Date: 12/06/08 06:50 am Title: Prologue
I've been waiting for an update of this!! Gaaaaaggghhh!! goodness!!XD
I'm a bit worried now about what will happen next.O.O
And that KISS!! Soooo awkward!!
Please update soon!! Can't wait to read the next ones!! I soooo love this fic!!XD
Date: 12/06/08 06:12 am Title: Nostalgic Cinquefoil
This line here
"I think this may be a sitting down experiment," Bill reasoned, attempting to bend his forearm down to his raised foot.
produced quite the unladylike snort from me. Too funny and such a Bill moment, no matter what universe he's in.
This chapter answered a lot of questions for me, I really enjoyed it. There was of course the stray sniffle and welling of tears but I'm really getting used to that with you guys. All part of the package. I get a little emotionally wounded in exchange for fantastically written fiction. Fair trade.
Oh, that kiss was so awkward. So awkward and I loved it. The UST is yummy.
Date: 12/06/08 03:24 am Title: Nostalgic Cinquefoil
Aw, it was such a sweet chapter.
I adore this fic.
Update asap :D
Date: 12/06/08 02:49 am Title: Nostalgic Cinquefoil
witch!fic makes my heart clench and eyes sting. But then you have adorable moments like Bill balancing to see if his foot is really the length of his arm (I'm guessing with them it's not since they're so long and their feet are so.... not) and the awkward kiss at the end. How are they supposed to know when the debt is repaid anyway? Crappy promise, boo on you Mr Relation.
Date: 11/21/08 08:25 pm Title: Lucky Mint
Yay! *does a happy little dance* That was looovely. And do I detect a bit of twc? *wiggles eyebrows* Pleasepleaseplease update soon!
Date: 11/21/08 08:21 am Title: Lucky Mint
so adorable *_*! I love this and i can't wait for the next chapters because i really want to know where you want this story to go!thanks
Date: 11/21/08 08:12 am Title: Lucky Mint
This story bewitched me!(Okay, okay it’s a lame one...) I love every single (little but often important) detail you hide in here! You created two amazing twins. Tom the calmed deliberately always worried one and of course Bill the more ‘aggressive’ because of his sharp tongue (and I absolutely love his way). And you two show that the human mind just changed very, very limited. Many people still react with defeat and hate on matters which are not normal or different in their opinion and many people are not really open-minded. A really fantastic story and I hope(long) for more :)!
Date: 11/21/08 08:04 am Title: Prosperous Basil
O.ô What's with the flames ? it was a very interesting scene to read.
I love this line : "And Tom was right there before him, faster than the call could have brought him"
Date: 11/21/08 07:32 am Title: Lucky Mint
Every new chapter of this story is a treat. I don't mind the pacing, if anything it makes me appreciate it even more. I'm intrigued, but at the same time I feel like I'm slowly drifting towarda a waterfall and I'm not in a hurry to get there. My theory about the twins involves an eventual physical union which will then unleash a huge amount of magic or something...or not. I got no clue and I dont care. I'm enjoying this as long as I can. You are amazing.
Date: 11/21/08 06:07 am Title: Lucky Mint
I'm never going to understand why more people don't appreciate the detail work that makes up this fic, so I'm going to stop trying. I appreciate it, even marvel at it, because there are a lot of things going on here but you know just how to handle the information (or lack thereof) so that it doesn't overwhelm or confuse the reader, just intrigues them. This fic intrigues me, but not just because I want the answer to every question. It's not just the mystery that keeps me hooked, its the progression - of the twins' relationship, of Simone's deterioration (via flashback) and of whatever the twins sense is coming.
I also like the progression that is you building the society. I'm still startled, sometimes - not jarred, startled, and there's a very important difference between the two words, same as there's a difference between a good writer and a great writer - so, startled, because you're so detailed in describing their witch-habits and charms and voodoo (who do? you do! do what? remind me of the babe... sorry, okay, I'll stop) and then something like post-partum depression and I think, "Did they even recognize that as as a psychological condition back then?" and then I realize, oh, wait, there is no back then. Just like Bill mentioning the Internet so casually and his clothes; my pre-planned notion was to think of this old world setting and its harder, I think, to change the picture in a person's mind than it is to build it, and you're definitely changing the one in mine.
I loved the repeated mentions of fire and water because they're obvious but you remain vague about what they're obviously symbolizing. And I find it interesting that Tom was curious about why Bill was looking up fire - I mean, I'm guessing it was because of the whole gah! I'm in the river but there's fire everywhere! episode in the last chapter, but its curious that Tom is curious about Bill being curious enough to look up fire in the Book. That's... well, that's a lot of curiosity to pack in a little paragraph. -chin stroke- It gets me speculating, and looking for more hints, as opposed to the more in your face questions like WHY doesn't Simone have enough time to tell them everything (and what is everything anyway) tell me now because I am not known for my patience! sort of curiosity.
Umm... hm. I lost my train of thought. Or... I don't even know if I had one. Wait, but I was going to mention something else, yes! Mr. Gruber is a dirty old man. D:
Also, I fell really madly in love with this line: "but he wanted to do something, felt like to leave it as it was would be to omit the last note of a song." Gah. That's one of those descriptions that you write and then read over and think did I write that because fuck that is perfect. Don't even deny it, I know that's the thought that went through your collective head. D:
And the last line was brilliant as well, mmm. Reading Tom and Bill's interaction made me feel all fluttery, partially because it was, you know, them, and partially because I was expecting them to spontaneously explode if they did kiss. I don't know! This is you we're talking about, anything is possible. Though that would be a really, really sucky way to end things. Seriously.
Though now that I think about it, would Tom be the only one to implode? Since he's fire and water kind of -splooge-s it, yeah? -chin stroke-
I, uh... I don't want to Tom to be extinguished, guys. Please keep that in mind when writing the next chapter. .__.
Ella
Date: 11/21/08 04:31 am Title: Prologue
Aawww... I'm loving this. you both have great, imaginative minds!^^ Can't wait for the next chapter!!^^
Date: 11/21/08 03:54 am Title: Lucky Mint
this is gorrrrgeous
Date: 11/21/08 02:47 am Title: Lucky Mint
Still freaked by foreshadowing but still can't get enough. I love your boys and their witchy ways.
Date: 11/21/08 02:33 am Title: Lucky Mint
and i am your greatest fan too
i like this witch story
Date: 11/21/08 02:06 am Title: Lucky Mint
I'm honestly amazed by you two's imagination. To be able to pull all these stories out of your heads, and then write them so well is truly amazing.
Love it, like usual. (L)
Date: 11/19/08 07:13 pm Title: Prosperous Basil
Oh no, now I'm getting worried. :(
Date: 11/19/08 12:23 pm Title: Prosperous Basil
amazing story thus far. I love it. Great job and I can't wait to read the next chapter.
Date: 11/19/08 08:40 am Title: Prosperous Basil
I love this story. But don't worry about taking a little long with the update. I think I would die without my regular fix of ABH.