Date: 08/26/12 09:50 pm Title: Chapter 13
IM SO CONFUSED!! WHAT IS GOING ON!!!???
Author's Response: if you can tell me what you didn't understand I'll try and explain everything else as best I can :)
Date: 04/25/11 02:09 pm Title: Chapter 13
That was interesting. Reminded me of another fic but it was different than this. Although I'll admit the ending chapter was a bit confusing.
Author's Response: yeah, i tend to do that
Date: 10/07/09 10:58 pm Title: Chapter 13
That was an amazing story. I really enjoyed the whole series.
One question though, is everyone going to lose their wings eventually? Even Bill?
Author's Response: yes they are
Date: 06/18/09 05:54 pm Title: Chapter 13
“I will never forgive myself for not telling them that Bill’s black feathers should be falling out too, soon enough.”
“It’s all as I have foreseen it, Dunja, do not worry.”
“All the lies they went through for each other. I should have never doubted your wisdom, my Lady. I am ready for the punishment suiting my wavering faith.” – oh she knew, all along she knew.
So it was written in the Sacred Laws that blood sacrifice must be made for the chosen ones to step forward and spread their knowledge to the world. – who’s blood?
The third blow came swiftly after the second and, for the first time, she managed to catch a glimpse of Bill as he strode past her at incredible speed. She had never witnessed such energy before… it only appeared in the Goddess. – then why in a boy?
Before she said anything, Bill moved his palms apart form one another, and she heard the sound before she felt the pain. Her wings ripped from her back and plummeted to the ground, just a few seconds before she too did. An extra blast of energy from the black haired boy increased her speed and when she hit the ground she shattered. - Oh we killed Dunja for the blood sacrifice
Oh the raven the one they had as a pet is the goddess?
Hum? Maybe I do get it but? I’m not sure what other’s didn’t get versus what I do get? Hum?
Author's Response: Dunja's blood. yep. And yeah, the raven is an incarnation of a part of the Goddess's soul.
Date: 06/18/09 05:47 pm Title: Chapter 12
Bill’s body suddenly went stiff and then just seemed to break apart in his arms. He shook his brother lightly, whispering ‘Bill’ every two seconds, but the brunet didn’t respond in the slightest. – Is it Tom who’s breaking Bill?
“He’s messed with Bill’s energy levels again. Get him away and keep him away, before he does any more damage. I’ve got some serious mending to do.” – Are they like magnets? Their polarities throw the other off? Is Tom’s stronger then Bill’s? How could they not know?
It was killing Tom to watch him like this and be forced to stay away from him. Be forced to keep his worries to himself or risk injuring his brother even more. He could never hurt Bill. Who would be crazy enough to think something like that? Apparently, the gods. – so they’re being forced apart?
He turned around to leave. But not back to his room. Just out. He needed to make a decision. - Is he going to leave to save Bill?
Author's Response: Bill gets stronger whenever Tom's ahem ::blush:: intimate with him, so to speak. It's Bill who's stronger. And they not like magnets, they attract energy from each otehr and get so much in their system that they burn out. Like a short circuit.
Date: 06/18/09 05:41 pm Title: Chapter 11
“What do you want me to do?”
“Kiss me in front of Dunja tomorrow, like you didn’t realize she’s there. You know she told us she’d be leaving tomorrow night on some business. If we convince her we’ll just fuck each other’s brains out while she’s gone she won’t feel the need to send some other bullshit lino to watch over us. Then you can go sleep with Bill and I can have Shirai back.” – this girl is smart and I still don’t like her! Make her go away!
His palms were sweaty and his arms were shaking, his legs were restless and he felt like his heart might just as well pop out of his chest. He was 8 and kissing Bill for the first time all over again. – awh they kissed when they were eight? That’s so sweet!
“Never let me hear you excuse yourself for this!” the yalino scolded. “This is true love, pure and simple. No one should excuse themselves for that.” – yeah sure!
“Reluctantly, but yes. I hope he’s a better kisser with you than he was with me. At least I hope he doesn’t tremble all the time.”
“Only when I touch the right spots,” Bill answered, a bit embarrassed by his own admission to the girls. They didn’t really seem to mind though. - *giggles* awh so cute!
