Date: 08/31/08 08:03 am Title: II
"No one wants Bill back like I do."
OKay, that explains A LOT.And i understand everything now, thanks to tom's explanation to 571. Maybe the guys in universal already killed Bill? Hell, maybe tom doesn't know it,but 571 IS Bill? Like an android,you know, they kept the majority of his human part.
J'ai confondu le robot avec Bill dans mon autre commentaire. Néamoins, cette fic est au delà de l'interessant,elle est incroyablement belle!
Très futuriste!Je me psais une question. Est-ce que c'est okay d'écrire un commentaire dans une autre langue que l'anglais sur ce site?Je veux dire,comme il y a beaucoup de nationalités,peut être que je devrais me remettre à l'anglais (même s'il est un peu défaillant) par pur respect pour les autres?
Date: 08/31/08 07:45 am Title: I
AH !je viens de relire en diagonale et j'ai maintenant remarqué qu'en fait, c'est un flash-back là haut, sur Bill.Okay, j'ai mieuw compris maintenant^^
Date: 08/31/08 07:43 am Title: I
WOW! another fic from your duo^^!J'adore!
Quand j'ai lu ce chapitre,j'avais pas très bien compris au départ.Tom était comme dans 'mission impossible" lol! Le suspense était à son comble et mon coeur battait fort au fur et à mesure qu'il avance.
Au début du chapitre, il est avec Bill et Bill est blond? Très mignon^^ je l'imagine avec la peinture et tout ça^^.
C'est très futuriste! et l'idée est vraiment originale(Bill nommé 571 et un robot en plus!)
Je crois que je vais continuer à lire pour mieux comprendre ,mais déjà ce chapitre a été absolument génial! que d'émotions^^
Date: 08/31/08 02:13 am Title: IV
Oh shit.
I just read the whole thing and I'm like... I'm shocked, I dunno. I really liked it so far, I just want Tom to find Bill so bad.
I cried when Tom killed that woman, I swear it's way too sad. I can't wait to read the next chapter.
Date: 08/30/08 03:34 pm Title: IV
NO! ...it ended.
*whimpers*
my God this is amazing! I shall await ravenously for the next chapter! ^_^
Date: 08/30/08 02:10 pm Title: IV
lol @ the scene of Tom waking up!
hhahaha!
more pls!
Date: 08/30/08 12:41 pm Title: IV
Poor Tomi D:
Hurting so much "/
Date: 08/30/08 11:40 am Title: IV
D:
Poor human test subjects. I don't even want to think about what Bill went through.
And the next chapter is the last, right? Ughhh. Time for a wake-up-call for Tom.
Date: 08/30/08 04:21 am Title: IV
Those poor people. I don't think I've been anywhere near as good at commenting on this as you deserve, but I'm still very intrigued and I can't believe it's ending soon.
Date: 08/28/08 01:23 am Title: III
Good, as long as the story is good, I'm happy too.
I'm still not so sure about the whole can't-recognize-my-brother thing, because I have two sisters and I can always recognize them despite the fact that I'm short-sighted and have zero visual memory. But I have known them for their whole lives and I just know their eyes, ears, hands and so on. Tom might have paid no attention to the cyborg because he thought it was inanimate, just some piece of machinery. But Bill actually has very distinct features, his ears, eyes, eyebrows, teeth and the mole give him away in, like, a second. But see your point, alright.
Author's Response: I see yours too. :)
Date: 08/27/08 02:56 pm Title: III
God, it is so inconvenient when you can’t leave a response to the response you get.
>> Pay attention to the details
I pay more attention to the details then some of the authors, thank you:)
>> Bill was blond and never wore makeup
Well, make up and a new hair style don’t change one’s appearance that drastically, otherwise my family wouldn’t be able to recognize me every other month.
>> And you assume 571 has his face anyway
Yeah, that’s why I’m telling you about those little discrepancies now, before your work is complete. So you can change something if there really is some mistake. That will be cool if you concoct something nice about the cyborg’s face because Tom and Bill seem either blind or retarded in all those AU fics when they are unable to recognize their own identical twin.
