Date: 08/18/08 09:34 pm Title: Makeover Time!
so i definitely did not realize that this second chapter was up. lol im dumb.
anyways i can just picture bill now, and damn does he look hot. lol anyways i cannot wait for the next chapter and to see tom's reaction to the insanely hot always attractive bill! update soon!!!!
Date: 08/10/08 10:38 pm Title: Makeover Time!
ok so i love this story and i think your writing is really good the only thing i find slightly annoying is the mean girls reference. it was funny the first time but after that it seems a little like you were trying to force humor ( im not trying to be mean just trying to give a little concri)
Author's Response: theres more then one line of Mean Girls??? cuz i only ment the first if there is more then one then sorry im not trying 2 do that.
Date: 08/03/08 09:16 pm Title: Makeover Time!
Oh mein gott! Update fast please! I can't wait to see Tom's reaction!
Author's Response: ill try but i think i have writers block i really need insperation
Date: 08/03/08 05:49 pm Title: Makeover Time!
ah Andreas was been a teas with bill but at less he convince him to do a make over...well hope to read the next chapter soon ^^
Date: 08/03/08 05:38 pm Title: Track Meet
hahah he called bill a hobo xD
Date: 08/03/08 04:53 pm Title: Makeover Time!
OOH. I can't wait for more! And Tom's reaction of course. Haha, I love it (:
Date: 08/03/08 03:42 pm Title: Makeover Time!
I love this story it's so cute! i can't wait to see Tom's reaction!
Date: 08/03/08 02:54 pm Title: Makeover Time!
I can tell you're new at this. It was a bit too fast. And a bit unreal but hey, keep writing!
Date: 08/03/08 02:27 pm Title: Makeover Time!
ooooohhh i liikkee this one!!! the makeover was the best partt!! lolz.. write faster pleeaseee!!
Date: 08/03/08 02:25 pm Title: Makeover Time!
aaaaaaaaahhhhh
i need to knooooooooooowwww
more please!!!
*begs*
Date: 08/03/08 02:21 pm Title: Track Meet
Oh Billa! Getting all pretty for his Tomi! ;DD
Update soon!^^
*Blows kiss*
Date: 08/03/08 02:02 pm Title: Makeover Time!
and it's time for cinderella to meet her prince XDDD
Date: 08/03/08 01:26 pm Title: Makeover Time!
Um, this really really reminds me of another story I read, but I can't remeber the title. But I think tom's gonna turn out to be a lot nicer guy in this fic (:
Date: 08/03/08 12:30 am Title: Track Meet
You asked how you can get a better reader?
Just go to
http://fiction.tokiohotelfiction.com/viewpage.php?page=Beta
or, under main menu at the side of the page, click Beta Reader.
From there, a list of beta readers will appear and all you have to do is email them if you want them to become one.
Everything is explained there.
Date: 08/02/08 12:33 pm Title: Track Meet
Can anyone please tell me how to get a beta reader???????
Date: 08/02/08 11:06 am Title: Track Meet
I think it definitely has a future, as long as you update soon. lol i like this idea so far, it's different. please update soon!
Author's Response: Thank you and ill try to update soon
Date: 08/02/08 09:29 am Title: Track Meet
I definitly want more ;D
Date: 08/02/08 09:28 am Title: Track Meet
It's not bad, in fact it's pretty cute. But I do have one thing PLEASE don't use Mean Girls quotes. LMAO. You also might wanna work on your punctuation and sentence fluency. Other than those this was a really great for someone new to this. Good job and I can't wait to see what you've planned for the rest of the story. :]
Author's Response: LOL! ill try not too!! its just my cousin is obssesed with Mean Girls so i know alot of the quotes thanks to her. Thank you for reviewing!!!!!
Date: 08/02/08 08:20 am Title: Track Meet
great beginning.. waiting 4 next chap.. it should be amazing
Date: 08/02/08 08:13 am Title: Track Meet
I like it keep going