“Tom if you’re jealous…”
“Who, me? Jealous? Why would I be jealous? It’s just pretend, right? I’d be an idiot to think otherwise. It’s not like you’re in love with her or something.”
“Exactly!”
“Exactly…”
And they shall loose their trust in each other as the days pass, until the remains left to salvage would not be sufficient anymore.- awh! Poor babies!
Author's Response: the jist of what Dunja is saying is true though. Never excuse yourself for loving someone.
Date: 06/18/09 05:35 pm Title: Chapter 10
Everywhere he went he felt at peace and it pissed him off like hell. – lol
For the first time in his life a comment as menacing as that made him sigh in relief. The girl was just acting like she thought was best for her and for her Shirai. It was all just a game, thank Quela. – oh thank god!
So wait their kids bring about the end of the world?
From her room, sensing the energy flow increase between the two, Dunja-yalino smiled, content. It seemed like the prophecy would soon appear. - *grrr*
I’m not sure I’m winning the game! In fact I haven’t caught on I think I may be one of the ones who doesn’t get it *sigh* awh I was hoping I’d be special!
Author's Response: the end of the world as like...let's say Jesus would bring here. It woul clear out the 'sinners' and show them a 'new path'. In a wingless sort of way.rnrnOh, dear ::pats head::. You are special ::hug::
Date: 06/18/09 04:44 pm Title: Chapter 9
Your Bill…it sounded so right to hear someone finally acknowledge it. – awh
Their assigned lino, Dunja, tucked her astounding wings behind her and looked from one pair of teenagers to the other. All of them expected a thorough yelling. They did not receive anything of the sort.
“It must have been faith,” the lino said, astounded at the sight. “The will of the Goddess in all her might. To meet your spouses like this. It’s really a magnificent sight to behold.” - *groans and shakes head* can she really be that dense?
“And you’re bonding already,” Dunja continued, looking from the two holding hands to Shirai watching over Bill’s health. “I will summon your parents, Tom, and we will take all of you to the temple. You’ll live there from now on, as the Goddess intended you to.” - lol oh god!
No one noticed Bill’s bloodshot eyes opening for a second then closing up again. An eerie sense of anger was felt throughout the small room. Dunja-lino dismissed it. She shouldn’t have. – nope! A pissed off Bill is one to avoid!
Author's Response: you have no idea the extent to which Bill is pissed off.
Date: 06/18/09 04:22 pm Title: Chapter 8
“Don’t be silly. I can do it by myself just fine. I told you I only made a small amount of extra energy today. I can handle it. Now let me give it to you.”
“How?”
Bill gave one of his wicked smiles.
“Close your eyes and open your mouth.”
Tom thought he could get used to this.- Hum? *frowns* Ima so confused!
Tom was a bit pissed off that they were flying at such a high altitude, but he couldn’t deny Bill his cloud plunging. They would always get home soaked and shivering like crazy, but his brother would always be happy, and that kind of made it all worth it. Flying just above the white mist Tom was checking out his new strings while Bill popped in and out of every other cloud. – lol awh!
Tom waited for his brother to finish the sentence and almost didn’t notice the slight wobble in Bill’s direction, right before his wings stopped beating. It happened too fast for him to even catch. His brother plummeted down through the virtually inexistent layers of clouds at full speed, twisting and turning through the air as his body opposed less wind resistance. – oh that’s NOT good!!!
His body did little to break the landing and he felt his wings get crushed underneath him as Bill’s body came up over him in a thud.- oh god his wings!!!
“I’m her girlfriend, got that? And don’t worry. I’m not gonna let your brother touch her. Even if it’s the last thing I do. I don’t care what some fucked up Goddess says. I’m not breaking up with her just so she can have babies or whatnot and save mankind.”- so awesome! I was totally not expecting this at all!
“It’s a black feather. I’ve got tens of them, just like Bill has. Had them ever since I sprouted.”
For a moment Tom could have sworn he heard Dunja’s voice in his ears.
“And that somewhere in this world there will also be a girl with black feathers for Tom to marry…”
He blacked out again before he even realized what this meant. – just cause you marry them doesn’t mean you have to have sex with them. This could work out!
