Date: 09/25/19 12:25 pm Title: Chapter 79-Waking up early and driving to Berlin
this was a really good story!!
i hope that you did sequel to this
Date: 02/24/18 03:25 pm Title: Chapter 79-Waking up early and driving to Berlin
this was a really good story!!
i hope that the sequel will be done!
Author's Response: I've been working the sequel for a long time. I'll work on another chapter and post it when I can. I haven't realy added more yet bu I'll work on it. Thanks four your review on my story
Date: 08/31/14 06:47 pm Title: Chapter 79-Waking up early and driving to Berlin
Wow, this story was so long. Great job, I enjoyed reading it.
Author's Response: Yep, a bit too long. Took me about a year to finish plus setbacks with my laptop getting Viruses and breaking and needing a new power cord twice. Any who glad you enjoyed it. I am doing a sequel but I need to edit and improve it. Thanks for reviewing. I enjoyed reading them and responding
Date: 08/31/14 06:30 pm Title: Chapter 20-Revealing the truth and watching home videos
Wow, I thought she would have taken that a lot harder. I guess she doesn't realize it's not normal for men to get pregnant. Except when it's Bill.
Author's Response: She had a feeling that she was their child so when they told her she didn't care that her parents were both boys and one of them had her. Her main issue though as she gets older is that she's going to have times where she feels like she was abandoned and that the twins preferred working over being involved in her upbringing. I'm going to expand how them always working and how them not taking her on the Zimmer 483 tour when she was young led to a fear of abandonment. This chapter was a random one and not planned so I didn't do it well. I should've really gone into depth on her reaction and made it more realistic. Definitely need to work on that :)
Date: 08/31/14 05:53 pm Title: Chapter 5-Dessert and movie time
I would never let my child see a horror movie unless it was rated G or PG. What kind of parents lets their 4 year old child watch a movie about The Texas chainsaw massacre? I am not flaming or anything it's just, I don't agree with letting a 4 year old child see a movie that has that much violence, sex and swearing. No matter how much the child wants to see it.
Author's Response: Me neither, I thought when parents took their kids to see Ted they had no brains. I was actually watching the newer Texas Chainsaw Massacre movie, well actually the prequel to it and incorporated it into the story. It's not something I myself would ever allow my child to see. I didn't see those films till I was like 19. Love them though. I saw Halloween the original one at age 6 so some movies I'm not completely against a child seeing them but not at 4. Maybe 8 or 10. I wrote it without thinking about her age and all in the film. Like the blood and gore and his human skin mask. I didn't think when I wrote it, kinda inspired while I watched the movie. I may actually rewrite this chapter and lose that part and change it up.
Date: 08/31/14 05:50 pm Title: Chapter 4-Helping with dinner and misbehaving
I get 1 spanking but continuess spankings? who even does that? unless they are abusive.
Author's Response: I went a bit over board with that in this one since it was my first fic that I really got into and actually took me a long time to finish it and I tend to over do certain things such as spanking. In my more recent ones it might be one or none at all. I'm trying not to do ones where she gets spanked as much cause some people get bent out of shape over it and say its abuse or whatever and I'd rather not have that debate with people. In this case they are not abusive to her, she just happens to get more spankings cause she just will not mind. I'm toning it down though. She's not getting more than one in a story but some she doesn't get one at all . Thank you for your review.
Date: 08/31/14 05:47 pm Title: Chapter 3-Shopping trip and cleaning a messy bedroom
This is good but you wrote this line twice 'Anna looked at Bill and asked, “What did I forget to do mommy?”' Just thought I should mention that.
Author's Response: Aw crap. Something I failed to check before posting...oops lol. Thank you for telling me. I'll be fixing that. Thanks for your review
Date: 09/30/13 04:35 pm Title: Chapter 1-Parents Departure and disscussing the new rules
Anna is so cuteeeee
Author's Response: Yes she is. Cute and spoiled lol. Thank you for your review.
