Date: 08/08/08 07:47 am Title: The fifth chapter
That was beautiful. I loved the whole thing. Wonderful job. :)
Author's Response: thank you so, so much !!!
Date: 08/08/08 07:27 am Title: The fifth chapter
How the hell have I missed a new story from firelucy? And 4 chapters aswell? I must have been sleeping for something! But in one way I'm glad, since I got to read it all in one go from beginning to end :) It was sweet and wonderful! Have a nice weekend!
Author's Response: awww well I'm happy you found it at last ,) and even happier that you liked it! always a pleasure reading your reviews love, hugs n kisses, luce <3
Date: 08/08/08 07:04 am Title: The fifth chapter
wow, that was ana amazing ending. it was perfect im so glad it ended well!!
Author's Response: thank you so much, I'm a sucker for happy endings ,)
Date: 08/08/08 06:38 am Title: The fifth chapter
I want to cry now that this is over ;__; It was truly a wonderful read; the more I read from you, the more I like it. You have a way with words, and a way with smut scenes (something about how you word their actions and emotions just makes it all so amazing) and I really can't wait to see what comes next :)
Author's Response: OO *blushes* oh my God, that means so much to me man ! lol, I have my way with the smut scenes as Tom has his way with Bill (or the other way around) ,p thanks girl <3 love
Date: 08/07/08 03:18 pm Title: The first chapter
Hey you =D
I'm super happy with they updated. I'm floating somewhere up in the sky and just need a moment XD Anyway they chapter was totally awesome, just so sweet and romantic, made my heart practically melt ^^
Now first to your author response ^^
people seriously got hit by lightning? That's awful O_o Damn weather ;-)
Oooh and I love that you gave me an inside in how you see the title in this story. It really does fit perfectly with the story. It was nice to see that you putt though in the title and I like how you see this, it's some really deep thought ;-) so thanks for sharing ^^
"It was impossible, Tom decided, not to love Bill."
Don't we all love Bill :-p Jeah Tom you got it bad,nothing to do about it.
"”I do have some things I would like to get done…” Tom spotted the insistent look in Simone’s eyes. It was never wise, going against the woman. Who knows, she might strangle you with a pillow. ”"
Jeah I would be careful if I was Tom :-p I love sentences about the snoring part, had to laugh at that ^^
"And anyway, it would be sad to see the youngest son walk up the aisle with a bride before his two older brothers had even found a suitable companion."
Glad she sees that she has an other son that can marry a woman to :-p maybe keep the pressure of Tom to do so to. Well anyway isn't going to happen, hihi.
"Bill tried, he tried hard! But it was impossible not falling for Tom"
Aaaauw there in love with each other, no point in fighting the inevitable. ^^
Now they just have to tell each other...
"Gustav had often told Bill of his thoughts, of his musings. Bill was always impressed that a boy so separate from the rest of the world could understand it so much better than everyone else."
Love Gustav character in this ;-) maybe he should tell the world and get them to chance everything so that Bill and Tom can get married ^^ To bad that it just doesn't go like that, it takes time.
I guess I'm just an hopeless romantic that craves for a happy ending ^^
"”That’s my brother, Gustav, the blonde one.” Tom answered sorrowfully, wishing it was him walking Bill around like that"
A bit jealous not, maybe you should do something about it.
"Gustav laughed, knowing Bill’s attempts to get him married when he saw them. Bill wasn’t as pushy as his parents though, Bill only joked about it. But this time he actually was quite right, the girl was cute."
Hihi, who knows. In some time both Gustav and Georg are married =D And I think that they girl is really sweet and like Bill said could be someone who can listen to his thought and appreciate that. Jeah he deserves that to. ;-)
"Howeve,r I already have a companion, as you can see.” Bill almost smacked him at that, what was Gustav doing?"
Bill Bill don't you see that Tom is jealous hihi. you will thank him later:-p
"”Then we both want something we can’t have.” The pain evident in Tom’s voice made Bill scoot closer, balancing at the edge of his seat and looking at Tom with pleading eyes. "
That was sad and I was like the entire time; Yes you can! :-p (Always talking to the story like this =D)
"”You love me back?” Tom looked at him with such innocent eyes that Bill could do nothing but smile."
Aaaaaauw, I actually squealed when he said that *sigh* so sweet *dreamy look*
"”The thing is though, Bill, there is no me without you. There is no Tom without Bill, just like there is no day without night. I need you, Bill,” Tom whispered. ”I need you so much more than you know!”"
Ooooh, cute XD Tom is being so lovely!
"”So what, if we don’t get any guests in our wedding. They can’t refuse us, can they?” Tom knew nothing of marriage, he had never bothered finding out. But what he did know was that if there was not a law stating that he could not marry Bill, he was going to do it."
I really wonder what they are going to do? reality is reality and I wonder what will happen now.
I so hope they can stay together.
