Date: 01/24/09 09:52 pm Title: Chapter 14
Ok so I think most people are thinking that George is looking at Gustav's fathers picture as his father, but I reread the chapter and George is looking at a totally different photo. It's higher up from Gustav's father. I hope I am correct on this. It means that George and Gustav are not related as far as we know.
Author's Response: *relief* You got it. I AM going to rewrite that. There shouldn't be confusion over this issue, considering that it is important to the plot. This makes me look like a poor writer. rnrnIn no way, shape or form, are Gustav and Georg related. (Well, maybe stretching back generations and generations to the very first people who crossed the threshold, but in that regard EVERYONE is related to EVERYONE)
Date: 01/24/09 09:04 pm Title: Chapter 14
This is such a creative, cool story.
I've always meant to read it when I saw it in updates, but never did.
I see a lot of supernatural stories on here that sound lame, and not well written
and I was pleasantly surprised with this.
I'm also glad Bill and Tom stayed together
not that I don't like Bill/Georg, but it would have been unbelievable and wtf?
anyway, enough ranting.
I just really, reallyyyy liked it.
-goes to favorite-
Author's Response: Thank you for commenting!rnrnI've worked very hard at this, refining and detailing the plot, and then developing the characters, so I'm excited to see the appreciation. Makes an author happy. :)
Date: 01/24/09 07:34 pm Title: Chapter 14
Ooooh my god, this is just getting better and better. These little twists you keep adding, or perhaps just let out into the light (I could've been too dense to not see the hints) are just wonderful. It's way too late here and I shouldn't be up and maybe I'm not making sense but I can honestly tell you that I am in love with this and that if you don't update quickly I will come after you with my shovel, but this suspense is killing me. D:
Oh, and because this is just too sweet: He shared a secret, pleased smile with Gustav that made his toes curl.
Love is in the aiiiir!! But wait, does this make Gustav and Georg half brothers?
Anyway, update ASAP!! (:
Author's Response: *sigh* and the confusion continues. You're not the first to misread my poor writing of the scene where Georg recognizes his father's picture and mistake it for Gustav's father. I'm going back and rewriting that scene pronto. I think I give one line where I have Georg looking higher than Gustav's father's picture, and that's it, and you aren't the first to have missed it. I feel like maybe now there wasn't enough care put into writing that scene. And I'm pissy.rnrnBut thanks anyway for reading this and sticking around long enough for some of the answers to start to come out. I've been waiting for this point in the story for a while now, and it's nice we're getting to experience it together.
Date: 01/24/09 03:53 pm Title: Chapter 14
HA!! I knew it! I knew George's father had something to do with where Bill was from. I knew the stories he told George were about Bill's home. When Bill didn't say where he was from that line popped into my head right then. So, that was the spark too. I figured it out last chapter, but didn't wan to rune it for anyone. God you're good. I really love this story. Ohh can't wait to read more! Still wondering who signed the document to take Bill's life and why. What it all means now IDK. This magistrate person must be evil. i'm with the others when I say I'm sure he had something to do with it. Why is another matter.
Author's Response: <3 I admit, I wrote these parts so gleefully, tickled to death I was tying everything together finally and really starting to let all the secrets out that I've been hoarding for chapters upon chapters.rnrnThank you so much for saying such nice things. This is easily the story i've spent the most time with plot wise that I think I've ever written, and it's nice to see it all come together and watch other people enjoy it.
Date: 01/24/09 03:43 pm Title: Chapter 14
So how is Georg's father Gustav's too?
Was it in the chapter? Have I missed it or did you not say yet?
Sorry if I missed it, I just read most of the ending with wide eyes and an open mouth, all the time thinking 'I knew it, I fucking knew it.'
And I'm pretty sure that when you sent me the first chapter I said something about Georg's father and Elthion.
And you said no, or something, I can't properly remember since it was a while ago, but sheesh.
From like the beginning of this chapter, or well, when they crossed over, I was like, there's something going on, with him and Gustav, and I'm sure the thought that they were brothers crossed my mind for a moment.