Date: 09/29/13 09:50 pm Title: Chapter 1-Parents Departure and disscussing the new rules
Awww. The twins are such great parents to Anna :3 so coot
Author's Response: Thank you :) I did write more with Anna in some stories if you want to read them And thank you for your review
Date: 03/25/13 02:47 pm Title: Chapter 4-Helping with dinner and misbehaving
I started off on this fic very excited, but soon my excitement diminshed. this fic is way too unrealistic. they speak too literally too seem real. "anna, go put the forks and cups on the table" and the FOUR year old child says "Alright, I will put the forks and cups on the table" and then when shes done Bill says "Thank you, I appreciate you putting the FORKS AND CUPS ON THE TABLE." you see what I mean? Its very literal. Now, I haven't read the whole fic, and I probably wont, so i dont know if this is just a ploy to make everything seem perfect, and then have something grand and huge happen, but its too unrealistic for a four year old child to speak like a proper thirty year old person. I'm not attacking you, its just very strange to me,
Author's Response: It's okay hun. I wrote this when I was 19 almost 20. that was 4 years ago and I was trying to hard to make it literal. I failed there. I can see why it's strange, I look at it and I'm like I am to literal. Thanks for your review :)
Date: 07/03/10 06:15 am Title: Chapter 37-Visiting friends and breaking up an argument
i absolutely love the spankings they are hilarious!
Author's Response: Hahaha thanks. That makes my day hearing that. They are in a sense funny to me too esspecialy when Anna acts all indifferent afterwards. Thanks for your review. I am gonna be continuing this series soon so keep an eye out for it
Date: 03/14/10 11:33 pm Title: Chapter 79-Waking up early and driving to Berlin
nice twinny =]
Author's Response: lol. Thanx. I am so working on the sequeal. It'll be a while though cause I work now. But I shall update next weekrn
Date: 03/05/10 09:41 pm Title: Chapter 79-Waking up early and driving to Berlin
awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww this was such a nice ending! and a great story!
i can't wait until the sequel!
Author's Response: Awww. Thank you. The sequel is being posted today. *huggles* Thanks for your review.
Date: 03/05/10 03:10 pm Title: Chapter 79-Waking up early and driving to Berlin
omg... its over... 79 chapters of epicness over... cant wait for the sequel
Author's Response: Yes it's over. lol. The sequel is gonna be posted today or Tommorrow. I promise. And thanks for your review. That made my day.rn
Date: 03/05/10 12:49 pm Title: Chapter 1-Parents Departure and disscussing the new rules
i have only read one chapter in this fic and i don't want to insult the author, but i do have a suggestion. i know that this story is already complete, but i think you need to use more interesting and complex verbs in the future. "he said" was overused to the point that i was almost annoyed. Please think of this as constructive critisizm. you are still a talented writer. I hope you take my suggestion into consideration. This is My opinion. Have fun with vocabulary! :) lots of love
Author's Response: I love that idea. Thank you for that consrutive critism. I love that. lol. I shall have fun with vocabulary. And thank you for reviewing. I apricate you saying I am a talented writer, I need to hear that more often. *huggles*
Date: 03/04/10 11:20 pm Title: Chapter 79-Waking up early and driving to Berlin
YAY sequel!!!
Author's Response: Oh yeah. It's comming and I shall be posting it Tommorrow or later tonight. Depends on how quick I finish the first chappie. And thanks for reviewing.
Date: 03/04/10 10:49 pm Title: Chapter 79-Waking up early and driving to Berlin
that was to cute! Love it
Author's Response: Thank you. I just posted th sequel too. *huggles* Thanks for reviewing.
Date: 03/04/10 09:40 pm Title: Chapter 79-Waking up early and driving to Berlin
Oh no, not over, not over!!! *cries* I LOVE THIS FIC . . .
Author's Response: *huggles* I know you love it. And their is a sequel being posted today. It's awesome. *huggles* Thanks for your review. I loves it.rn
Date: 03/04/10 09:22 pm Title: Chapter 79-Waking up early and driving to Berlin
yay, i loved it and i can't wait for the sequel!!!
Author's Response: *huggles* Thank you. The sequel will be posted later. Look for it and thank you for reviewing.
Date: 02/21/10 08:31 pm Title: Chapter 1-Parents Departure and disscussing the new rules
yay!!!! lol awsome twinny cant wait for the next one :)
Author's Response: Lol. I shall be updating in the next couple of hours. I am finishing up the chappie. lolrnLook for it twinny. *huggles*rn