Date: 09/28/08 08:49 am Title: Vlk
hey Luce
Here I am again ^^
I so adore this story, really great writing ^^ It's like your stories getting better and better and I didn't thought that could be ^^
"There’s something about this kid, something that’s obviously calling to his subconscious mind. "
Wonder what that meant. How Tom is special than. I also wonder how he is going to explain everything to them if he got that close. I can imagine if he just said 'hey I'm the one who beat you' I can guess how they are going to react :-p
"Was he meant to bite that boy? The question seems crazy, even in his mind. But still, he’s never lost control like that before. And the fact that he was able to pull away before doing serious damage…the boy must have been very special."
So he can control himself when he is like that. Maybe it's destiny :-p Tom just had to be bitten ^^ I want to know more ;-)
"The guilt pools low in Bill’s stomach as he realizes he’s a tiny bit scared of his brother. Just a wee bit frightened that Tom might have another episode."
Oh poor Bill, don't be scared. Tom could never hurt you. Well I hope :-p But I got a feeling that those episodes are not over.
"“Sure you don’t, but it smells like mom’s made us French toast.” Bill wriggles some more, his leg being captured between Tom’s.
Tom cracks one eye open. “…mornings aren’t so bad, I guess.”"
I had to laugh at that.
Maybe I should ask my mom to make me breakfast as well so I'm not in such a bad mood in the morning when I have to wake up to damn early do go to school. Really 6:15 is way to early :-p
"It might sound cliché, but Tom is quite sure if Bill goes, so does Tom. It’s only natural. Bill is a part of Tom, Tom is a part of Bill."
I love that you putt that in. You probably now there is truth behind it to because the really sad that in an interview. I can't help it but find it so sweet (weird huh) :-p
"Tom doesn’t pay much attention to her, he’s a dog person. A dog person in very deep thoughts about life and death."
A dog person he definitely is, haha (A)
I love how Tom is so protecting over his brother. That's just so cute and sexy haha =D
Bill and his theories, cracked me up there. How did you come up with that.
"“My bet is on the aliens. Those would have been able to get out of there without being seen by the cameras.” Bill is still clicking "
Jeah aliens seems believable. =D
"“Ah, Tomi!” Bill is giggling, shrieking slightly as he’s pushed down on the bed, and Tom moves over him. “No, vampires are not real, you fool! Stop that…oh, don’t you dare!”"
Omg I so loved that :-p I bet lots of people did that's why you putt it in didn't you ;-) That was like absolutely sexy and adorable. I can imagine Bill stuck with hickeys because of his brother :-p
"Tom thinks it suits Bill to be marked by him.
Bill is Tom’s, after all. He’s Tom’s brother, Tom‘s property."
Sure Tom that's all it is :-p nothing else. Still innocent ^^
"Tom told him it was because Bill tasted good, though, and so that was why Tom was called ‘Cannibal Tomi’ every now and then."
I could so imagine that :-p Naughty Tom haha.Tom should do it more often now:-p
That cat knows something doesn't she.
There second review ^^ up to the next
*hugs*
Author's Response: hi babe <3 aw, you relly think my stories get better? that means a lot to hear you know !!! hihi, it's so fun to see how different readers react differently to the mysterious man ,) but you're onto something love, you definitively are! I don't think I've ever written a fic where Bill is scared of Tomi, but this one is something else, I'm really going for the more angsty in this, but not too overwhelming, hope it's working. Lol, I really can't keep simone out of the kitchen ,) she's just such a lovely character to write <3 hihi, you think 6.15 is early, try 5.45, school's a real bitch right ,p they said the dying together thing in an interview OO where? do you have it, can you link me??? okay, ignore my twincestual urges, just...weeeeeee, that is so cute !!! xD I actually didn't see the 'dog person' irony before now, lol but it fit though ,p hihi, you know me too well, of course I had to put in the bit about hickeys ,) it was just far too tempting not to ,p Tom is rather naughty in this, but of course, it's all innocent, right Tomi? Kashmir might know more than others yes ,) well wait and see, I guess. so glad you take your time to review this girl, it makes me smle so much. Love you for it <3 yours luce
Date: 09/28/08 08:39 am Title: Loup
I really liked this chapter! I love it how Tom gets all posessive and those rage outbrusts are also really cool to read! :]
Update as soon as you can, I'll be waiting for it! :)
Author's Response: hihi, god, this just made me smile so bad, thank you so much ! I'm updating in about five minutes, hope you'll like it <3
Date: 09/28/08 08:28 am Title: Loup
That tongue ring is DEADLY!! While watching an interview if the boys at the VMAs the interviewer asked Bill to show it (claims the girls wanted to see it but I think it was just his excuse. :P) and I nearly passed out. I watch it over and over and OVER!!
