Loved it. :)

"Didn't you just wash this thing yesterday?" Bill thought back. He clearly remembered his brother doing just the same thing as he was now, but in full concert attire. Just back from a long night of rocking out on the stage, and the dread-head still insisted on a quick rub down. - *shakes head* he would!

"Yes, I know, and you take great care of it. But ... what about me?" he pouted.
"What about you?" Tom wiggled the tiny silver bolt on his bottom lip with his tongue. He knew this statement would get a rise out of his antsy brother. – he’s teasing him on purpose!

"You know you're my number one, Baby." - *snorts* only something Tom could get away with saying!

"I have a better idea." he put his finger to his lips, and momentarily sucked on it slightly. This got Tom's attention, the water soaked his socks. "Can I help?" A suspicious little half-smile curved his lips. – uh-oh!

Tom shook his head and smiled. His twin had the ability to brighten anyone’s mood; and admittedly, the whole reason he was out here was to feel better himself. – why is Tom not feeling good? Hum?!

Tom stood back smiling, watching his twin's brow crinkle in concentration, and the thin material of his top riding up his back as he reached over the hood.
The dread-head's eyes traveled down to Bill's ass, and he imagined how hot his brother would look bent over his car without the thick sweatpants. - *grins evilly ^-^*

Tom dropped his own cloth into the bucket. The car wasn't even finished, and it dripped with the soapy mixture. – fine don’t finish but don’t leave that stuff on there!

Bill always really thin, but lacking the muscular physique Tom held first place for all these years. What Tom saw now made him feel less superior then he ever had. The brunette had been working out, and sported toned, tight abs, just as he. - *grins*

Bill simply smiled, and continued undressing. Tossing his shirt to the ground, he quickly removed his pants as well; revealing creamy white thighs and tiny black spandex short-shorts over his petite rear. Looking closer, not even realizing he had been staring all this time, Tom discovered they were even just a bit see-through. – naught, naughty Billa!

Before Tom even knew he'd done it, Bill was pinned down to the hood of the car, and his mouth gradually moved from his neck up to his pouty lips. "Tomi! Not now. It's car washing time."
"Nuh huh." Tom pushed Bill onto his back. - *giggles and covers face*

"But what about your c-car." - *snorts* like he really cares about the car! Ha ha

Tom rolled his tongue around the tip, before dipping it into the slit. Bill's chest began to heave, and he did whatever he could to coax the cum to stay inside his penis. – I’m not a fan of this sentence.

So when not out to please the fans, Bill did whatever he could to please his lover. – I do like this sentence.

With the other, he dipped it into the lather that poured off the side-mirror. Rubbing it onto his dick, Tom found it went on much smoother than just the water itself. – ick!!! That would be like the WORST lube like ever!!!!

his mouth open in an 'O' just as it did whenever he had a guitar-gasm during a concert; it always made the ladies go wild. - *snorts* ah ha ha ha!

"Do it again. Yea, right there, Baby. Right there." – your sex dialogue leaves a bit to be desired. Yes we all sound like morons when we are having sex but the point is to not make the imaginary people sound like dorks too.

the thick white goo spurted up – I don’t like these words.

Tom loved the feeling of being inside of his brother. Of course it was wrong, but they had stopped caring about that years ago when they finally realized that this was the way things would be for the rest of their lives. – meah not important to the story, in fact it detracts.

He didn't want to pull out, but after a few more thrusts, just to ride out his orgasm, Tom pulled out. Rolling Bill over gently, he tongued the abused hole as the hot seamen overflowed there. – that’s hot!

"Tomi?" Bill croaked. His voice course. Though he hadn't done nearly as much screaming as the night before. – lol that’s funny.

OMGOSH D: YEES AMAZINGNGNGN!

i did like it (: it was very cute. i loved when tom wanted to get intimit with bill, and bill was like: 'no, it's car washing time.' very cute

Author's Response: :D Thank you soo much. *hugs* ^^

aaaaaaaaaah dude that was soooo creative. Tom's always wanted to have sex in his car but it sounds soooo much hotter ON his car with water cascading between their bodies. Mmm lol

Author's Response: lol ya he has. hee hee. thats what i thought too. *drool* *dirty thoughts*

Mmmm...HOT!
There's just something sexy about car-washing, especially with scantily dressed twins...
(although lather as lube...ouch? It must have stung like hell:)

Author's Response: Thanks. :) lol. I love the idea myself too. Yea, well you use what you got I guess.