Date: 11/28/09 07:46 am Title: Chapter 2
you're haveing a lot of grammer issues, and this feels really rushed.
Author's Response: That's correct ^^' I wrote this a long while ago and I'm gonna be rewriting it as well :) So in, what, a year? I'll have this in correct writing ;) I'm sorry if it made the story less interesting or easy to write. I do hope you liked the basic idea though ^^' Thanks for your review!
xx Chi ^^
Date: 11/24/09 12:07 pm Title: Chapter 1
Sure, I will read the sequels!! Thank you
Author's Response: You're welcome ^^
xx Chi ^^
Date: 11/21/09 04:38 pm Title: Chapter 9
oh fuck!! Tom is in real trouble!! Please keep him safe!!
Author's Response: Thanks for your review ^^
Date: 11/21/09 04:31 pm Title: Chapter 8
I think Tom really loves Bill to get himself it that.
Author's Response: Hey, you've reviewed every chapter and you seem to really like the story, so I was wondering if you wanted to read the sequels too? It are: Der letste Tag (part 2) and Was sich liebt, neckt sich (part 3) :) Just look at this story and click on the series (Totgeliebt), then you'll find the overview with all the stories in the series (no, duh) :)
xx Chi ^^
Date: 11/21/09 04:31 pm Title: Chapter 8
I think Tom really loves Bill to get himself it that.
Author's Response: Thanks for your review ^^
Date: 11/21/09 04:20 pm Title: Chapter 7
What the fuck Tom is doing?? Tell is to keep an eye on Bill.
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Date: 11/21/09 04:02 pm Title: Chapter 6
Ok, I see. We have to deal with a slutty Billa. He deserved way better than that. Can't wait to see who's the new guest.
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Date: 11/21/09 03:16 pm Title: Chapter 5
Tom in Hello Kitty sweatpants. HAHAHA
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Date: 11/21/09 02:40 pm Title: Chapter 4
Seems like Bill is not out of trouble.
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Date: 11/21/09 02:15 pm Title: Chapter 2
Bill is a pimp!!!No way!!
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Date: 11/21/09 02:07 pm Title: Chapter 1
I wonder who's talking in the end dialogue. It sound like prostitution.
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Date: 11/29/08 10:12 pm Title: Epilogue
I really liked the end, and thanks for clearing up the name with Maria, even though I would have preferrered their story be a bit more fleshed out for them to be mentioned in the epilogue.
I noticed you seem to hace a bit of trouble with grammar...no offence. It may not be noticeable, but I'm a bitch like that. I was wondering if you needed a beta? I'd be happy to do it.
Author's Response: Georg's story is not that important, but I felt like mentioning it for the sequel ;-) And rnI think it's difficult to describe that many persons and it all still makes any sense xD Beta? I would like that :-) I really try, but English isn't my native language, so yeah ;-) Thanks for your reviews and reading ^^rnxx Chi
Date: 11/29/08 10:07 pm Title: Chapter 11
I liked the story, I really did. But most of it was really confusing as to what was happening, and it seemed to be resolved too quickly. I can't help but think he's going to come back...
Date: 11/29/08 09:59 pm Title: Chapter 10
You better not kill him off. Because I'll find you and kill you off. I'm serious. Anyway, great chapter, and a lot of things make a lot more sense now.
Date: 11/29/08 09:52 pm Title: Chapter 9
Okay...Bushido is a sick character, but plays a really good pimp....
Still a bit confused, mostly about whole thing with his parents and, most especially, with the scene with Georg and SHE.
Date: 11/29/08 09:46 pm Title: Chapter 8
No, your not all that bad. A lot better than some people I know. I still don't understand why Tom decided to become a prostitute...
Date: 11/29/08 09:39 pm Title: Chapter 7
Okay, this chapter, too is a bit confusing, but I understand now that Bill is a prostitute of his own choice...What I don't understand is Tom...
Date: 11/29/08 09:32 pm Title: Chapter 6
Uh oh...Who is you? Can't wait to read the next chapter.
Date: 11/29/08 09:20 pm Title: Chapter 5
Wow...Nice video. I liked it. It does work well with this chapter, doesn't it?
Anyway, I understand better now, but I'm eager to get clarification on what happened to Bill...
Date: 11/29/08 09:11 pm Title: Chapter 4
Okay, I'm confused about the second to last scene. Who's Dunja, why did Bill lie, and why would Tom admit to loving Bill after only knowing him for a few days?