Author's Response: oh, it maens you had to have sex with them, actually.
Date: 06/18/09 03:12 pm Title: Chapter 7
Cry already!” Tom demanded, in a harsh tone.
“Wh-what?”
“I said cry! I know you want to, hell knows I do, so just stop trying to fill the room with stupid words and cry, okay? I’m not… it’s not like I’m gonna… I’m still here!” he spat out after a bit of a stumble and turned around. Bill pulled his hands away, two feathers from completion and looked at his brother.
“If I start then I might not be able to stop,” the boy said. – awh!
“Can I kiss you?”
“You’ve never asked permission before,” Bill said, “but yeah, you can kiss me.” He leaned in a bit and waited for Tom to pull him closer. All he felt was a slight breeze and when he opened his eyes he saw his brother a mere inch from his face, looking at him, his wings closed around Bill’s body. – awh! It’s all angsty and sad
The secret space, they called it. The way to make sure no one would see what they were saying to each other. The way to shield themselves form the outside world and, even if just for a minute, have some time to be alone with one another. He hadn’t done that since they were 11. Big boys didn’t need to do it, was the explanation Bill had received after he first complained. – lol I want wings for that too!
Author's Response: lol. that's the first time i heard someone wanting to have wings just for that XD
Date: 06/18/09 02:53 pm Title: Chapter 6
“It’s probably best like this, Bill. If my red feathers are falling off then that means I was never meant to be Quela’s messenger. That means that you and this girl are the ones and…” – awh Tom’s being all self sacrificing and stuff. *makes face* stop it tom!
Still lost, like a 4 year old in the dark woods!
Author's Response: hope you find your way out.
Date: 06/18/09 02:46 pm Title: Chapter 5
“Have sex with him?” Tom interjected. He knew Bill wouldn’t keep a steady voice to ask the question properly. He could barely manage to, himself.
“And everyone would be okay with it?”
The lino was at a loss of words. How could she ever put two brothers through that?
“Yeah. They’d have to, I mean… you were following sacred guidelines, weren’t you? It’s not like you’d do it all the time.”
“Yeah…Right.” – I can’t tell if this is them in the future? Or the past? Or if this is them but not them in a different time in a different life? But this is another clue. Tom is special because of how Bill is special.
2:3:1- And my messengers shall come in pairs, one strong in mind, one strong in heart and they will join their bodies to become one omnipotent.
2:3:6- And they shall live their whole lives together, in perfect harmony, as soulmates until I shall call them back to my side.
No one else knew about this except the linos and them. And that was how it was supposed to be until the end. – ok so it’s a profacy.
But there are two storylines one where they don’t want it and may or may not have wings and then another where they do want it and do have wings. *cries a little* I’m so confused!
Tom tried to steady his shaking hands as he hastily pulled on a robe and helped Bill on with his. He could feel his brother tense up when he touched his wings and he felt like crying. If things were going to be like this, if Bill would silently reject him for the rest of his days, he might as well be dead. He half felt like he was already. – awh!
“She has sprouted the red feathers of the Goddess. Like Tom… So that makes me right in my assumption.” – did her sprouting them make Tom loose his?
Tom never thought he would see Bill look at him like that. Anger, disappointment, violence, that he could stand, but he could never forget the look of pure, unbridled hate that burned in his brother’s once peaceful eyes. He wanted, no, needed to be dead. – oy!
They will endure much pain and sorrow from the unknowing world, and they will falter under scurrilous gazes before they can be reborn into my knowledge – oooh ouch!
Author's Response: there is no future, there is no past (lol, RENT lyrics), It's all happening in the same time period, very much normal time-space, that we all are used to. The italics part at the beginning is just them talking, not a different storyline, nothing.rnThe two events(her sprouting it and Tom losing his) are independent one from the other
Date: 06/18/09 02:35 pm Title: Chapter 4
He looked at the feathers in his hand and shivered. This was bad. He opened his drawer, put them there and locked it up. How was he ever going to tell Bill about this? – You have to understand I am so confused? I’m not normally confused. I usually get plotlines pretty quickly. I’ve read enough that they don’t throw me off. So the fact that I can’t catch on is really distressing. I know there’s some future, some past and a lot of science fiction but I can’t pick it all apart, it’s all mish-mashed together.