It may not have, I may be falsely remembering things, but still.
Moving on from my ramblings.
God, you really, really explain things well.
I was almost awwed by it.
Every single thing that you described, I could imagine perfectly.
It was beyond amazing.
Even from the short snippets of what their world is like I am captivated by it, I'd proper love to live there.
I can't tell you how well you've wrote this chapter, and even with the lack of the twins, it has probably been my favourite chapter so far.
And I begrudge to say that, since the last chapter was so cute and fluffy.
You've went above and beyond your usual brillian self this time, it was amazing.
Author's Response: Holy crap, was I not clear enough in the chapter? I've gone back and looked it over and Georg looks at Gustav's father's picture, and then looks higher and sees his own father's. errr ... not the same person. Trust me. Not the same. Ugh. I can't believe I wasn't clear enough about that. Looks like I'll be going back and editing and rewriting.rnrn*sigh* I feel like the entire chapter is ruined by the confusion. Still, thanks so much for the praise, though I totally feel like I don't deserve it with the mix up.rnrn*grumblegrumblegrumble*
Date: 01/19/09 02:38 pm Title: Chapter 13
Aw!
Sweet! :D
Is there something blooming between Georg and Gustav? Or are they just friends?
Great Update!
More soon???? :D
Author's Response: Thank you!rnrnThere is absolutely some G/G action coming, because I've wanted to try writing it for a while. It won't be anything super heavy, but I think it'll compliment the story nicely.rnrnI promise to update as quickly as I can, for sure before next week.
Date: 01/18/09 11:41 pm Title: Chapter 13
Aww Cute and fluffy for both the twins and George and Gustav. I'm interested in how the twins will solve the issue of King and if Geroge will stay with Gustav. ( oh, I think I just figured something out... we talked about it in one of my other reviews). Anyway... So who was it that tried to kill Bill? I'm interested to find out.
Chapter 14 here we come.
Author's Response: I promise, I've got a plan to work absolutely everything out, and before the fic is over, every single question you migth have, will be answered. I've spent a lot of time nitpicking over details and filling in as much as possible. I expect everything will turn out just right in the end.rnrnThanks so much for the review. I love that at least a few people are hanging in here with me. It means a lot.
Date: 01/18/09 01:58 pm Title: Chapter 13
I proper love that I'm online almost always when you update, it's rather mint.
And I still squee whenever there's an update.
The fluff, ohh the fluff.I've never been more desperate for it to arrive in my life, even fics that are proper filled with angst and crap, I still yearned for this more.
Tom's so God damn gentle with Bill, it made my heart melt. And even though there was no beating up of Georg I still loved it.
Please letting beat on his arse! I'm begging you.
I'll aww and squeak so much, as weird as that sounds. I love Tom beating people up for being a cunt to Bill.
Orrr, I'm still awing over it, it's quite pathetic on my behalf to be honest.
I feel that I may spend like hundreds of words going over the fluff and how much I love it, so I'm gonna veer away from it.
The sweetness between Gustav and Georg towards the end was ...nice? As much of a shit word that is it was, I liked the....orr fuck, I can't get my words out tonight. They weren't cute, not really, but it was canny, but....ergh! ffs I'm getting annoyed here.
I don't know how to get out what I want to say without sounding like a right twat.
Erm, I think, if I say that it was sad at the same time as it was sorta sweet, would be the closest thing to what I want to say.
I really want to know why Bill was ordered to be killed n that, since not liking David is out, I guess I'll blame the magistrate?
I'm still not all that fussed on David, and still want it to be him, but at the same time I don't.
Pssht.
And Saki needs to go back with them.
He really, really does.
Oh! The princess thing, need I say that I fucking loved that?
It was brilliant, as long as Bill stays out of a dress.
He's such a princess type, especially if Tom's the king.
Oh balls to not going on about the fluff, if I've not said it yet I'll say it now, it's amazing, you write it so fucking well.
