to drop me a line and tell me it disturbed you.
Date: 11/22/08 05:42 am Title: Chapter 1: When Meeting New People ...
Confused was the wrong word to use I think, I'd say mistified would be alot more accurate, my excuse is I was tired when writing this, lol.