>> Also, we never said Tom had no job when Bill was around
No, but Bill said “I’d like to be able, you know. Pay for food”. And he refused to quit the job despite of harassing, because it was too well paid for. It really looks like he is the one supporting their family. Tom, on the other hand, does grocery shopping and protects his brother which is “his only job” and “the only thing he knows how to do well”. Your words, not mine.
>> Thinking something doesn’t make it so
Oh yeah, because you know me really well to make such remarks.
As I said, I like the story in general, that’s why I actually care.
Author's Response: >>I pay more attention to details than some of the authors, thank you.
Good to know, it's definitely the exception to get reviewers who do.
>>Well, makeup and a new hairstyle don't change one's appearance that drastically.
Here, we will have to agree to disagree. Maybe as twins, it would be different, but if my brother came home with Bill's hairstyle (also the complete opposite color of his original) and makeup, particularly if I was not under the impression the person was him in the first place, no, I cannot claim I would recognize him, particularly if I was often drunk or on an adrenaline high, running for my life. You could argue that Tom could put two and two together at one of the rare times he's sober; if he found 571 familiar and if Bill's missing and this is thing is part human (a recent revelation), perhaps it's him? and I might agree (which he might even still do).
>>Yeah, this is why I'm telling you about these little discrepancies now, before your work is complete.
We appreciate that. :)
>>No, but Bill said "I'd like to be able, you know. Pay for food." And he refused to quit the job despite of harassing, because it was too well paid for. It really looks like he is the one supporting their family. Tom, on the other hand, does grocery shopping and protects his brother which is “his only job” and “the only thing he knows how to do well”. Your words, not mine.
Those are mostly our words. Ours were "Protecting you is my job." You happened to add the "only" (a key word in this argument). I imagine the real Tom quite possibly believes this as well, yet I believe he still has a job as a musician. And yes, it is the only thing he knows how to do well. It doesn't mean it's the only thing he does (the next chapter, written before your first review, actually mentions Tom working- I know that sounds convenient, but it's true). There are plenty of people working small odd jobs who don't consider themselves good at them. This Tom certainly doesn't have some big career he's devoted to. He's trying to make rent. And when you have a roommate, often making rent is a two-person job. Without Bill's income, they can't for long, a problem Tom would be having to deal with in another few weeks. I have roommates myself, and even if one was my sibling, I'd be pissed if all the rent was on my income without a legit reason. Also, whether or not Tom worked doesn't really affect the plot in the first place, like your earlier points might. I hope this answer satisfies your sheer curiosity.
>>Oh yeah, because you know me really well to make such remarks.
I make assumptions about people when I see them making them.
>>As I said, I like this story in general, that's why I actually care.
We are very glad you like it well enough to comment, particularly when it's an intelligent response like these. :)
Date: 08/27/08 06:51 am Title: III
I love this story very much, but there is one thing that leaves me confused. Why didn't Tom have any job when Bill was alive? Why was he beeng perfect housewife instead of supporting Bill himself?
Besides, doesn't 571 have Bill's face, too? Why don't they recognise him?
Author's Response: Pay attention to details, they tend to be important in our fics. Bill was blond and never wore makeup. And you assume 571 has his face anyway. Also, we never said Tom had no job when Bill was around (we don't use the word "alive" because we haven't claimed him dead), we said he didn't have one now.
Thinking something doesn't make it so. ;)
Date: 08/26/08 12:01 pm Title: III
Unf this just gets better and better.
Aaannnd I know you're gonna tell me not to make assumptions but I'm almost completely sure that 571 is cyborg!Bill. But that just makes me sad, the possibility that he was a human experimentation ;_; Ugh you two and your creepy alternate universes :P
Date: 08/26/08 11:32 am Title: III
I freaking love ur fic.
and im sure that Bill's soul is in 571
Date: 08/26/08 11:04 am Title: III
tom u're so dumb
bill's right in fron of your eyes and u're searching him everywhere....
Date: 08/26/08 09:43 am Title: III
i wonder if he'll recognize Bill