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Reviewer: emogurl1306 Signed [Report This]
Date: 07/14/10 12:11 am Title: Chapter 1

more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more

Reviewer: nastyfreak Signed [Report This]
Date: 05/21/10 03:13 pm Title: Chapter 1

i like how you made toms character. its really good. like he wants bill with him but pushes him away because he dont want to admit the fact that he loves him more than a brother. really great job :D

 

Reviewer: qt_2t94 Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/03/09 08:26 pm Title: Chapter 1

Haha I'll admit I semi-spazzed at the end there but truly, the fact that you were able to cut it off is a sign of a good writer. It's a better piece this way, but to be perfectly honest, I want to know how Bill reacted xD

You created a really great mood and atmosphere, and I really liked that it was from frustrated!Tom's pov. Tom just seems like a more angsty character, and it worked fantastically. Very well done!

Author's Response: Ah, thank you so much for understanding the ending! That made me so happy! As did all of your other compliments, I appreciate them very much. (Yes! I love angsty Tom too!)rnrnI know, I think I'm going to finally that second part...

Reviewer: tinkersowner123 Signed [Report This]
Date: 02/14/09 10:03 pm Title: Chapter 1

i want more

Author's Response: thanks! i was planning on writing more, exccept school got so insane i took a break from fanfiction, but you never knew, maybe i'll get back to it one of these days...

Reviewer: FairyCelt Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/05/09 09:17 am Title: Chapter 1

You have a wonderful way of describing things! I could clearly picture everything from the way Bill was holding Tom, to Tom's emotions, to the smoke from the cigarette. And what a way to end the story! Really awesome!

Author's Response: Aw, thank you so much! You're one of the few people that doesn't hate the ending, and that makes me so happy! =)

Reviewer: violet_star77 Signed [Report This]
Date: 11/30/08 12:31 pm Title: Chapter 1

i certainly hope there is more to this!! its a great one-shot but it would make an even better story. =) keep up the great work please!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your reivew! I actually am writing a chapter two for it, so keep on the outlook for it! =)

Reviewer: Billith Signed [Report This]
Date: 10/02/08 03:53 pm Title: Chapter 1

Damn! why did you stop?!
arrrghh it was really good, those sensations Tom felt when Bill was pressed up against him...you should have continued!! 'cause it's so great!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I thought continuing it might ruin it. You're review was so sweet - thank you again! =)

Reviewer: be_truthful Signed [Report This]
Date: 09/30/08 09:06 pm Title: Chapter 1

I actually kind of like the way you ended it....It's different than most B/T stories I've read since it's TOM freaking out and not Bill. It's a nice change and the ending sort of leavs you thinking...Nicely written, I swear, I can almost feel the tension.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for liking the ending! I thought I was the only one who liked cliffhangers. You're review was so sweet - thanks again! =)

Reviewer: lipa Signed [Report This]
Date: 09/28/08 09:03 pm Title: Chapter 1

WHAAAAT?
o.o
what a pissmeoff cliff hanger!!
anyway, that was well done ^^

Author's Response: I'm so sorry! I'm kinda realizing I shouldn't have ended it like that... Thanks for reviewing! =)

Reviewer: Remy Signed [Report This]
Date: 09/28/08 07:05 pm Title: Chapter 1

I really like this! Please update soon!

Author's Response: Thanks for your review! =)

Reviewer: Saol Signed [Report This]
Date: 09/28/08 04:05 pm Title: Chapter 1

Eeek, this is a good start! More!

Author's Response: Thanks for your review! =)

Reviewer: Hekki Signed [Report This]
Date: 09/28/08 01:21 pm Title: Chapter 1

I liked how you described Tom. His feelings, how he was acting, he's a mess. I just wish you hadn't stoped there. You only had to go a few sentences farther. just to show bill's (hopefully positive) reaction. good job though.

Author's Response: Thanks for your review! I take it no one really appreciated the ending. But Bill does respond positively, trust me. =)

Reviewer: liebetub Signed [Report This]
Date: 09/28/08 12:38 pm Title: Chapter 1

I really don't think you should stop here, but maybe make another chapter:)
A little bit more love making chapter;)
Besides that, I really liked the chapter^-^)

Author's Response: Thanks for your review! I definitely plan on writing more twincest with a bit more...love making... =)

Reviewer: Nightingale Signed [Report This]
Date: 09/28/08 10:49 am Title: Chapter 1

Oh this little story was so good! I loved the tension and Tom's thoughts and how Bill just gets under his skin and unconsciously makes Tom to make his final move. Very nice! Even though we haven't read any of Bill's thoughts and we have no idea how Bill might have reacted to Tom's kiss, I still have hopes that Bill just understood.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review! Yes, Bill did understand, and he felt the same way. I guess I didn't make that clear enough - that's why Bill wonders what he did wrong to make Tom so angry. He didn't want to make Tom angry, that's why he got to close to him in the first place. Your review meant a lot to me, it was so sweet! =)

Reviewer: Gisele Signed [Report This]
Date: 09/28/08 10:39 am Title: Chapter 1

Wow really good! but you can't be serious wuth this being the only chapter ! I need more ^^ It's very very good!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review! That is the only chapter, I might do a sequel someday. =)

Reviewer: Ikkke88 Signed [Report This]
Date: 09/28/08 07:57 am Title: Chapter 1

Whát??! Is this the end of a oneshot? you definately should write a sequel or make it a longer story!!! :D

Author's Response: Thanks for your review! I might write a sequel, someday... =)

Reviewer: Dahlia-Starr Signed [Report This]
Date: 09/28/08 01:58 am Title: Chapter 1

Omg moreee =]

Author's Response: I might continue this one day, but that's it for now. Sorry!

Reviewer: 1fish2fishredfishbluefish Signed [Report This]
Date: 09/28/08 01:48 am Title: Chapter 1

i'm not usualy in to this "twincest" stuff, but i like your story(so far)

Author's Response: Thank you so much! =)

Reviewer: Alina Van Signed [Report This]
Date: 09/28/08 12:56 am Title: Chapter 1

I'm all kinda "WOAH" here! And you just left it all that?! I'm practically dying in my computer chair!!

Author's Response: I'm sorry! I hope you liked it, though...

Reviewer: Nia Signed [Report This]
Date: 09/28/08 12:42 am Title: Chapter 1

Wha....whhaatt?! That's it? You can't cut it off there! You're EVIIILLL xD It was...it was getting so good, and you just...*cries*

Author's Response: I'm sorry! I think everyone hates the ending. I hope you enjoyed it, at least. =)

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