Great use of tour descriptive capabilities here sweetie. I love that. Can't wait for your next update.
Author's Response: oh my God, I loved that !!! I was totally swooning xD thank you so much for this, hope you'll like what comes next ! love <3
Date: 09/28/08 07:54 am Title: Varg
Hey girl
wow, sorry for the late late review. Well I was so buzzy this week . I go to a new school and it's a bit different en I get all this assignment that take a lot of time. And if that's not enough I got a cold right now, I feel awful. But now I got some time and I will try to review till I got every chapter till now. The reviews are not going to be extra long but I hope you like them anyway ^^
"“What? No.” He shakes his head, it feels heavy. Suddenly it’s as if he’s back again, the fog lifting a bit and making it easier to concentrate. “No, it’s good, they seem to be working.”"
I wonder what that meant. A different side effect again?
"“Shut the FUCK up!” Tom sits completely still on the bed, staring at the white, linen sheets."
I wonder if he will learn to suppress those mood swings because I don't think he can always turn it like that.
"“Third off, what were you trying to do, break my ribs?” Bill grins at her and Simone laughs along, allowing her sons to herd the group into the house."
You always make here character so sweet^^ she must have been worried sick.
And actually they got nothing to worry about well not from someone else though but maybe about the changes in Tom.
"Bill is pulling away and Tom doesn’t like it. Still, he lets go. That kiss, it had made him tingle, he feels alive. “Only if it’s for the better.” "
A brotherly kiss huh :-p seems like just that bit more ^^ I love how you describes the warmed they feel when there close to each other. Still such a comfort thing, I think :-p
"Kashmir’s back is arched, her fur standing up all across her backbone, her tail wags with swift movements across the floor. "
cats doesn't like dogs don't they =D
"The two of them munch chocolate cookies in silence.
“I’m scared.”"
I loved how you described how Bill sees Tom. It was heartbreaking how Tom admit at being scared. *hug him*
Bill can Big brother him ;-)
"Tom cries. Tonight, Bill is the big brother."
I loved that Bill can comfort his brother. Nobody can stay strong all the time.
Jeey, finally reviewed this. now I'm going to review the other chapters and hope I got all of time this time ;-)
*hugs*
Author's Response: kris <3 ma love, good to see you (virtually, but still ,p) hun, your reviews are always lone ,) love you for that, but most importantly, they make me smile, and that is something I'll love you longtime for !!! poor girlie, sick and everything, hope you'll get better soon though, do you have holidays coming up ? maybe you could rest out then. okay, to the review: Tom's mood is definitively weird, and I have to agree with you, it's gonna be hard to hide away if he doesn't learn to control himself! lol, happy you liked the kiss, that was such a tender moment to write, cus I was really wondering about how close to Tom's lips Bill should kiss, but I think it turned out good ,) you're absolutely right, cats don't like dogs ,p God, made me smile so bad that you liked the whole fragile Tom being comforted by 'big brother' Bill, I loed writing that ! hope you'll like the rest of the chaps that are up as well, gonna go reply to them now, sorry I haven't sooner, but school's taking up a lot of time. love ya darling <3 yours luce
Date: 09/28/08 06:35 am Title: Lupus
this is really good
Author's Response: aw, thanksies !!!
