Date: 10/08/08 04:48 pm Title: Chapter 1 (and only)
beautiful.
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it!
Date: 10/08/08 03:29 pm Title: Chapter 1 (and only)
Very nice. Thank you!
Author's Response: Thanks you so much!
Date: 10/08/08 01:09 am Title: Chapter 1 (and only)
Good story, but some small parts of the story are kinda, well they could have been worded slightly different.
But all in all it's really good!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. What parts did you have in mind?
Date: 10/06/08 09:33 pm Title: Chapter 1 (and only)
Really nice first fic! Wow. You do read a lot, though, and that helps.
Loved the detail, loved the plot. Would have liked to see it chaptered. It wouldn't even have to be a long fic, but several more chapters would have given this the completeness it deserves.
Definitely looking forward to more from you! :)
Author's Response: Thank you so much. I just got your email btw. I sent you one back. Thanks so much for the offer I really appreciate it! And thanks for your thoughts on this story. I know it would have made a good multi-chapter fic. I just couldn't do it. Not my first time! I was freaked out as it was!rnrnThank you again!
Date: 10/06/08 03:05 pm Title: Chapter 1 (and only)
WOW i loved it
Author's Response: Thank you!
Date: 10/06/08 01:33 pm Title: Chapter 1 (and only)
I'm still writing. Only one chaptered fic, but mainly one shots, pwp's to be honest. Thanks though ^.^
Date: 10/06/08 12:19 pm Title: Chapter 1 (and only)
that was so cute I think I'm starting to like happy endings -whimpers- mommy I'm scared
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it! And what's wrong w/ happy endings? I'm a total sucker for them!
Date: 10/06/08 11:29 am Title: Chapter 1 (and only)
Personally, I don't think you should have wrote this like this.
Not as a one-shot I mean.
It'd have done so well as a chaptered fic.
I'd love to know what happened before they found each other, in more detail I mean.
What happened later that night and what happened later on in their lives, like, when David finds out that Tom is in love with the slave, or if they do have to run, what happens. etc.
Any thought to making a series of it?
I really did enjoy this, I hope you write more.
Author's Response: Thank you. I really needed my first story to be a one shot for my own sanity but I know it would have been a better chapter fic. At the moment I don't hae any plans but maybe later I'll gut it and turn it into a chapter fic.rnrnThanks so much for the review!rnrnBTW where have you been lately, I love your stories and want more!
Date: 10/06/08 10:31 am Title: Chapter 1 (and only)
i really liked this story. it made me upset that it was a one shot. the entire idea for the story was good, i think you could have managed to lengthen it though, spread out the events over a couple chapters instead of one. overall though i loved it! keep writing!
Author's Response: I could have, but then I would have given myself a total headach. I needed my first story to be a oneshot. I've never written anything like this before and I needed something as stress free as possible. But yeah, it probably would have been a better multi-chapter story.rnrnThank you again!
Date: 10/06/08 09:28 am Title: Chapter 1 (and only)
Wow it's hard to believe this is your first story. This is really good, the writing is nice and the format is good too. My first story was nothing like this lol it was a horrible mess of jumbled up words. And I thought it was the best thing on earth. I think it's sad that they sold Bill to slavery because he was the weaker one. No child should have to go through that. I'm glad his brother Tim found him though, that was very sweet. After all those years of thinking about him, he was right under his nose and he didn't even notice him. Very cute, I really enjoyed reading this.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! And I'm sure your first story wasn't that bad. And yeah, I didn't go into their family so much but I think it came across clearly enough.rnrnThanks!
Date: 10/06/08 09:17 am Title: Chapter 1 (and only)
I liked it--cute and hot.
Author's Response: Thank you!
Date: 10/06/08 08:52 am Title: Chapter 1 (and only)
I liked it girl,well done!
Author's Response: Thank you so much!
Date: 10/06/08 07:30 am Title: Chapter 1 (and only)
OMG!!! Hun-eh That was pure genius, and here you are saying you write trash!! You should be ashamed!! This amazing!! and Im astonished that you havent started writing sooner!!! I need more and I'm not afraid to say it, I WANT MORE!!!
