Date: 09/15/08 01:55 am Title: Chapter five
nnaww blud, its awesoommee!! xo
Author's Response: thank you!!
Date: 09/05/08 01:36 am Title: Chapter six
Its only one sentence.
Author's Response: I fixed it. sorry.. i dont know why only that part was put in... but its fixed now.
Date: 09/05/08 12:37 am Title: Chapter three
This is horrifically (No I mean that in a sort of good way, because you're a great writer for making the reader feel the pain of the protagonist lol) but I can't stop reading it.
Author's Response: Thank you so much.. It means a lot to me. The last chapter though im warning you isn't as well writen as the other chapters.. Im going through a phase that I go through a lot.. So my writing turns to crap when im in that phase... sorry.. Ill end up editing the last chapter in a while after this goes away.. Thanks for reading!
Date: 09/01/08 02:37 pm Title: Chapter five
poor sara:'(
more please...
Author's Response: im stuck right now on what to write.. but ill have some chapters out soon hopefully. thanks for reviewing
Date: 08/31/08 12:34 am Title: Chapter five
this is so intense and wonderfully written!!! i adore it!
Author's Response: Thank you so much
Date: 08/30/08 05:30 am Title: Chapter five
thata mean baD favourless bad but it makes at gr8 story
update soon
luv it
ly
x
Author's Response: im sorry! its just what my mind thought up... it will be over soon. and it has a good ending
Date: 08/29/08 06:59 pm Title: Chapter five
Awwww. Poor Sara.
Author's Response: Yeah.. any ideas for chapter 6?
Date: 08/28/08 11:17 am Title: Chapter four
AWWE I love this!! I'm not really a Gusti girl but this is changing my view on him a bit. :)
Author's Response: Cool.. see i have the changing effect on you! I can make wonders happen! i need ideas for chapter 5
Date: 08/27/08 11:32 pm Title: Chapter four
sweet!!
keep going, this has potential for sure!
Author's Response: awe thank you! Do you have any ideas for me for the next chapter?? i would so aprreciate it. im in a bit of a sticky spot
Date: 08/27/08 11:05 am Title: Chapter four
MOOOOOOOOOOOOORE! :D
Author's Response: It'll be coming along within the next four days possibly. thanks for reviewing
Date: 08/26/08 04:07 pm Title: Chapter four
omg one word AMAZING very good so update mush mush go nopw do it u no u want to
luv it
lyxx
Author's Response: i know i want to but i dont have a second to do it atm.. im still thinking about what the next chapter should be. Thanks!
Date: 08/22/08 07:17 am Title: Chapter three
i hate her dad! >:[
wow, good to finally read a gustav/ofc fic! (:
its real good so far.. deffo loved the tom part! x
Author's Response: Yea.. It wasnt gonna be a gustav fic but i have to many of Bill and already have one of Tom so i decided to make a fic with a diff band memeber. thanks for the review
Date: 08/21/08 04:41 pm Title: Chapter three
omg that was like so horiid but agr8 story line i cant wait till u update
lyxx
Author's Response: It'll be a while though. sorry. AP classes are killing me already and school hasnt started yet
Date: 08/21/08 02:26 pm Title: Chapter three
OMFG!!! Poor Sara. I'm glad she has Gustav. Can't wait to see what happens next. :-)
Author's Response: Thats the thing.. I dont know what to have happen next.. I kinda have an idea.. but I dont have time cuz of AP.
Date: 08/21/08 02:23 pm Title: Chapter two
Jort is such a FUCKER!! Yay, Gustav!!!! Well .. As for this chapter. What can I say other than WOW. You're writing is just getting better and better!!
Author's Response: I guess its getting better.. Not really sure.. I think that the old time story i wrote was the best written one out of all of em though.
Date: 08/19/08 06:53 am Title: Chapter two
Yay! So Gustav ISN'T the bad guy! ;] Thank God.
MORE!!!
Author's Response: I didn't mean to make him seem like the bad guy in the beginning.. Sorry
Date: 08/17/08 01:29 pm Title: Chapter one
omg this was very strong
update soon
ly
xxx
Author's Response: I'm trying to think of the next chapter..
Date: 08/17/08 12:36 pm Title: Chapter one
More! D:
Gustav is a... a bad guy? ;__;
Author's Response: No... that is the little girls dad who is the bad guy.. noy gustav
Date: 08/17/08 08:01 am Title: Chapter one
Ooops, sorri, Amber. It's me Ty, I just accidentally posted the review under this account.
Author's Response: okies.. thanks for telling me
Date: 08/17/08 08:00 am Title: Chapter one
holy shit, girlie!!!!!! O_O this is extremely well written. Pfht, and u said u didn't have it in u anymore. LOVE to read more!!!
Also, just pointing this out again. Using the same word in more than one sentence one after another. You migh want to fix that.
(Ex. The pressure on her neck is severe. His jagged finger nails ripping into the delicate skin of her neck that has already been brusied in a previous attack. She cries out as she's lifted from the floor. She grabs at his hands, trying to free herself from his grip on her neck)
I would just change it so there are not so many 'her necks'. See what I mean?
The pressure on her neck is severe. His jagged finger nails ripping into the delicate skin, already brusied in a previous attack. She cries out as she's lifted from the floor. She grabs at his hands, trying to free herself from his grip.
That's just what I would do. There are a few other spots like this. You don't have to listen to me though. Just trying to be helpful.
I really love the starting that you got going here. It's really got me interested. Please say you are going to continue.
Author's Response: I thought i did fix those last night but i guess i didnt... thanks ty