Date: 11/27/08 09:17 pm Title: Chapter 5
"Tom was gripping the inside of Bill’s elbow, just where his pulse was clear and steady. It always soothed him to feel his twin’s heartbeat and he did it often before a show. Bill’s eyes met his in understanding. As twins they shared a connection not many people could recognise" that part is real and I think is just about the sweetest thing EVER!
Author's Response: I know. I think it's so sweet too.
Date: 11/10/08 04:33 pm Title: Chapter 5
awwww that was amazingly cute i wish it didnt end lolz
Author's Response: But at least it was a happy end :)Thank you for reviewing <3
Date: 11/05/08 05:46 pm Title: Chapter 5
omfg!!
I really enjoyed reading your ff, it was amazing!
Love it!
Author's Response: Wow. Thank you very much! <3
Date: 11/05/08 02:25 pm Title: Chapter 5
Wow, just wow. Ive loved every single chapter of this story, but I'm so sad its over! Very well done. *favorited*
Author's Response: Love you for that positive response. Hopefully you'll like the next one as well. I'll promise to post a new chapter of a story once a week, until I run out of ideas.
Date: 11/05/08 11:23 am Title: Chapter 1
LOVE IT!
Author's Response: Thank you <3
Date: 11/02/08 09:42 pm Title: Chapter 5
Aww that was a very cute ending well done.
Author's Response: Thank you! <3
Date: 11/02/08 04:36 am Title: Chapter 5
Omg, I love this story so much. :o
Too bad it has come to an end.
Thank you so much for writing & posting it :D
Author's Response: Aww, thank you! I'll have a new one up next Saturday if you're interested in reading more :)
Date: 11/01/08 11:10 pm Title: Chapter 5
^_^ loved it!!!!!
Author's Response: Thanks!!!
Date: 11/01/08 10:58 pm Title: Chapter 5
Absolutely beautiful. The entire story had such beautifully written realistic dialogue.
Author's Response: Oh, I'm happy to hear you think so. So glad you liked it. love.
Date: 11/01/08 05:55 pm Title: Chapter 5
Love It!!
Author's Response: Thank you!
Date: 11/01/08 03:11 pm Title: Chapter 5
AWWWWWW!!!!!!
Author's Response: <3
Date: 11/01/08 02:40 pm Title: Chapter 5
Awwww :D
This was short story, but it was so cute and love-filled ^_^
Author's Response: Yes. I'm a very impatient person, so I can't keep a story go on and on. I want to get to the good stuff as soon as possible I'm afraid ;)
Date: 11/01/08 02:10 pm Title: Chapter 5
This just keeps getting hotter! I love it! SO sexy. Yumm. And the last line is so beautiful!
Author's Response: Thank you. I wanted romance as well as some 'smuttiness' <3
Date: 11/01/08 01:37 pm Title: Chapter 5
*Cries*
I realy loved reading this story! I totally love it!!!!
Author's Response: Thank you! That makes me happy to hear. <3
Date: 10/25/08 05:41 pm Title: Chapter 4
I really love how well written the struggle between Bill and Tom is described in this story. It seems like it's less fantasy and feels more realistic; it's amazing.
Author's Response: Thank you for those wonderful words. It means a lot to me that you liked it. <3
Date: 10/25/08 11:17 am Title: Chapter 4
This is so amazingly hot
Author's Response: Oh, you haven't seen hot yet ;)
Date: 10/19/08 08:05 pm Title: Chapter 3
First the concrit:
1. Watch your sentence structure - some sentences are rather choppy. I advise reading your story out loud to yourself, it helps with the flow :)
2. Avoid cliches, even if they are meant to be. I winced a little when Bill said that cliche toward the end.
3. This is just my opinion, but it might have been better if Bill hadn't agreed so quickly. But if you can work with it, go for it! I plan on reading this all the way through :)
Good stuff:
1. Tom's voice is there. Good job!
2. Nice play on Bill's feminine side, his vocal tones, his subtle hand gestures
3. Lol @ Tom being so nervous and irritable
4. Great suspense as the end. I think I held my breath, hahaha.
5. Great last sentence - Bill, of course, would probably be the sensible one. Tom would be like "Sure/what?! NOOO!" So that last line was very sad :(
Good job! I look forward to reading more :)
Author's Response: I'm glad you like it and about my writing...I think it's just the way I write. Hopefully my english will get better with every story :)
Date: 10/19/08 01:48 pm Title: Chapter 3
I really love this story, and its written so well because I can feel Toms pain. Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thank you so much. I'm really glad you enjoyed it. <3
Date: 10/19/08 12:51 pm Title: Chapter 3
OMG!!!! No!!! This isn't happening to us!!! How can't they not just realize it each other they want!!!! Buuuuuhuuuuuu!!!!*Sobs hysterically*
Author's Response: I think they do realize they want each other, but it is a very forbidden love and therefore not that easy. Hopefully they work it out somehow :)