Date: 05/24/10 12:58 am Title: He knew, suddenly, what forever looked like
lovely, lovely story. I must say, though, it was a bit hard to tell who was talking and the story does jump around a lot like you mentioned. but I still find it to be a fantasically wonderful read.
Author's Response: thanks! the hard-to-tell-who-was-talking bit was actually intentional, but the jumping around bit wasn't, at least not really. which is why i'm going to edit it someday. anyway, thanks so much for the review. :)
Date: 05/02/10 08:35 am Title: He knew, suddenly, what forever looked like
I will admit that if you hadn't mentioned this fiction in your email, I probably wouldn't have read it so soon, maybe I would have picked out another story. But I don't know about you, but I'm overly superstitious, so when this story popped up in the Random Story box, I immediately opened hotmail to make sure the titles were corresponding. They were, so I decided I couldn't postpone the reading, since apparently this story wanted to be read so bad, lol. So here I am.
You know, the more I read your stories, the more your nickname's origins become clear. You obviously like nostalgia and melancholy, and I don't know whether you just have talent or we can put it down to practice (and practice and practice and practice...), but you come off immensely painfully when you're dealing with it. So please know, whatever you're going to read, you're practically the best author on this site, in my opinion.
So, about editing this story. I *personally* disagree; every story you write is a part of you, a part of your growth and how you used to think, and changing it in my opinion is like touching something sacred. I understand I sound exaggerated, but are you sure you want to? Rewriting it would be like... modifying a memory. But you're free, of course, to do what you feel is best for you. Only you can know that, in fact, surely not I. I'm just here to give you my opinion.
Other than that, know that nostalgia was omnipresent. In Magi I've met the same main thematic, and both stories were perfectly made, written and developped. What probably makes them so sad and nostalgic (yes, I'm using it because you like it, but I'm not just trying to please you, I use it because it's true) is that memories are everywhere in this, the way you structured the whole thing is brilliant.
I like your twincest here, it must be one of the most realistic ones I've read in a long time. I also liked it how they kept some things for themselves, without saying them aloud. *pets the twins*
Then. There's something I want to say, something that will make me sound contradictory, but the response in me is still fresh from my reading, and I need to say it. So, as you know, I love your style, I admire you for developping it in English, which is not, in fact, your first language. Seriously, that's brilliant, and not everyone can do it. The style in this story is absolutely elegant. But maybe too elegant. I got the feeling that there could've been so many more emotions, but they were kind of suffocated by the solemnity and seriousness of the style; probably a simpler writing would've done it. Feel free to answer this, because I'm not sure myself of what I'm saying, and (here comes the contradictory part) I definitely loved the way it was written, it flows... well, perfectly. I never throw any reference to perfection if I don't mean it.
Oh. I could kiss you for the quotes. This is something we've never discussed, but quotes are something I truly respect. They are extremely profound in my opinion (when they're used properly), since you have to have control over the deepest meaning of both your story and the quote to be able to associate them. So... I'm positively impressed with you, once again.
I'm not going to bother you over a chaptered fic if you recognise I've been a good girl for avoiding any mention or reference to JMPT. :D
I made it! :D
Have a nice Sunday, :)
- Nicole
Author's Response: Dude, I'm a bit superstitious like that too! And that's eerie. o.O lol, I wouldn't put it down to talent alone, but you know. Thank you. :) And when you put it like that...I hadn't even thought of it that way! Now I'm hesitating. Now I'm very reluctant, actually. Gah. We'll see. I wanted the memories to be hovering over both Magi and TBTS, so thanks for catching that. Hmm, you know, you might have a point. See, I should edit it! But...I don't know how to write "simple" xD Oh, I love quotes too! Seriously. Sometimes they just set the tone for a story perfectly. LOL, you've been a very good girl! But I honestly adore your love affair with that story. ^_^ Have a nice Sunday (what's left of it), and thanks so much for the review! <3
Date: 10/15/09 07:01 am Title: He knew, suddenly, what forever looked like
Wow. Probably the most beautiful thing Ive ever read. Im blown away.
Author's Response: thank you so much. =)
Date: 01/11/09 08:53 am Title: He knew, suddenly, what forever looked like
You're the only one who could make me read twincest and love it. I wish I could express how this story made me feel. I almost couldn't read it, but I also had to, and every once in a while I had to stop and catch my breath, sort my thoughts. I didn't even realize I was holding my breath at some parts. It's like you manage to put into words feelings I didn't even know exist, and yet you make them feel familiar, but faraway. I still don't understand it, I read all your stories and I still can't understand why they affect me so much. I have so much more to say but I don't know how. Just wanted to tell you that, and I am definitely waiting to see more works from you. And now I'm gonna submit this review before I start feeling too stupid and delete it.