You would make them find a way, wouldn't you, I sure hope so (A)
That's it :-p I hope you'll updated soon ;-) I'll be waiting
*hug*
-xXx-
Author's Response: Lol, hey girl ,) happy you liked the snoring part, I try to put in those moments in all of my fics, but it' harder in some than others ,p and awww to Gustav, he really is sort of cute in this. And now I was even nice to him and gave him girlfriend material ,) you talk to the story ? that is so über cute <3 lol Tom is a hopeless romantic in this chapter, but I rather like him that way ,) as for your question about me making them find a way ,) well last chapter is done and betaed and will be up soon so you can see for yourself! oh and by the way, remember that girl you told me about who did something that I'm not gonna mention here just incase, well she hasn't mailed me yet so I was wondering if you could maybe talk to her again, just make her mail me ??? pretty pretty please...with a cherry on top...or wedding statues of Tomi and Billa <3 much love girl, luce
Date: 08/07/08 01:49 am Title: The fourth chapter
Such a lovely story and with random acts of totally hot sex. Can't wait for the next chapter.
Author's Response: *head desk* yeah, that's me in a nutchell, writing random acts of sex ,p thanks
Date: 08/07/08 12:07 am Title: The fourth chapter
as amazing, really beautiful and hot at the same time. lol this is such a cute story, im in love with it!! please please PLEASE! update soon!
Author's Response: oh thank you so much, that really means a lot to me! I promise to update real soon okay? ,)
Date: 08/06/08 06:00 pm Title: The fourth chapter
Awww! This story is amazing, and I love the idea! I really hope this works out for them in the end... And preferably with minimal hassle!
Author's Response: lol, minimal hassle, when has ever that occured ,) thank you so, so much for this, it means the world to me !!!
Date: 08/06/08 12:42 pm Title: The first chapter
I love this story so so much, you have to update very soon, ok?
The end was very romantic and my eyes are all wet. I hope that in the end they´ll be together (married or not), their love must survive every problem they´ll deal with. :-)
Author's Response: I promise to update real soon! and aww you're just as much a hopeless romantic as I am <3 lol, thanks ,)
Date: 08/06/08 12:31 pm Title: The third chapter
Well isn't Gusti quite the philosopher?
Loved this chapter.
Author's Response: lol, yeah he is ,) thanksies !
Date: 08/06/08 11:10 am Title: The fourth chapter
I've read whole chapters and I'm reading this chap now :D you're amazing, I love you! *lack of cookies..* instead, I wish I could make something for you.. or I'll do it ! :0 I don't know when it would be, but I gotta make sure that I'm in love with your fic and you make me happy with it :) -rabby
Author's Response: weeeeeeee, you're such a cutie pie ,) thank you so much darling, you know how much this means to me ,p *hugs you till you squeak*
Date: 08/06/08 09:28 am Title: The third chapter
so sad... however amazing again :-)
Author's Response: thank you ! that means a lot
Date: 08/06/08 09:00 am Title: The second chapter
oh jeez... what should I say after such a passionate chapter? so so hot...
I like it :D:D ;-)
Author's Response: hihi thanks ,) reviews make me smile so bad xD
Date: 08/06/08 08:34 am Title: The first chapter
yes... hell I like it!
Author's Response: lol, good to know ,) thanks
Date: 08/06/08 08:30 am Title: The fourth chapter
aw, this is so cute! "Da geht mein Herz auf!" hehe^^
Author's Response: aw, danke pumpkin ,) that made me smile
Date: 08/06/08 08:20 am Title: The fourth chapter
Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww~ *-*
That chapter was so cute (like... every sentence! *-* I can't even quote just some parts here and there, it's the whole chapter I should copy-paste in this review) and there was everything that I was hoping for and even more than that!
Tom proposing to Bill *kyaaaaaaaaa!* ^o^
And I ~love~ Gustav!!!
I love you for writing such a beautiful and romantic story! *-*
(I liked when you called me 'Paris', that was so sweet *giggles* ^^)
Author's Response: Paris, sweetie ,) so happy you like Gustav in this cus I've been working a lot with his haracter, and yes awwww to Tom proposing, but it had to happen, I just couldn't contain myself <3 God, thank you so much for this! it means so, SO much to me! much love <3 luce
Date: 08/06/08 06:06 am Title: The fourth chapter
i cant blame the mother nature, or anyone else.
i just bless luce to write these pieces of art.
Honey you know, every single chapter is better than the previous.
i just read all the story again.
you choose the words so carefully and the result is perfect.
my imagination run to the the beautiful scenes which create by your wonderful words.
i feel my self in front of the heroes of your story, i can smell the vanilla essence, i can fell tom's agony and bill cuteness.
my inspirated writer!!
just thank you so much for these feelings which you fill my mind and my heart.
god bless you my girl.