I still feel proper sorry for Gustav, and as much as I'm swayed towards the twins, I do hope everything works out well for them.
Like, when Tom almost kills Georg *cough cough hint hint* Gustav should come and look after him, then kiss him at some point.
But after Tom beats Georg up.
I proper can't wait for another chapter, sorry for the shite rambling review.
Author's Response: I really did try with the fluff. I'm not great at it, but I did my best, and when I'm writing Tom with Bill, it seems to flow fairly easily. More fluff to come in the future, though. Lots more.rnrn... Tom is going to have a lot more to deal with and very soon, so I doubt he's going to get around to beating up Georg. Tom' priority is always to put Bill first, so he's going to concentrate on that, because let me assure you, they're not going home to a happy reunion.rnrnThe G/G will build, but slowly. I don't want to overwhelm the story with romance. Still, I think it'll come along nicely.rnrnAnswers will come, especially why the hit went out on Bill. And I have to tell you, the not liking David this really is out. He's going to be their most important ally when they go home. I'm not saying you have to like him, but you'll be glad he's there.rnrnI haven't even started on the next chapter yet, so no promises as to when it'll be out, especially since I'm also working on a Cobra/Academy fic for lj, but there will be an update eventually. <3
Date: 01/18/09 01:53 pm Title: Chapter 13
This certainly made up for it!! Oh, the fluff was just too good to be true, and I love how Tom reassured Bill through words even when it's out of his comfort zone.
Bill didn’t startle awake or jerk or announce the change in any way, but Tom knew. He’d shared a room with Bill for sixteen years, often a bed, and he knew the way Bill’s right hand clenched slightly upon waking and his breathing picked up.
That, that's just... just... gah!! *flails*
By the way, how long is this going to be? Are we going to find out who forged Tom's signature? Will there be some G/G goodness? I wouldn't mind you writing another 30 chapters or so, just so you know. ;) Love this update, anyway!!! (:
Author's Response: <3rnrnI hope this chapter sorta made up for all the procrastinating on getting the twins together. I'm not a master at fluff, but I did try.rnrnThe way I figure there are going to be seven or eight more chapters, not a whole lot, but everything will get cleared up. I hope there will be no questions left when this is all done. And yes, there is more G/G coming, along with lots more Tom/Bill.rnrnThanks so much for reading and leaving this comment!
Date: 01/12/09 08:40 pm Title: Chapter 12
DO I SMELL G/G?
*dies*
Author's Response: You do indeed. It's my first attempt. Let's hope it goes well.rnrnThanks for reading!
Date: 01/12/09 02:53 pm Title: Chapter 12
You're mean, cruel and I don't like you anymore. *pouts childishly*.
Need I tell you how much I buzzed over this chapter, and there wasn't even an ounce of violence.
Can Tom fly of the handle when he hears that Georg kissed Bill, please!
I don't want to spend the whole review whining and moaning, I'll try and push that aside, but the fluff better be out of this world.
When Georg was about to take Bill away, but Bill stopped him, saying that he wanted to be with Tom one last time, I think I died a little right there.
It was so fucking cute and sweet.
I love the small little one liners that are full to the brim with fluff. I love them in fics that aren't pure fluff, you still need a full chapter of it next though.
I'm not liking the G/G stuff, I have no problems with the pairings, or how you're writing it, their small little moment took over my twintime.
That doesn't settle well with me.
I'm nearly falling asleep here and I can't see the screen properly, so this is all I can write for now.
Oh, and btw, I don't like Georg.
Author's Response: I didn't do it on purpose. I sat down to write twin moments, and then the flow of the writing just too me along with Georg instead, probably because he's my favorite, and the story is actually about him and the connections he's making with other people and the progress he's making as a person. And then I transitioned back to Tom/Bill but it just didn't fit so I pushed it into the next chapter. rnrnHowever, to make up for this, I did post this as fast as possible, and I'm already mostly finished with the next chapter which does feature twin moments of epic purportions. Oh, and I think the fluff is pretty good, if I do say so myself.rnrnI hate to tell you, but the G/G is here to stay. For the most part they're going to be balanced with the Tom/Bill, because honestly this story was never about the twins. However there will be plenty of twin time in the coming chapters, including something huge and corny and epicly fluffy that I want to skip ahead and write it before everything else. You'll LOVE it.rnrnOh, and try to show Georg a little love. Who couldn't fall for Bill?