Author's Response: You should see me whenever I get one of your reviews; I get so giddy. I'm so glad I do that to you, because no one could make me love Billshido (though some people make me read it). I know what you mean, some stories make me feel so much that I can't express myself and I find myself almost wishing I hadn't read them. To be honest, I'm not a writer, every word I manage to get on paper takes so much effort, and I never seem to be able to write down what I really want to convey. Reading your review, however, made me think that maybe I succeeded, if only this once. This response is getting ridiculously long but I just wanted to tell you how much I appreciate your reviews. :)
Date: 01/03/09 12:54 pm Title: He knew, suddenly, what forever looked like
Agh, who can resist that face? I'll dig up the old files I've got, I guess and give them a good looksee. xD
Author's Response: Yay!!!! You keep making my day, seriously. XD You're such an awesome writer and if you ever wrote that I could die happily. ^_^
Date: 01/03/09 12:45 pm Title: He knew, suddenly, what forever looked like
Brothers on a Hotel Bed was the second DCFC song I ever heard and I love it so hard. Liek, woah. And this is the most beautiful take on that song ever. I tried to write a fic based on this way back, but I scrapped it because it was so eurgh. But this just...es geht. ;)
Author's Response: BOAHB was the first DCFC song I ever heard and it owns. My. Soul. I have the silliest urge to cry every time I listen to it. OMG you have to write something twincesty based on that song!! Please? *Bill-eyes* Thank you so much, this fic was my baby for a long time and it means so much to me that you like it. :)
Date: 12/22/08 08:56 am Title: He knew, suddenly, what forever looked like
Painfully convulted, fragmented, and beautiful. Some very nice metaphors in there. The whole thing is just covered in sepia. I adore it.
Author's Response: Thank you. :)
Date: 11/30/08 06:44 pm Title: He knew, suddenly, what forever looked like
painful but beautiful. I can't tell if it ended on a positive note or not though.
Author's Response: That was my intention. ;) Thanks for the review! :)
Date: 11/02/08 04:02 am Title: He knew, suddenly, what forever looked like
I know I told you some time ago that I was saving this to read, and it took me until now to do so. How I wish I'd have read it earlier.
This world was just covered in sepia. You did such a wonderful job of conveying their pain, the dull ache. They tried so desperately to have a normal life, doing every "normal" thing they were supposed to do, even though though they were missing half their soul. Which for them, might as well have been half their body.
The language and metaphors were beautiful, as always. Striking, and often unexpected. You said that it was meant to be confusing, but I didn't really find it so. There were times I was frustrated with lack of information, things deliberately left unsaid. But then it occured to me that maybe it's not necessary to know everything, to know what happened here or there or why, because, as maybe the twins are learning, for this, right now is more important. Whatever and whenever right now may be.
I'm afraid I'm not making any sense anymore. Let me just say, then, that it is beautiful and painful, and I loved it.
Author's Response: You know, I was really worried you wouldn't like this. xD You are making sense, and I think you took it in as well as I could've hoped, understanding it like I wanted it to be understood. Anyway, thank you so much. Really, it means a lot to me. <3
Date: 10/24/08 08:50 am Title: He knew, suddenly, what forever looked like
that was so sad but so beautiful at the same time.I love the way you wrote everything, it was so real, intense and painful. I really loved it.
Awesome work.
Author's Response: Thank you, you have no idea how much that means to me. <3
Date: 10/24/08 05:40 am Title: He knew, suddenly, what forever looked like
beautiful and so painful and gah... I loved it.
Author's Response: Aww, thank you so much!! <3
Date: 10/22/08 03:51 pm Title: He knew, suddenly, what forever looked like
*claps enthusiastically*
How I've waited for this, you can't imagine! Ever since you showed me your banners (great choice, this one, btw), and I read the quotes, I've wanted to read the whole story.
Your muse is amazing... could I borrow it for some time?^^
Beautiful story, beautiful words, every line was a gem, really. The whole fic screams nostalgia, shattered dreams and tentative hopes, and it's great. Wonderfully great. Made me shiver, really.
I like the way you portrayed Dylan and Kat, because they're just normal people who got caught up in something they can't and wouldn't understand, something that's way beyond them.
Bill's feelings, Tom's thoughts, everything was perfectly handled. You did one really fine job, believe me!
Thanks for sharing this, and don't let the muse leave you!=)
Author's Response: Yay!!! I can imagine, what with WOAS and BH and everything... *hint hint* Yeah, of course, we can trade!! ^.^ That's exactly what I wanted it to do; nostalgia, shattered dreams and tentative hopes. God, you get everything I was trying to convey. Did I mention that I love you?^^ Yeah, I couldn't make Dylan and Kat into assholes, no way. Thanks so much for the review, and I'll force her to stay! <333 ;-)
Date: 10/22/08 12:37 pm Title: He knew, suddenly, what forever looked like
wow i loooove this. so poignant! i especially love the first sentence. when i read that, i knew i was gonna love the whole thing. i love the conciseness and privateness of the dialogue. i love the quotations. omg rimbaud rimbaud rimbaud! this is just so wonderful.
Author's Response: Wow, thanks!! That's so nice of you. <3 Yeah, Rimbuad is great, isn't he? Or was, whatever. xD Thanks for the review!!! =)
Date: 10/22/08 12:14 pm Title: He knew, suddenly, what forever looked like
I didn't mean any of that to sound bad, if it did, it was all compliments.
Author's Response: lol, I'm sorry if I sounded offensive. XD I just wanted to explain. I took it as compliments, really. ;-)
Date: 10/22/08 12:06 pm Title: He knew, suddenly, what forever looked like
That was painfully convoluted and very nice to read.
Author's Response: Thank you so much!! <3
Date: 10/22/08 12:04 pm Title: He knew, suddenly, what forever looked like
Hmm, this is distinguishably different from the other stuff that you've written. I think it takes a lot more to understand this and I think you really have to pay attention and read between the lines. Good job, it's very lovely, but also depressing.
Author's Response: I know it is, since I don't stick to just one style. I can't. Also, I deliberately wrote it so it would confusing and not a really easy read. Depressing? That's my middle name, and I was aiming for a depressed atmosphere. But anyway, thanks for the review! =)