yours
chris
Author's Response: *floating somewhere on a cloud up in seventh heaven* you know girl, if you keep spoiling me like this then I'm just gonna stay up here! but I'm not complaining, I quite like the view! Thank you so, so, SO much for this, you should know by now how much I appreciate you for doing this and how much it means to me to read your reviews. If my words are calculated to create perfection then yours are just painted in the perfect way to make me blush in the brightest of crimson, much like I'm doing right now ,) and it's all because of you girl <3
Date: 08/06/08 05:30 am Title: The fourth chapter
My Goodness! You're the best, darling! I put you in my favorites! (and my bio) ;) Another update! Lots of Love! :*
Author's Response: *blushes* weeeeeee, that is so über sweet of you ! and lol to the username thing, I'm gonna start saying that to my friends now ,p
Date: 08/06/08 05:30 am Title: The fourth chapter
I love this story! I just hope it doesn't end too soon, because I am seriously addicted D:
Author's Response: *hides behind hands* don't kill me, but there's only one more chapter to go. really, really happy you like it though !!! thanksies <3
Date: 08/03/08 12:42 pm Title: The third chapter
Hey girl ^^
Finally got some time to review the third chapter. I've been pretty busy ;-)
And I wanted to take the time to do so
I don't believe that i told you already that I liked the title of this story ;-)I always wonder what they meaning behind it is ;-)
"But then the sun rose and Tom would again be addressed to as ’my Lord’ and not ’oh Tomi’ as he would so often hear in Bill’s company."
This is kind of sad if you ask me. Bill will think that Tom sees him as an equal all though he isn't really.
" Long legs twisted around the sheets because of the summer heat, face completely peaceful like it would be when he rested it in the warmth of Tom’s neck."
hihi, loved this line(A) he does thing a lot about Bill. I think this was so sweet. Tom is so in love, he only don't realize it :-p they really are acting like a lovely couple behind closed doors ;-)
Like they scene were Bill sneaked in Tom room to find the black lace there. That was really sweet.
To bad that the talk with his dad screwed that all up. It was like Tom got a harsh reality check and he got back at his world were acting like he does isn't allowed. But at least he talked back to his dad. I could just imagine his face, hihi.
"”You’re saying I’m in love with a slave? A bloody slave, Dad?” Tom spat the word as if it was venom, his stomach twisting painfully at the feelings his father’s words brought to him. Tom Kaulitz was not in love with a cheap sex toy."
I didn't like Tom for saying that. I know that he is brought up to think like that. So it seems that he isn't lose of the rules that society brought upon them. All thought he thinks it's not entirely right.I don't know how to explain it ;-) It made me a bit sad to.
“I’m homosexual, Father, live with it!” Tom got up."
=D at least he said that. there go's his dad's dream about grandchildren but he got other sons to so :-p
"In those moments of utter perfection, Bill would daydream of things other than erotic fantasies. He would wonder what life would have been like if he was born in such a place, if he belonged there like Tom did."
I so feel for Bill though, that just heartbreaking. Life doesn't treat him fair.
"It was just that the black-haired boy had become so accustomed to being Tom’s equal that he had forgotten about his place, his fate in life. Bill’s place was under Tom’s command, not his care."
I almost cried here, really poor Bill. Tom was being cruel even if he was suppose to acted like that. But to me it seems even crueler now that Bill got a taste at what it is like to be treated like an equal. And now it seems like it's taken from him. I think that Bill will watch now how he act around Tom. because he says that he will never forget that again. yea, that was sad.
I really loved the talk between Gustav and Bill. It shows the dept of his character.
"“Exactly!” Gustav smiled at him lovingly, like a big brother teaching of life’s mysteries to a little child." He seems very wise if you ask me. Never though at comparing love with a flower though. Well not like you putt it ;-)
“You wait! And then, with time, the flower will bloom and you’ll find that it is the most beautiful thing you have ever seen in your entire life!”
I hope they will but I bet that they have a lot of obstacles to overcome before they can fully give in to it.
"It whirled around him for a second before slipping through his fingers as he tried to touch it. Teasingly, it stroke across his cheek one last time before flying on and taking the scent of flowers and vanilla with it."
I just love this sentence girl you are amazingly good at this ;-)
Again a pretty long review, always seem to have a lot to say about your story ;-)
Can't wait to see how they story will develop now so you update soon *begs*
*hug*
-xXx-
Author's Response: Kris <3 *hugs you* God, I'm sorry I havn't responded to this review sooner, but my internet was out, we had some massive thunderstorms all over the place, 91 people were hit by lightning. but, to the review ,) the title is from the line in the song 'Eyes betray the soul and bear its thinking' I just thought it would fit both Tom and Bill so well because they are playing two parts in a society and being who that society wants them to be. But when they look into each other's eyes they can see the soul of the other. It's my favorite line of the song! I really feel bad for Bill for doing this because I sort of let him get a taste of how it was to be equalized to Tom and then it was ripped from him so harshly that it shred him to pieces. And Tom :'( unfortounately, I think this is how it had to be, because he is, like everyone else, so tied to the rules and believes of his society that he has a hard time breaking free. Gustav is older and has had some more time to think about it, but Tom needs that final push to be able to see the truth, that loving a slave isn't wrong at all. lol, I get so into talking with you ,p source of inspiration huh ,) thank you so much for this Kris, I really hope you will like the next chap which is up now! much love <3 yours luce