Date: 01/12/09 12:28 pm Title: Chapter 12
WOW!!!! I almost jumped out of my skin!!! You updated so fast. Thank you:) I'm so happy that David can help Bill finally and that Tom is with him. This is such a good story and I'm so curious as to what that spark is now that you said it is more than what I thought. There was something in the last chapter that also made me wonder as well. The hands that touched George he fought them off, but who was it? It was not Andreas, then who? It seems like there is some reason for them. I don't know. Curious... Anyway.... This is getting really really good.
Author's Response: I updated so fast because I realized I'd promised nearly everyone who reviewed the previous chapter, fluffy twin time in this chapter, and then couldn't deliver on it. So I decided to get this chapter up as fast as possible and start on the next, which is mostly finished at this point and does contain a great deal of twin time.rnrnOh, and the question about the last chapter, I apologize if it was unclear. When I'm writing emotional scenes I tend to become as detached, or in other cases, as absorbed as the characters I'm writing. Those hands were just people trying to step in and take over for him (considering CPR is actually very tiring) and because Georg wasn't fussing with them, I wasn't either. Nothing special about them. lol, I wonder if I make people expect there to be signifigance behind everything because I hint at so much and imply that a ton of things are signifigant. rnrnBut really, thanks so much for this review. It made me smile.
Date: 01/12/09 12:24 pm Title: Chapter 12
*comes after you with a shovel* You know, I'm really quite famous in other fandoms with this shovel of mine: I hunt down the writers when they... well, it depends, but you deserve The Shovel right now, even though I know it's not your fault.
Anyway, I do adore this chapter, despite everything. God, how much Georg hated Tom he couldn’t begin to express. He hated that Tom had hurt Bill. Even more, he hated that despite it all, Bill continued to love him. He hate that when he looked at Tom he could see Bill’s face and their eyes crinkled in desperation in exactly the same way. He hated him so much, maybe the most because he knew, like Bill, he could trust Tom. Christ, I love that paragraph. I don't hate Georg, I don't, I even sympathize with him, but man, did those lines make me feel good. *g*
And did I mention I sense some G/G in the end? ;) I do wonder what's gonna happen now... I mean, if Bill has no magic... gah, this is messing with my head. XD Thanks for the lovely update, and be sure to include some lovely twincest fluff in the next chap, will you? (:
Author's Response: You're going to shovel me? That's ... *runs away* I SWEAR, this chapter was meant to be all Tom/Bill, but it happens frequently that I establish a flow of writing and what comes of it isn't always what I planned. Next chapter for sure, though, as it's mostly written.rnrnAt least someone doesn't hate Georg. rnrnThe G/G potential will be explored, and twincest fluff is assured in the next chapter, which I'm finishing up at this point. Thanks so much for reading this and dropping me this wonderful comment.
Date: 01/12/09 12:10 pm Title: Chapter 12
ooohhh.. Bill's safe (well safe-ish) with his Tomi again... and Gods but Georg is being a stubborn thing... and hints of G/G I see.. oh lovely...
Author's Response: Thanks you for reading. Bill's back with his Tom, so for the moment all is right, and Georg will come around. As for the G/G, we'll see how that goes. It's my first time writing them as a pair.
Date: 01/12/09 09:31 am Title: Chapter 11
O.O
*meep*
and the bottom just dropped out of poor Georg's world...
Author's Response: So true. New chapter up now!
Date: 01/11/09 04:32 pm Title: Chapter 11
Omg. I can't believe I missed these chapters!! Ahhhh! You have the greatest and the worst cliffhangers. I'm glad they finally found each other, though. I mean, there's gonna be a smackdown, but...*holds breath*
I saw quite few typos, but mostly of the left-out-word variety.
