Date: 01/13/09 01:49 pm Title: .E
Uhmmm...
"You‘re hot then our cold"
“Do why did I do it?"
I love this, really!!! Go on!!!!
Author's Response: rni fixed it. Thanks!!! :"
Date: 01/13/09 12:41 pm Title: .E
Aww .. beautiful ending to this chapter, looking forward to the next one
Author's Response: You too? ;3. Thanks!
Date: 01/13/09 10:04 am Title: .E
Yes yes you're write just the way I like long good and etc. you know what ı mean :D Ohh soooo goood but you should write much more fast ...
Author's Response: If you keep going 'Ohh sooooo gooood' I'd write as fast as you want! LOL.
Date: 01/13/09 07:11 am Title: .E
Oh hawt daayyuuum!! So hawt!! Billa can't leave Tomi though! I forbid it. :P
Author's Response: LOL. I 'm so happy you forbid it. Now, the question is will Bill comply.
Date: 01/13/09 06:28 am Title: .E
whats really bad.... there is a tokio ad at the bottom thats all....
p202312 30 y.o 49kg/ 164 cm bejing.... lol
Author's Response: LMFAO. Hilarious!
Date: 01/13/09 01:27 am Title: .E
*sigh and smile*
Author's Response: *eats a cookie* I know! Great isn't it? LOL.
Date: 01/13/09 01:10 am Title: .E
Yay, an update!!!!! I hope you update soon, this is one of my favorites!!
Author's Response: :} apparently this is everyone's favorite! :D and I will update soon.
Date: 01/13/09 01:02 am Title: .E
gentle voice laced in illicit passion. – yummy description.
“What do you think, dumb-ass. We’re going shopping.” Tom chided as he retreated down the hall, clueless to Bill’s cheerful expression. - *flutter claps, heart swells, and giggles* Awh! Yeah!
20,000 € later - *coughs and sputters* OMG!
“Only if I can take it off, afterwards.” Tomi hissed as he nudged their noses together before Bill whipped his tongue out and grazed it against Tom’s neck causing Bill’s victim to tremble in excitement. Tom wrapped his strong arm round Bill’s thin waist and pulled him closer.
“You can do more than that afterwards,” Bill moaned as Tom sucked on his neck gently, -mmmhhhh *moans* OMG yes please!
“Please don’t. The nicer you are the more I might fall for you, and I don’t want to. What’s the point? I’m gone in a few weeks, Tomi.” – but why would Tom buy Bill all those clothes if he didn’t plan on keeping him?
Bill knew what he had to do, even if they weren’t going to be happy about it. – this whole section is slit your wrists depressing, I just want to cry!
Tom finally broke down once he was in his shower, knowing that Bill couldn’t hear his cries from inside of the bedroom. Tom threw his back against the tile, hands gripping his dreads at the roots trying to stop himself from crying. – oh sad Tom broke himself!
“Bushido said he can treat me better than you can…prove him wrong, please, Tomi.”
“I promise you, Billa. I promise.” – YEAH! I can stop slitting my wrists!
Author's Response: LOL, I lubs you i_is_anonymous. Your reviews are freakin' awesome! :}
Date: 01/13/09 12:58 am Title: .L
Steamy!!
Author's Response: :} thnks!!!
Date: 01/13/09 12:51 am Title: .L
Oh wow. Talk about intense.
I'm a twincester to the core, Billshido is ok every now and then, but not when it wins the twins in a fic. Except with this one I don't know - Bill is such an adorable sweetheart and he deserves someone to just worship him. I don't really think Tom is good enough for him at all, he's such a douche. And I hope he's being like possessed or something, he'd better get his act together and do a lot of begging for Bill to want him. I do have some faith in Tom though as the guys said that being an ass is not his usual self.
This is such a great idea, can't wait to see how it all goes down :) Or who goes down, haha.
Author's Response: :} thank you so much for the review. I don't think Tom deserves Bill, but watch Tom try. ;*
Date: 01/12/09 11:52 pm Title: .E
OH MY GOD
Author's Response: :flails:: SWEET JEBUS! Did unrockroll just review my fic?! OMG! This is better than Christmas! :D! You were my first fic I've ever read [TH-Slash on LJ]. I think I faint happily now!! :faints:
Date: 01/08/09 10:50 pm Title: .L
oooh me likey
Author's Response: :}
Date: 12/26/08 08:57 pm Title: .L
Then he remembers the handful of Bill he wasn’t expecting. – Nice line!
“Hell yeah, I can’t have you frolicking in my house, making it gay—,”
“—Er than it already is?” – LMFAO OMG so funny!!!