Date: 09/28/08 06:04 am Title: Loup
I absolutely love this story!
Author's Response: thanksies, so happy you do !
Date: 09/28/08 05:52 am Title: Loup
Isn't it funny how people would rather believe in aliens than mythical creatures such as, let's say, werewolves? Vampires? lol, anyway, I really, REALLY like this chapter. I like how possessive Tom is being. Gah, you taking it slow and letting the story unfold and I love that. Update soon. :)
Author's Response: lol, yeah ,) I believe though! (not in aliens, I don't like aliens) you like it that I'm taking it slow? oh that makes me so happy, thank you !!! you know I love ou for this <3 yours luce
Date: 09/28/08 05:15 am Title: Loup
this chapter is like mcdonald's
I'M LOVING IT ^_____________^ just like the whole story :P
Ahhh I don't know what to write, I am too hyper *.* I love the way Tom cares about Bill, even if it's a little bit too possesive... I wish I had a twin to take care of ^^. (well, I have a cousin who is just like a twin sister for me, but it doesn't count. I wanna real twin! T_T)
Aliens and werewolves sound insane, haha xD Bill will be disappointed that he didn't guess right ^^.
I LOVE THIS STORY *heart-shaped eyes* so better make sure you'll update by Thursday or naked Geo will pay you a visit XD
*shakes in anticipation*
BUZI:*
Author's Response: loooooooooool mcdonalds xD 'a little bit too possessive' a little bit? ,p me wants a twin as well, I had a dream I had one once xD okay, so I had a visit from naked geo last night AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA *shivers* iza, help me OO *cries* I'm so sorry, so so sorry!!! love ya <3 *in a corner trembling*
Date: 09/28/08 03:25 am Title: Loup
My bet is still on werewolves
and holy crap, his eyes went golden.
This chapter was good, I cant say that I thought it was sensational, some of it was actually if Im gonna be honest a bit boring, and Ive never said that before about anything youve written :S sorry.
I loved the part where Tom was in the bath tub, and I loved the little details about him being protective about his stuff, and about Bill. But ither than that it feels like its not going anywhere, its just repeats, his anger, the list of causes that they rule out one by one...its moving a long a bit too slowly for my taste. But I trust you Lucy, and Im sure you know what you're doing =)
cant wait for the next chapter its gonna be great ^^
Author's Response: lol, happy you liked the golden eyes thing ,) I know what you mean about the story, I'm taking better time exploring different things with this story than what I usually do and so a lot of things feels like filler in stuff, it's just a way to try and build up a mood though, there's more action in the next one, although yes, some boring parts there as well ,) hope you'll like the main deal about this story as it goes along, love ya <3 yours luce
Date: 09/28/08 02:48 am Title: Loup
ooh~~ possessive Tom is soo cute~~ XDD and Bill is getting closer~~ :DDD i wonder when that mystery man is going to show up?? D: he must explain to Tom and Bill.. D: well i can't wait for an update~~ but don't push yourself..>_o;;
Author's Response: lol, I won't push myself (too hard) thank you so much for this, reviews always make me feel like it's worth it you know? love ya <3
Date: 09/27/08 04:43 pm Title: Lobo
It's very good! I just want to tell you, I love all your fics. When I see your name next the title, I KNOW it will be good, no question. I even save it for later, to savor the fic! Thank you!
Author's Response: oh my God...darling, that is so sweet of you, and it means so, so much for me to hear you say that! Thank you, this made me so very happy! love <3 lucy
Date: 09/27/08 01:53 pm Title: Lobo
More please. I love the mellow feel of the story between dramatic moments. It flows so nicely.
Author's Response: aw, thanksies, I'm so happy you like the mood of this fic because it's very comfotable to write <3 love
Date: 09/26/08 03:45 am Title: Lobo
Babe of mine.
so fucking busy lately
but i read u all time
i just love ur new so original story.
ma luce write always super stories, which keep the reader stuck in the chair in front of the monitor.