Author's Response: *Grins for ear to ear* THANKS SO MUCH!! You really know how to make a girl smile! I was so afraid it would suck since I read so many first stories that are good ideas but totaly destroyed by bad writing (I'm not afraid to say it I'm just afraid to be it). I haven't got anything else planned but maybe I should look at those challenges people post. I might get some ideas from that.rnrnThanks again. :)
Date: 10/06/08 06:23 am Title: Chapter 1 (and only)
OH MY GOD !!!
why the HELL didn't you tell me ???
seriously Queen this was...this was...aaaaaaaa, I can't believe you managed to keep something as good as this a secret !
Jesus, the saving Bill and the Tom as a sexy ass master/bigbrother ... are you trying to kill me?
I can only say WOW, I means seriously, this was a big WOW
I loved your writing style and how you pictured Bill's fright and Tom's longing for his twin. And oh my sweet lord, having Tom go all dark and sexy was a big bonus !
If you read through it again, I think you'll find some typos, but they're not big enough to throw the reader off, so it's not a big deal
gonna mail you as soon as I can, girl
love ya
Author's Response: Oh thank god! I was afraid you were upset w/ me! Thank you so much lovey! Yeah, ya want to know a secret? I wrote this last night in three hours. It came out of the middle of nowhere and I blew off latin to write it so you know it was pressing! I though about emailing it to you but then I was just like, na, I'll suprise her! But then if you didn't respond I would have sent it to you. I'm so glad you liked it! And you caught most of what I was trying to do! The Dark/master Tom thing was someting I hoped would be picked up on. I hope it was romantic enough. I was afraid some of that was lost. Also it didn't drag did it? I looked over it and was worried it was too long. rnrnSorry about the typos. Unbetaed. Can't figure out how to get one. Not that I have any more story ideas anyway, but still. I would be a good thing to know right?rnrnThanks again love!
Date: 10/06/08 04:26 am Title: Chapter 1 (and only)
I loved it!!!!!!!!!! That's all I can say, I loved it!
Author's Response: Awww! Thank you so much! *blushes*
Date: 10/06/08 04:01 am Title: Chapter 1 (and only)
*claps hands* brilliant story!
BRAVOOO!!! *throws you flowers*
Author's Response: Thank you! *Bows* You must be the famous Andy! Luce loves you! Thank you so much!
Date: 10/06/08 03:28 am Title: Chapter 1 (and only)
Luuuuvly. Seriously, as fluffy as candy floss. I want more, so be sure to post your things here more often. :D
Author's Response: Aww! thank you so much! I'm still trying to get over the shyness factor, but, I'll try. Just now for a while I think. Maybe something'll come. We'll see.
Date: 10/06/08 02:58 am Title: Chapter 1 (and only)
Awww that was so cute!
Author's Response: Thanks:)
Date: 10/06/08 02:25 am Title: Chapter 1 (and only)
Wow, I loved this. I love the setting; not at all conventional. It's always nice to read something with a plot. Although, I did spot some mistakes. You changed from past to future tense in the middle of the story and then went back to past tense. Also there were some spelling mistakes. I only remember "waste" which is actually "waist", but yeah. Nothing too bad.
All in all, I loved it! Keep up the good work ^^
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I've had that setting in my head for ages and needed to do something w/ it. I'm just super shy and felt like a total idiot writing this. And sorry about the mistakes. I haven't figured out the beta thing so it wasn't, ya know... betaed? *hides* sorry about that. I'm glad you liked it anyway. :)
Date: 10/06/08 02:24 am Title: Chapter 1 (and only)
aw..this is a sweet story.. i am glad they found each other. I am surprised that it was a one-shot.. it seemed more like a multi-chapter story.. ahhaha to me at least. I dunno to me it felt like after Tom recognized Bill and they hugged [which i thought was soo cute~~ :33] the little smut section was um..slighty rushed?? 0o;; but i don't mind...XDD cause who could say no to some nice smut. XDD i am just saying..^^;;but overall it is a very cute story!! ^^
Author's Response: Thanks so much! This was my first story so I was a little freaked out over writing the smut. I kept hoping I could wrap it up sooner actually. But that would have been WAY too rushed. And yeah, they jumped right into it, but I was trying to get across that they'd been slowly falling in love with the idea of each other for a long time and couldn't resist when they saw each other again.rnrnSo, yeah, thanks again.