Date: 04/07/09 12:50 pm Title: Chapter 1
I likee it! Bill deserves all the love in the world
Date: 09/06/08 01:18 pm Title: Chapter 1
awwwwwwwwww that was soooooooooo sweat!!! ^-^
Date: 09/06/08 08:39 am Title: Chapter 1
great job it was cute :)
Date: 09/05/08 05:23 pm Title: Chapter 1
ok. first of all tht song is one of my favorite songs of all time!
mario-let me love you
second of all tht was one of the cutest stories i've read in a long time!
Date: 09/05/08 03:14 pm Title: Chapter 1
Very sweet!!! Yes, Bill deserves being loved!!!!!
Date: 09/05/08 03:12 pm Title: Chapter 1
If you took the lyrics from the song and put them in italics, rather than normal type..
The code for italics is < i> (without spaces).
I do know the lyrics, but it's helpful for people who don't know the song.
(: Apart from that, it was awesomee!! ^^
Nice plot and choice of song. (:
Date: 09/05/08 02:52 pm Title: Chapter 1
Ok, is honesty really the way to go? The writing style bugged me. It was very strait forward. Tellng everything rather than showing. It was a lot of so and so did this and so and so did that. It was frustrating. The idea was good but... yeah.
It wasn't too much for a one shot, it was just a tough way to write it. The story didn't flow. The song lyrics were ok, not great, but ok. I'm sure they didn't add anything for me, but they didn't take anythng away either.
Ok, I'm done. Was this too mean? Sorry.