Tom sighed. He needed to make polite conversation just a little while longer. He couldn’t just blurt it out. You never blurt things out when Bill upset, or tired, or disappointed. If you wanted to be heard that is. – true, true!
“I’m not letting you copy my homework again if that’s what this is about. You know the math teacher started giving us separate exercises because of that.” Not that Tom minded. He usually ended up doing both sets of exercises if Bill asked long enough…and maybe promise a little reward afterwards. - *giggles* what kind of reward?
“You wanna do it now? Mom and Gordon are out for a few hours.” He was needy, so why hide it? He could never hide anything form Bill anyway.
“Mhm,” his brother half moaned back and walked off into house, to get ready. Tom watched him go with a slight smile. He hoped Bill would understand and at the same time cursed himself for ever thinking Bill wouldn’t. – when did feather’s start getting me all hot? Lol
“I think I might love you,” the brunet said playfully, nudging his brother’s head with his own. He loved it when Tom draped him, spent.
“When you’re sure about it then let me know. Now come on. We need to shower after this bath.” – lol nice!
“You’re molting again? I thought you just finished last month.”
“No… I’m not… It’s only the red ones that are falling out,” he mumbled – awh I get it I’m starting to catch on. Bill is special Tom isn’t.
And they will first doubt their true form and deny my knowledge. – these all go together and they are clues. I’m still not completely on board. Still totally thrown off!
Author's Response: lol. feathers are hot by themselves, in my pov. You have no idea to how much good use you can put them to XD. I hope you'll understand it by the end. A lot of people didn't
Date: 06/18/09 02:18 pm Title: Chapter 3
I’m just having trouble trying to get into this world.
I like it I just am still not used to everything.
Bill’s feathers were ticklish. No one else’s were. – really? Um ok! *nods*
The feather was put back into place, unplucked, and nothing happened afterwards. – does Bill have that power?
Author's Response: he has shitload of power, believe me
Date: 06/16/09 12:54 pm Title: Chapter 2
“It’s true they haven’t, but they also were not as special as you two are.” – I wonder why they are special.
She shook her head. The boys were good readers of closed minds. They were powerful. – nice!
“We’d rather not. Different colored feathers will scare our parents enough,” Bill began.
“We don’t need to make it worse by flying. We have enough explaining to do already,” Tom ended. – wow very observant boys.
And two colored angels will come from my race and bring the message of life to our kind.- hum?!
Author's Response: it's a prophecy, so you're not supposed to get it :P
Date: 06/16/09 12:36 pm Title: Chapter 1
When they were 7 and a half their dad brought them a ‘responsibility present’, as he called it. A lovely black raven, 3 years old, completely domesticated. Bill called it Blue. Tom thought it was silly to call a black bird Blue, so he named it Zib, like his favorite kory based chocolate. The raven however responded to the name Kut. The twins didn’t really know why. – lol I have a cat like that lol
This is a great start to a very interesting world!
Author's Response: thank you for thinking do :)
Date: 06/04/09 06:16 am Title: Chapter 13
THis was an odd story.
entertaining none the less.
good job.
Author's Response: thank you very much :D
Date: 12/25/08 06:47 pm Title: Chapter 9
wow im sorry i have no idea how i posted for chapter ten but its actually this chapter O.o
hope this kind of helps:
“If you’re going to nag me about how I should have made less energy I’m going to kick your ass when I get better. I’m sorry I got you hurt with this too, but I’m not apologizing for anything.”
Wanting to hit his brother for the utter stupidity he was displaying was not a first for Tom. He’d gotten used to Bill’s thinking a while ago and while he didn’t approve of it he sure as hell couldn’t get rid of it either. He bit his thumb in an attempt to bring some
Author's Response: thanks. I edited it.
Date: 12/23/08 04:55 am Title: Chapter 10
He bit his thumb in an attempt to bring some
err you kind of stopped midsentence :/
Author's Response: can you please pinpoint the paragraph? I'm so tired today I can't seem to find it on my own
Date: 12/18/08 04:15 pm Title: Chapter 13
oh WOW.... just wow...
Author's Response: thank you :) glad you liked it.