wow, they are both messed up.... d:)

so they like each other....? y would people think gusti a stalker?

d:)

That was great =] I love Tom's reaction to Georg finding out about Bill xD He must not be SO bad, eh? *haha*

Ooo, masochistic Georg :D

HERE I AM REVIEW PANDA YOU CAN HAVE ME!!! XP

This story.... it has engrossed my thought processes in less than a day. Wow. You deserve a giant plate of cookies. *nodnod*

I like your junkie!Bill... i wonder how he knows Tom in this story... are they twins in your universe or no? I 'm dying to know!

Will there be any hint to Bill's past in this story (or another one) or will he just remain a side character for comic relief??

Also, I think Georg is a combination of narcissistic and masochistic. He loves himself and adores being adored, and at the same time, it tears him to shreds, knowing that everyone loves him... but feeling that guilt entitles him to more of the attention he loves, ect. Its a viscious circle (that's how i see it.)

Gustav... he sort of scares me. He couls easily be a sociopath. I wouldn't be suprised if he went psycho and killed Georg.... but that's just my inner horror film talking. =3

I love how you started this story, i enjoy how you write third person, the characters' thought processes, ect.

On a structural note, your paragraphs are a little lengthy, and their spacing is off. Also, by breaking into first person for some chapters, its a little confusing for the reader.
It's like a diary entry, as you've said, so try setting up the scene as though Georg is about to write in his journal, then quote what he writes. It'll be easier for the reader to follow and you'll still get to express what needs to be said in the first person.

This last chapter was good, however, if felt rushed, like not quite enough time was spent on the scene changes at the end, nor on the setting.

Overall, i'm enjoying this story a lot for having just discovered it! I encourage you to keep up the good work. ^_^

Author's Response: Thank you! That's the best review I've ever gotten! ^_^rnrnBill and Tom aren't twins...but they do have a past. I'm actually about to write a story about the Tom and Bill in this story. For now, he'll interject and you'll find out bits and pieces. In the new story, the same thing will be done with the Georg and Gustav. They'll go hand in hand.rnrnThanks for the criticism as well. I don't really think about my spacing. I just type it as I think it and in the places that I think breaks would fit. My last chapter was rushed. I apologize. I was nervous. I'm really not good with sex scenes. rnrnFor the chapters that are in 1st person...I didn't really think about it. or, I did think about it and I liked the transitions. How you can get inside of the character. No scene, just their thoughts. The thing about Gustav and Georg were..well...I dunno. I thought I implied it. Not well enough. I'll definately keep that in mind.rnrnTHANK YOU FOR YOUR INTEREST IN MY STORY!!! It makes me very happy. rnrnOh, and your horror film conspiracy.rnrnYou've basically summed Georg up in a nutshell. Gustav, well...he's not murderous. He's possessive. Definately creepy, but not a killer. he's my proof that you should never ignore/trust the quiet ones.rnrnHe's evolving...and very creepy...but not a killer. Not yet.rnrn(I might make him kill Georg's dad. I haven't decided yet. ^_^)rnrnTHANK YOU SOOOO MUCH!!!

Paragraphs 5-8 struck a wayyy familiar chord with me if you know what I mean. I like it.

I know you don't think like this or like you do in most stories, but you truly get into the heads of those that do. I'm so proud of you. This shows real creative ingenuity for you to be able to describe what each of these types of individuals think and feel. It's amazing.

I'm very proud.

THANK THE FUCKING HEAVENS YOU'RE BACK.
this story is just sexy.

OMG I LOVE YOU

I Have missed this fic soooo fucking much

You posted again! This story is my favorite obsession. My god, evil never felt so good.