Date: 01/08/09 03:17 am Title: Chapter 1
That was really great!
I tink you should write another one!
Twi
Author's Response: Yeah I might, I don't know if I will or not.rnThough I am tempted to write a hetero story...which I have...
Date: 11/15/08 02:33 pm Title: Chapter 2
i liked it, but please notice some thing if and when your writing next time:
- Pleazee!!! try to choose the words really carefully, for example ppl dont wanna read about rectum as much as an sexy ass. so try to find words that would mach the purpose of your meaning and that would fit in to the story in the "correct way". ex. your writing of sex, try to find words that would be "sexy" and "turning on".. ons that you orefer reading on :)
-then the other thing i was gonna comment about was the lenght of these stories, they could be longer. the first one was allmost 1000words but teh second just 500+... i'd wish them to be,say over 1500 words.so pay attension to that as well. thing just happened a bit too quickly and "hastily"(pace)for my liking :)
but im so not saying it wasnt good, cuz it was. especially if it truly was your first one, i'll be waiting to hear more of you!!! :P
-SoLonely-
p.s. sorrryyy for my bad english.. i Dont speak english for my motherlanguage ... And BTW,you were great(writer,to read)
Author's Response: Both of the stories were fast paced, I realize this, but I wouldn't want to type more and get bored of the story. Thank for you commenting.
Date: 11/08/08 05:08 pm Title: Chapter 2
Hot!
Nice end line :)
Author's Response: Thank you very much. I guess my calling is twincest stories...
Date: 11/08/08 05:06 pm Title: Chapter 1
That was hot!
And that last line is just adorable.
Author's Response: Thank you very much
Date: 11/06/08 01:31 am Title: Chapter 1
Oh man! That was awesome! Keep writing!
Author's Response: Heh heh, I might consider writing another one shot twincest...though I really don't know.
Date: 11/05/08 11:01 pm Title: Chapter 1
This is fucking hawt!! I read this in school - which isn't the best idea considering a teacher could walk up and see me at any time - and I nearly fell off my chair. Wow!! Really sexy!! *drool*
Author's Response: Considering this was my first ever twincest RP I shall take that as a compliment. Thank you very much. And yeah...reading such a naughty fic in school and getting caught is bad...very bad.
Date: 11/04/08 09:15 pm Title: Chapter 1
It was a little rushed, perhaps out of nervousness but it was over all a very good first twincest. One thing that bugged me though was the constant use of the term black haired beauty, or beauty. I can see that you didn't want to use their names until the end but the repetitiveness was a little annoying, just more endeering terms for Bill next time and all will be well.
Good job.
Author's Response: Yeah I was extremely nervous because I haven't ever written a story involving just Bill and Tom doing the hanky panky. I know I was repetitive and I might try to write another one but I don't know.
Date: 11/04/08 08:11 pm Title: Chapter 1
It was nice i liked it better than my first by far i can tell u lolz u should write more like this
Author's Response: Yeah I probably won't because I am nervous when writing anything twincesty.
Date: 11/04/08 08:03 pm Title: Chapter 1
this can not be your last twincest...can it?-stares with big eyes- I really liked this!!!
Author's Response: I might write some more but yeah this was my first ever one and I was too nervous...