Date: 03/31/14 12:21 am Title: Truth will set you free
Very interesting story. You took on a hard subject and your perspective is unique. I am glad that Tom managed to heal and the boys found their way to each other.
Date: 09/20/12 03:18 pm Title: Sleepless nights
this fic.. hum I don't really know what to actually think of it, its kinda confusing and some parts of it really made no sense at all, I'm kinda disappointed at it :s maybe be more careful with your grammar and sentences and making the plot of it more clear and not so mixed up? Don't take this as an offense because its not, take this as a constructive critique for future fics yes?
good luck :)
Date: 12/20/08 12:26 am Title: Truth will set you free
i did love the story until the end... the ending could have been much better... this story could have been really great 'cause the idea of the story was good but really the end wasn't great...
however you do write well!
Author's Response: Yeah, I also hate the ending. It is kind of crappy, isn't it? It was kind of rush, but, well, I think I won't change it. Thanks for reviewing!
Date: 12/19/08 06:27 pm Title: Truth will set you free
Eh, the ending could have been worse, I think this was a good idea and it's wonderful that you wrote it, the problem is it's scattered and all over the place. Did you have a beta? They work wonders ya know. You just have to get a good (often times opinionated one). Don't delete this, I get really upset when ppl delete stuff w/o reposting a different version of it first b/c I go back and reread stuff all the time.
Anyway, don't regret a thing!
Author's Response: I know I have a faulty grammar, and I want to find a beta reader soon. I don't usually trust people so it will be kind of hard, but I do need a beta. I don't think I'll repost it. I'm just gonna start a new story as soon as I find a beta reader. Thanks for reviewing and being honest with me.
Date: 12/19/08 06:19 pm Title: Amnesia
This was kinda confusing but it seems that ppl are figuring things out.
Date: 12/19/08 06:10 pm Title: Trapped
So Tom was abused by someone who is not in prison and he's still having issues over it, and Bill never knew and doesn't get it. Am I right, did I get the right message from this?
Date: 12/19/08 06:02 pm Title: Sleepless nights
Well you grammer is terribe (sorry but it's true) and that makes this hard to read but the story is really interesing.
Date: 12/19/08 10:38 am Title: Truth will set you free
Really you want to delete this? This is one of my favorite fics. I like that. The idea of one of the boys being abused is NOT original but the way you tell it is. It's confusing like someone describing a dream, it's like all point of information all at once and as the reader I have to sift through it all and make sence of it. I would be sorely dissapointed if this story dissapeared and you never really finished it. Please make Tom suffer more. Let Bill help him remember. I want to have Tom wake up screaming and not be able to remember the nightmare. Please let this nightmare continue it's so beautifully told!
Author's Response: To do so, I'd have to totally rewrite the final chapter, which would be totally hard since I'm not a native speaker. Do not get me wrong, I do hate the way it all endend up. There shouldn't be a happy ending, y'know this kind of stuff never ends this way, so it was kind of a rush ending to me, but also a relief. I didn't want to continue writting and then find out I don't know how to end it and screw up the whole idea! You are a really supportive reader, in fact, your review really made my day! I'm planning on writting another fic, also an angst, with another point of view, more psychological I guess. Maybe I will connect this fic to other one in the future, and you'll see Tom having those awful nightmares! For now, this is it. I'm not deleting it, though.
Date: 12/19/08 12:53 am Title: Truth will set you free
d8) beautiful....
Author's Response: Thanks, I'm glad you liked it. I feel that the end was really dissapointing, but I was running out of ideas and didn't want to mess it up
Date: 12/18/08 10:59 pm Title: Truth will set you free
It must be honest, it was kinda hard to see tom like that, but i like your story!
Author's Response: Yeah, that was one of the reasons I wanted to finish this story. Here Tom doesn't act very much like he would in real life, haha. Thanks for reviewing!
Date: 12/10/08 12:07 am Title: Amnesia
Aw!
So tom was abused??? Dx
Where are they going?
Amazing update!
More soon??? :]
Author's Response: There will be more...soon, I hopernAnyway, thanks for reviewing!!!
Date: 12/07/08 09:41 pm Title: Amnesia
poor tomi.....
Author's Response: Yeah...poor Tomi...rnI dunno how Bill will improve his condition, still gotta sort that out.
Date: 11/29/08 05:57 am Title: Gaps
...:D
(i really need to figure out better reviews)
Author's Response: Don't worry too much about the lenght of the review, I'm just happy that you did review so thank you!
Date: 11/29/08 02:18 am Title: Gaps
hum?! I like this story I just wish that there was more of it. ;) You'll get there I'm sure, it's just so hard to wait for the next chapter.
Author's Response: Actually, next chapter Bill's gonna find out about everything and god only knows what's he gonna do when he does! (well, I'll know too!)
Date: 11/28/08 11:38 pm Title: Gaps
holden should just go and die!!!!!
Author's Response: Yeah! He totally should die! He's in jail, though. rnBill ought to do something about Tom, before he forgets about his past, again.
Date: 11/28/08 11:33 pm Title: Trapped
wat is he talking about?!?!?! wat happened to tomi?!?!?1?! did that guy*points at guy in paper* get him?!?!?1 is tat tomi's problem/!?!?!?!?!
Author's Response: Well, yeah, basically... Still, Tom was kinda willing to offer himself to that man because he wanted to protect Bill. You'll see..
Date: 11/28/08 11:25 pm Title: Sleepless nights
SUPER GUSTAV!!!!!!! jk! why tomi no sleep? wat he doin in the bathroom? this sounds really good!!!!!
Author's Response: Humm, Tomi doesn't sleep because of...well you've already read, he's depressed. I've heard that when being depressed one may have problems to sleep well. One may also have problems to eat properly. I wanted to introduce the sleeping problems first but at the end that's not so important. Thanks for reviewing!
Date: 11/28/08 09:59 pm Title: Gaps
more!
Author's Response: there WILL be more *giggles*
Date: 11/23/08 12:14 am Title: Trapped
This is a very interesting story. I need to know how and how long Tom was abused? By who? - that man yes but more about him. More story please.
Author's Response: Yeah, I kinda felt the same way. I mean, like I need to explain things a little bit more. That's why next chapter will be kind of a flashback, mostly focused on Bill. As for the how long question, well, not long, but it was rather shocking because of other motives. You'll see. Oh, and next chapter is due to the end of this week, it's already finished but I've gotta go through it.