Date: 07/16/09 10:12 pm Title: Chapter 1
i love it!!!!!! its so cute and sad and funny at the end. hopefully this might become a two shot
Date: 04/06/09 01:49 am Title: Chapter 1
how sad!
you're a fantastiv writer, mah dear!
Date: 10/31/08 06:14 pm Title: Chapter 1
Enough to make them gloss over, not enough to make them cry.
I liked it.
Date: 08/19/08 11:08 am Title: Chapter 1
Wow.... love conquers it all, I guess. Beautiful.
Date: 08/19/08 01:29 am Title: Chapter 1
Oh Wow....I honestly can't begin to describe how amazing this was. It brought tears to my eyes, and oh my fucking wow....It was amazing. *wipes away tear* That was something truly....I can't even find a word to properly describe how much that touched me.
Thank you so much Leemond. You have no idea how much that means to me. Thank you. *hugs*
Date: 08/19/08 01:23 am Title: Chapter 1
i like it!!!
it almost made cry in the tom part=(((
Date: 08/19/08 12:46 am Title: Chapter 1
i like it!!!
it almost made cry in the tom part=(((
Date: 08/18/08 10:30 pm Title: Chapter 1
Awesome. Totally awesome. I loved the way its so simple and still packs a punch.
Date: 08/18/08 10:18 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oh, RetteLeana, this absolutely left me without words.
*nod nod*
To say the least, it was great. It left me speechless, it was awsome!
Date: 08/18/08 08:41 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oooh! I really liked. :)
Date: 08/18/08 08:32 pm Title: Chapter 1
I liked how you did the contrast between the twins life in that style. I really liked it and it made the ending even better. I wish you could have done something on them being reunited. But I know they're together so it's all good.
Date: 08/18/08 06:19 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow, that was very powerful...it gave me little chills. I like how you kept everything simple and kinda sparse. It made each word mean so much more.
Date: 08/18/08 06:15 pm Title: Chapter 1
well this is certainly a refreshing change! Lovely idea, I thought it was a full blown poem at first and groaned (not a fan of poems I'm afraid) but then I read on. Seriously imaginative, I love the echoing of the first words and then the repetition of the names, as if they only thought the previous words once but can't seem to stop thinking about eachother. You've managed to tug on me old heartstrings, it aches! It's pretty simple wording wise but I think that it works well in this case. Ending was unexpected but genius. On the whole, I think this is much much much more creative than gummi worms.
I KNEW you had it in you. I am so proud of you, I really am!
LOVE, :tard
Date: 08/18/08 06:01 pm Title: Chapter 1
O_O wow. every line was like a gunshot. like BAM BAM BAM. relentless. i couldn't stop reading until i got to the end. and the end was like BOOM! O_O this oneshot needs a...sequel or something. O_O
Date: 08/18/08 06:00 pm Title: Chapter 1
mayby this could be a great plot to some story?
it's interesting, kinda makes you think about how they will kill Jorg...
I like it (:
Date: 08/18/08 05:58 pm Title: Chapter 1
I have no words for you.
You step out of your boundaries, brush off the dust of your status quo, and look what you birth.
I often say I am proud of you when you move beyond your niche and stretch your creativity.
I am not proud of you now.
I am impressed and in awe.