Oh i like Toms moods and feelings
Bill so cute beside his twin.
you have ur own unique way to describe the twins relationship.
thanks for that luce
and for all ur beautiful stories which share with us.
Love ya lot
sorry for ma delay comment
ur stories are always my passion
take care
sweetheart of mine
ly
chris
Author's Response: you know, your reviews are most times like poetry, and I love them so much !!! I'm so happy you like this one (as I might have told you before ,p) the story means so much to me and to have you enjoying reading this as much as I enjoy writing it is just amazing. I really hope you're not overworking yourself darling of mine, I know I try not to ,) hope you will like the next chapter to this story! much, much love <3 yours luce
Date: 09/26/08 02:02 am Title: Lobo
oh gosh
holy crap
they vare falling so hard
like...boom, and they are down with love
and I feel bad for Tom
and all the signs point towards the obvious
werewolf
and they would die for eachother
of course they would
I dont know what more to say
other than you are such an aamzing write luyand i would love to have your imgaination for at least a few hours, that would be an experience that Id never forget :p
Author's Response: lol, em ma love, boom and they fall ,p well about all the signs pointing towards the obvious, for us maybe, but it wouldn't be the first thing you considered if you yourself begn feeling drawn to meat all of a sudden right ,p you wanna borrow my imagination oO well, if you can find a way to make that work, then of course you can xD love you doll, luce
Date: 09/25/08 07:32 pm Title: Lobo
Another amazing chapter, as always :)
Author's Response: thanksies, you know how much it means to me !
Date: 09/25/08 02:15 pm Title: Lobo
*makes girl happy*
she laiks? XD
no, srsly, very nice, your writing skills are definitely getting better and better.
Update soon, please!
Author's Response: God, it's so nice when people say that, cus it means they actually care you know? thank you so much girl, Ill update sometime today !
Date: 09/25/08 01:41 pm Title: Lobo
very sweet.. and nice details on the interaction.
Author's Response: thank you, makes me smle <3
Date: 09/25/08 11:02 am Title: Lobo
MY BELOVED FIRELUCY *throws herself at Firey* i am so happy that you updated n___n
ooh Bill and Tom are developing some weird feelings in their bellies, I reaaaaally have no idea what it could be :P (twiiiincest *______* please tell meee are they developing LOVE? n_n)
I feel sorry for Tom *pats Tom's head* he's acting more and more unusual every day *.* it must be hard for Bill, if I were him, I'd die from worry :O damn where is that man?
Yeah, "Varg" sounds sexier, in Polish "warga" means "lip" :P
Blaaaaah Dixi has to learn now x_X i will a) commit a suicide b) move to England, where people learn in high school things that I had in primary school :P
Remember that I love you and am waiting for new chappi n________________n
buzi;*
Author's Response: 'developing some weird feelings in their bellies' suc a cute way to put it little pole of mine ,) and yes, they are developing some feelings, wheither it be butterflies or not ,p lol bout the warga thing, god that sounds even sexier oO warga...I'm so gonna start saying that ! please move to england babe, no point a) please !!! love you too girl, will update sometime today, hugs <3 luce
Date: 09/25/08 10:37 am Title: Lobo
This story is a drug, really...I can't wait for another
Author's Response: I'll be your dealer then ,) next will be out today ! thanksies
Date: 09/25/08 10:21 am Title: Lobo
So many awesome parts to this fic...it's hard to pick a favorite! I must say I really liked the part where Tom wonders about his nose being too big. It was so endearing! I also loved the whole scene when Andreas came over...very funny but not silly or over-the-top.
(The last line in this chapter made me swoon, btw.)
Author's Response: aw, you liked the nose thing ,) I just had to write it down, it wouldn't get out of my head xD and I am so über happy that the scene with andreas wasn't over the top, I know how easy it is to write something and then it just comes out like they're reading out of a script when saying things. very glad you liked the last line, I love writing those ,) thank you so much <3 luce