Author's Response: You've flattered me. Thank you! New chapter coming tomorrow!rnrnOh, and typos unfortunately are inevitable at this point. I haven't heard from my beta since finals ended in december. I'm not even sure if she's still alive. There will be revised, beta'd chapters posted when school starts again in a few weeks and I know she's still breathing and accepting emails.
Date: 01/11/09 04:21 pm Title: Chapter 11
...;___;
Awwww! Poor Georg!!!! D:
This chapter is amazing! ;__;
I have no words to describe it.
Amazing Update!
Please more soon??? :D
Author's Response: Thank you so much! <3 New chapter tomorrow, actually.
Date: 01/10/09 09:59 pm Title: Chapter 11
This is such a great story. Every chapter I get more and more into it. You really are a wonderful writer. Poor Bill:( His brother is there now ( thank you I'm thinking their proximity was the spark?), but I'm really curious as to what will happen next. Chapter 12 should be really awesome. Can't wait:0)
Author's Response: Thank you so much. I'm very flattered.rnrnThere is something behind that spark, I admit, and it will come out in a few chapters, and be central to the plot. So keep that in the back of your mind as this story goes on.rnrnI'll get working on chapter 12 as soon as possible and thank you so much for your review!
Date: 01/10/09 06:56 pm Title: Chapter 11
Ohhhhhh you and your cliffhangers! You're killin' me here. (I'm tempted to make a joke about you killing Bill too, but I'll refrain.) More!
Author's Response: Ahhh! No bad puns!rnrn<3rnrnThanks for reading my baby here, and sticking with how long I've teased you all about the Tom/Bill. You are made of the strongest of stuff.
Date: 01/10/09 02:17 pm Title: Chapter 11
You know, there's far too much Georg/Bill in this chapter. Bill's only being held there by Georg? What a load of crap, it's Tom keeping him there, you know it, I know it, he knows it, Tom knows it, Georg knows it and so does the rest of the God damn world, well, two worlds.
Orrr, I've been looking forwards to this since the last update, I squeaked when it was updated.
I can't believe I've got to wait for another update for the twins to get together!!
Georg better get beat up, that's all I can say.
Please, for fucks sake, let there be some fluff!
I tried, I really did, to wait until the end to see when and how Tom comes into it.
But I failed.
I just had to.
God! I used to be able to write proper reviews, where they had meaning and weren't mindless angry babble, but you've made it impossible for me to be able to do that.
I'm just hoping I'll leave proper ones once they're back together.
Please, please please just do it in the next chapter. I'm begging you, don't have about 2000 words of Tom at Georg's place and being like, I need to find him, and then having him know where he is, somehow, and when he finally gets there there's about 200 words of Tom/Bill and all of that's just 'you wanted me dead' please please please!
I need some twin fluff! Seriously!
I was dead wrong about the 3 15 thing, the way I thought it was going to be had shit loads of history in it, and was complicated as fuck.
Fail, epic fail on my behalf.
God, I love this so much, I need more.
Oh, and sorry about me previous scary review.
Author's Response: Calmdowncalmdowncalmdown. There is offically no more Georg/Bill. *pets soothingly* and let me tell you, there is a reason for just about everything mentioned in this fic. Bill is tied to Georg, being kept alive for a very specific reason that will come out in a few chapters. Just let it be for now, and be thankful Bill is alive. mkay?rnrnFluff is coming. A great deal of the next chapter is nothing but fluff and the twins reconnecting. lol, I promise, there's lots of Tom/Bill in the next chapter, together, touching, talking, being all twiny. They're completely together by the very start of the next chapter. No more pussyfooting around on my part.rnrn*sigh* So here we go, getting even thicker into the plot. From here on out the road gets extra bumpy, if you can imagine that. So I think I'll need your fabulous reviews to keep writing at a steady pace. A little coercion never hurt anyone, right? <3