Date: 06/05/15 05:59 pm Title: Lemons and Limes
this was so dirty and hot hhhh i loved it, i love that tom drank his own piss at the end yum ;w;
Date: 01/24/14 07:12 pm Title: Lemons and Limes
I will never not like this fic. It actually disturbs me how much I enjoy it :P
Date: 12/26/12 04:48 pm Title: Lemons and Limes
Is there going to be a sequal with Georg?
Date: 04/21/11 09:39 am Title: Lemons and Limes
Holy mother of what the fuck. That was intensely insane and so fucking good. Water sport that actually delivers.
Date: 10/03/10 02:20 pm Title: Lemons and Limes
lol yeah, I liked it
Date: 07/30/10 04:19 am Title: Lemons and Limes
"Wow fuck shit ass ouch"
These were my words after this story purdy good
Date: 04/18/10 05:22 pm Title: Lemons and Limes
Holy shit.
Thats all i can say.
:D
Date: 08/18/09 04:20 am Title: Lemons and Limes
Guess whoooo ;)
*flails*
you crazy, sick bastard. I love you, lmao. This is disturbing, and amazing all in one. Bill would be proud ;)
Date: 08/12/09 03:48 am Title: Lemons and Limes
Haha Tom farted.
Date: 05/26/09 08:49 pm Title: Lemons and Limes
I FRIKIN LOVED IT!!!
okay sure it might be a little twisted and fucked up
but damnit
that's wat make this site
and the twin a shit more funn
and more loved by THF readers
EVERYWHERE!!!
Date: 02/18/09 02:08 am Title: Lemons and Limes
simply wonderfulllll :)
Date: 01/11/09 10:34 am Title: Lemons and Limes
Wow, this was so hot! I'm just speechless...
Great fic!
Date: 01/08/09 11:16 pm Title: Lemons and Limes
wow ok, that was a little disturbing,
BUT SO FREAKIN' HOT!!!!
i read this a while back and i've been into water sport and food play ever since.
i love in when Bill gets all dominatrix.
YOU ARE FREAKIN' AWSOME!!!
Author's Response: ;) Thanks for the praise. I'm glad I got you into water sport and foodplay..XD I think! And Thanks for reviewing~~~
Date: 01/03/09 09:16 pm Title: Lemons and Limes
his hands bound above his head, his ankles bound on either side of three-foot-long bar, - yes this is how I want my tom!
He wanted Tom to think he was alone. He wanted to see what Tom would do. – *flutter claps* this is an evil thing to do! I want to do it next!
"You will get two seconds to swallow, got it?" Bill asked, squatting more. Tom merely trembled his head in a motion that vaguely resembled "yes", while he remained open-mouthed and ready. – Oh my what are we swallowing? *cringes*
Bill roughly and without warning shoved two fingers deep inside his asshole. - *smiles*
Bill, hard and cold Mistress on the outside, nonetheless utterly melted on the inside as he watched the smile on Tom's tortured face. – awh!
Then he farted. - *claps hand over mouth* and *giggles from behind the hand*
"If you don't hesitate when counting, then you will be allowed to come when we are through. Understand?" - *flutter claps* I love a mean mistress!
"Shut up now, or else," Bill snapped, tipping the pitcher slowly, filling the wide bowl of the funnel with ice water and watching it slowly drain down into his twin's rectum. - *squeaks in delight*
he desperately suppressed moan after moan - *flutter claps* and *giggles* I’m so sick and twisted.
He was sweating and bouncing around in his inverted state, agonizingly impatient to have that burning stop immediately. Yet he wished it would last forever, too. The maddening paradox of sensation and need was like a drug. - *grins* lovely just lovely
"Come now," he snapped, and Tom did. – lovely! *covers mouth* and *shakes with excitement*
In a moment Tom would appear at their bedroom door, limping, grinning through his pain, dripping obscenely with fluids. His cock would be massive and ready, once again. He would throw himself on Bill and fuck him savagely. Flipping him over, like the 105-pound rag-doll that he was, Tom would proceed to fuck him without pause. – AWESOME they’re both bottoms! *grins*
There were so many things he wanted to do... – yes I hope there’s a sequal to this one!!! *claps hands over mouth* OMG soooooo good!!! *shudders*
Date: 11/23/08 11:49 pm Title: Lemons and Limes
Haha WOW that was intense. But I liked it. Very kinky *wink and smile*
Date: 10/05/08 12:59 pm Title: Lemons and Limes
That...was hot.
Date: 08/20/08 01:35 pm Title: Lemons and Limes
Omg.. xD Omg.. xD Omg.. xD That must be painful!!! xD So painful!! xD yeye, loved the story.. xD
Date: 08/16/08 03:03 am Title: Lemons and Limes
Leana,
I hope you take this review in the light that I give it. Please understand that I don't bother reviewing things that I simply don't like. I just click the back button and pretend I've never read them.
I read this story days ago and I decided to just be a lurker because I really couldn't think of anything nice to say. After thinking it over, I've decided to review because I think it's worth my time. I think you're one of the writers here that can take a little constructive criticism, even if you don't like it. I'm reviewing because I believe you have potential as a writer and I hope that you will take some of my advice into consideration.
I've read a couple of your PWP oneshots, and honestly, I think you could do better. The seem to hinge on being shocking or vulgar. Of all of your work that I've read, this is the best example of that problem. I feel like you are spending more time trying to create the most shocking, vulgar, and kinky fic that you can, and while there's nothing wrong with a little kinky here and there, your fic is riding on it. I feel that it's stunting your development as a writer.
It sort of reminds me of those radio personalities; the ones they call “Shock Jocks”. They rarely say anything of actual merit, but they keep their ratings up by saying things that shock people and get them talking. I think you're better than this. I think you could do more. I know that you have things of merit to say. I know you have good stories to tell.
I'm sure there are some people who enjoy reading stories for their shock value just like there are people who enjoy listening to shock jocks. I'm not one of them and it frustrates me to see you waste your time on stories that have no literary merit when I feel like you're capable of more. I just wish you'd spend time refining your skills, developing your characterization, and creating stories that can get people talking without just shocking them.
In short, this oneshot sacrifices all the things that I feel are important in a story and hinges on the fact that it's kinky and shocking. I wish you'd take your skill and do something more with it. Maybe just try writing a story without sex. Work on realistic dialogue, in depth characterization, and your style and flow.
-Froggy
Date: 08/08/08 06:08 pm Title: Lemons and Limes
Wow...limes huh? Haha! Original XD
I looove the golden shower Bill gave to Tom. Damn, that was just...YUM.
Great fic again!