Hospital – nope wrong word hospitable is the word you want there.
Oops now their model is all sick and Bill has to fill in. He he
What did Georg mean he knew that Bill was a boy? Did that mean that he knew he was a boy before he arrived? Hum? That would be a twist!!!
I like the play between Georg, Gustav and Bill. Nice
“Where are taking him?” – oops again.
I love Tom’s progression of slow realization that he missed Bill. The details the through process.
Two hours passed, and he just couldn’t take it. He grabbed his keys – lol didn’t make it very long did he?
“Come here, we’re going home.” – awh!
stab you in the mouth – huh? Lol
“How DARE you go off with another man! - *gapes* and *laughs through breaths*
and suddenly, was kissing Bill breathlessly. - *gasp* oh my?! O.o
all he wanted was Bill to keep moaning his name in that beautiful voice of his. *shudder, moans, and sighs* Oh god!
Bill was going to come.
And Tom would be the one to do it. – *sighs* oh good lines
Oh the sex scene was delicious!
Author's Response: aww, your review has inspired me! :3 I'll update tonight!! :}
Date: 12/26/08 08:07 pm Title: .A
OMG OMG he finally figured it out! OMG
“Don’t fucking touch me you fag!” – hurtful words!!!
ballsy-ness - *makes a face* we don’t need to make up awkward words now do we?
I like how strong your Bill is!!!! Very nice. He’s feminine and wants to be loved but isn’t weak, very nice!
Oh Bill is just pathetic after being attacked. It’s heart breaking, good job!
Stuck for a month huh? And don’t emotionally damage the merchandise lol
Their angry dialogue is hilarious! ““Pssh, I can’t blow on anything that small.”
Ass back!!! Lol OMG you’re very funny!!!
breathing hotly from what both parties thought was rage. – nice subtlety
ha ha Tom's gay!
Author's Response: Thanks for appreciating my ballsyness and humor. :} you're awesome!
Date: 12/26/08 07:18 pm Title: .M
I’ll be disclaimed – you mean disowned?
Flight 483 from Magdeburg is now unloading at gate 89 – lol 483
… and absolutely fuckable – awesome!!!! I love this line!!
“Yup, Cadillac Escalade. It’s my baby, well until you came along.” To said sweetly and Bill felt his cheeks burn. – omg so cheesy! *covers face and giggles* But just the right amount and not too much! Well done *giggles more*
and right to room number – sarcastic ha ha *eye roll* too much 483
the details about Bill’s history were perfect just the right amount, not too much not too little. Just right!
Sometimes the dialogues is a little iffy? Like the photo shoot conversation. Eehh it was a little? I’m not sure but it wasn’t quite right.
“Tomi, I’m not a bride.” Bill said seriously, but Tom just kissed him on the nose.
“Well, I know that, but you know what I mean.” – OMG awesome! They almost cleared up the confusion but nope!!!
…wishing that Tom would their lip-lock up. – what? There’s an error somewhere in here! I can’t figure out what it’s supposed to say.
But Tom felt WAY more than what he bargained for. - *GASP* O.O oh my!!!
This is a great great great start. You are very funny! Your timing is great!. A few small errors here and there, and some of the dialogue is little awkward which detracts from the rest of the story but all in all a great story!!! I’m falling in love with it!
Author's Response: Wow, that was an awesome review, you are incredible. I'm working on fixing the errors so don't worry!! You made me squee! Thanks!
Date: 12/23/08 11:54 pm Title: .L
M.
A.
L.
**E.**
is next, ja?
:D
Author's Response: Yay!! You're right! I'm trying to start a trend! :3
Date: 12/18/08 12:13 am Title: .L
Just when I was going to beat Tomi up for treating Bill like shit you go and make him all possessive and tender (my favorite kink *__*)
Lovely chapter, update soon please! Merry Xmas (in case the next chapter won't come soon enough)
Author's Response: aww thanks!!!! :}
Date: 12/17/08 10:32 pm Title: .L
i really liked this chap. except tom was such a douche! but the smut did make up for it ;] hope u can update again :)
Author's Response: I know, wasn't that just great?! I did that for that exact reason!! :3
Date: 12/14/08 04:35 pm Title: .L
*hugs*
I hope things get better for you and you get the fuel needed to continue!
Author's Response: Thanks!!!! That means alot
Date: 12/14/08 01:20 am Title: .L
Gahh!~ Tom's PMS-ness is pissing me off!
Does he want Bill or not!?
He'd be horrbile if he's just messing with Bill's heartt~ D:
great chapter! update again pleasee?
:)
Author's Response: I know, but it makes for good substance!