Date: 10/21/08 09:31 pm Title: Chapter 3: Anxious Eyes and Awkward Ties
Ooh, I wasn't expecting much to be honest, but I have been pleasently surprised!
The OFC's are really nice and the plot is good so far. Poor Tomi appears to be getting hit alot though, poor bloke.
Update soon!
Author's Response: Lol... I gotta beat Tom's ego down somehow. ~.^ More when the muses strike, thank you so much for this. :) It means a lot.
Date: 09/27/08 02:03 am Title: Chapter 3: Anxious Eyes and Awkward Ties
I agree vegemite is gross!!!!
Author's Response: It really, really is.
Date: 09/25/08 10:42 am Title: Chapter 1 : Lost in Translation
Well.. No, they speak Dutch there. Love the chapter, by the way. :D
Date: 09/25/08 12:39 am Title: Chapter 2: Reference Me a Response
more!
Date: 09/24/08 07:23 pm Title: Chapter 1 : Lost in Translation
First and foremost, Amsterdam is in the Netherlands. Not Germany. If you look at a map, you'll see that they are two completely different countries. You're a fairly good writer, but you could be doing so much better than writing about a couple of self-insert marysues. So please- improve the fandom and write about something else! Also, think about plausibility- Jessy and Tom's meeting could have been more believable. He probably would have given her directions, but in all likelyhood, he wouldn't have accompanied her back to the hotel if he didn't have any ulterior motives. As I said, you're a good writer with a large amount of potential. Please don't waste it on a blatant self-insert story!
Author's Response: Yes, I realize Amsterdam isn't in Germany. However, the majority of this fic takes place in Germany. And while I thank you for completementing my writing, please don't simply tell me to "write about something else". I'm writing this mostly as a present for my best friend. And the definition of a mary sue is a character that is flat and non-deminsional. They typically are 'perfect' and have no flaws. I go out of my way to show that my characters have flaws, they're not perfect. Thank you for taking the time to read and review... but if you don't like the fic, you don't have to read.
Date: 09/24/08 01:05 pm Title: Chapter 1 : Lost in Translation
You're aware that Amsterdam is the capital of the Netherlands (Holland) and not Germany, right? :)
Author's Response: Yah, but that's a bit of my American-ness coming through. When we learn about Germany, we're taught about Amsterdam and the Netherlands, as well. Plus, if you're going to cross the ocean to visit Germany, yah might as well go visit Amsterdam, too. (And, as far as I'm aware, German is still spoken in Amsterdam, isn't it?) ... Thanks for reading?