Date: 08/28/11 06:42 pm Title: Chapter 1
this was a good story
Author's Response: Thank you!! Xxx
Date: 10/02/10 03:15 pm Title: Chapter 1
I felt so bad for Bill in the beginning. I'm so happy that he told Tom about his feelings. I thoroughly enjoyed this sweetie.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your lovely review! It's made me smile, :) xxx
Date: 05/09/10 06:56 pm Title: Chapter 1
I LOVE IT. ;> Really, I do.. I think it's cute ^^ I've been reading it three or four times now -blush and feels like a stalker- :P
Author's Response: Oh wow- thats such a compliment! Thanks so much for being so sweet and don't feel like a stalker cause I think you're very nice :) *hug* xx
Date: 10/24/09 08:17 am Title: Chapter 1
The reason ppl keep writing about how the twins finally reveal their built-up twincesty feelings is cuz its just so tantalising! So I encourage u to write this scenario as many times and ways as you can, and I'd love to read them all. Really, I can never read that enough, I'll never get tired of when/how they fall in love. :D
I wouldn't delete your work, ever. It shows your progress as a writer and you shouldnt be ashamed of it. :) Instead, show that you're better now by keeping on writing.
That's what reviews are for: reviewing, and I'll always be honest, cuz that way I hope I'm actually helping the author in some way. So yeah, if you ever write any more twincest, drop me a line and I would love to beta it for you.
Cheers!
Author's Response: Ok, well I won't delete it then, but maybe add a second chapter to this, but as it re-writen or just make another version, I want to try and make it better now!! And you're right, I could read so many of these twincesty fics!! I'll send you the better version if thats ok,and thanks again! xxx
Date: 10/21/09 11:14 pm Title: Chapter 1
I think it was very predictable (Sorry).
We've all read twincest stories like this one, and sometimes it works, and other times it's too deja-vu. :(
I would develope the story a little more, definately give the twins more time to cope with Bill's feelings, and even if Tom does feel the same, its just too fast to have them jumping into bed seconds later, you know?
I always love reading the scene when they reveal their feelings to eachother, so I would try and think of it in a realistic way- what if your brother told you he was in love w u suddenly? How would u react?-realistically. Draw out the moment, the emotion, and give them time, because it must be difficult to have that happen to you.
Hope that helps. :)
Keep writing. Practice makes perfect. And if you need a beta, just ask.
Oh, and check your grammar and typos!!!
Author's Response: Oh god, how I know that this one is predictable! I wrote this a long time ago, and at the time, my writing and story ideas were not really good, so trust me, I know it's not that great. What I might do is re-write this maybe but delete it, and completely start it afresh. If I do, would you be able to read it again and tell me what you think? That's only a possibilety though, so I'll think about it.rnrn Thanks for telling the truth, I like it when people give their true opinions. xxx
Date: 12/12/08 10:32 pm Title: Chapter 1
You know, I've read so many stories along these lines, but I never get sick of them *grins*.
I love the way you played everything out. Though I would've prefered it longer ;)
Author's Response: Lol! I've also read so many stories of this kind so I decided to write one!! Sorry about not making it longer. I've tried so hard to make my chapters long, but it never works! Thanks for your review. xxx
Date: 09/22/08 06:15 pm Title: Chapter 1
hmmmmm..... sorry but the plot is _so_unbelievably_lame >_<
driving lessons is much better
Author's Response: Thanks for saying Driving Lessons is better! I think so myself, but I just had this idea in my head and I just wrote it down, partly because I needed to get back into the swing of writing stories again. xxx
Date: 09/20/08 10:29 pm Title: Chapter 1
I liked the plot, the way the story played out, the setting, and the ending. However it was a bit choppy and there were some grammer mistakes. Over all I'd still say it was pretty good though.
Author's Response: Thank you for your honest review. I appreciate it. xxx
Date: 09/20/08 10:10 pm Title: Chapter 1
awww it was good and cute
Author's Response: Thank you very much! xxx