Date: 08/29/08 05:12 pm Title: Chapter 5
Oh yes! You have updated one of my ALL TIME favorite stories ever! *clap dance snort giggle*
Anyway down to business.
The first part of this chapter aka 'the dream' was rather confusing and rather hard to understand, although you being one of my favorite authors ever I have complete faith that it will make sense in due time.
You leave so much wanting and wondering in your chapters whenever I see an update I hope maybe some of my questions will be answered, but I'm always left with more. It' marvelous!
Although in the begining of this story it amde much more sense and now everything is starting to become hazy and it's hard to know exactly what's going on.
It took you an AWFUL LONG TIME TO UPDATE! You meanie. I know I said take your time, but *sniffle* that was a really long time...ALMOST a month!
*deep breath* Take as much time as you need to update, I hope you and your 'bffl' and your boyfriend work all your troubles out.
No I have not seen someone jerk off to Harry Potter, that'd be a bit frightening.
You said you needed ideas, correct?
I sadly have none for you.
Author's Response: I'm glad it made it into your list =PrnrnAwwwww....you're flattering me to update quickly aren't you xP just kidding...rnrnDon't worry in the end...which is sadly near =[ all questions will be answered...if you still got a question you can ask freely in a review or something and I'll get back at you...rnrnThat's my plan...confusing readers xD...well not so much that I confuse myself too xD [it happened O.o]rnrnI know...and I'm again taking long to update...but i have a reason...if I update this chapter which I also find CONFUSING no one would get it...but now I've managed to get my WMM back gah -.- pc's like fucked up =/ so as soon as the video's ready, which is soon, the chapter will be up =DDDrnrnAnd uhh...it didn't work =[...She barely talks to me, just a hello now =/ but anyway...rnrnAnd I hope you dont think I took what you said deliberately xPrnrnIt's all that windows movie maker fault...Probably this would be finished now...rnrnAnd, it's not frightening =P...Well it was actually kinda emmm...ok i think I'll leave it out...but then it was hilarious kinda xPrnrnDon't worry...rnrnThanks for reviewing, mah fav reviewer =DDDrnrnStay tuned xP
Date: 08/26/08 02:16 pm Title: Chapter 5
"This ISN'T the end...I know I said it would be 5 chapters, but it's gonna be longer =]" yippee!! 8DDD
Date: 08/21/08 07:52 pm Title: Chapter 5
i hope Bill N Tom get togather
Date: 08/19/08 10:27 pm Title: Chapter 5
Yaaa the story is not over I can't wait for more of it.
Date: 08/17/08 12:34 pm Title: Chapter 5
i am soooo confused now. like incredibly so. i have no idea whats going on. lol
Date: 08/17/08 09:34 am Title: Chapter 5
OH plz update soon!!!??? It's getting so addictive!!!!!!^.^
Date: 08/17/08 09:18 am Title: Chapter 1
Hey,
Haven't got a chance to read the fic yet, but the title just makes me cringe so badly. That wayward comma is driving me a little insane. I swear, every time I look at it I have to turn my head away and die a little inside.
...um, basically, there shouldn't be a comma there. :3 And as far as misplaced commas go, at the beginning of the chapter you have it after 'have'... it shouldn't be there either.
I'd say something about the word fancying in the summary too (italics and bold and underlining) but that didn't make me wince in horror so I'm chill.
My OCD grammar and punctuation jumps down everyone's throats, so don't feel offended. It wouldn't be a big deal at all, except for the fact that it's in the title. Getting rid of it would make it look so, so much better. Not to mention accurate.
Cheers,
Ella
Date: 08/17/08 02:59 am Title: Chapter 5
Update? This is cool.
Date: 08/15/08 01:02 am Title: Chapter 4
ohh! deff. one of my fav stories
cant wait to read what happens next XD
Date: 08/12/08 10:14 am Title: Chapter 4
finally I let myself read it:) It's just amazing, really....wow...I muts read more or I will die x))
Date: 08/08/08 02:56 am Title: Chapter 4
I love this story!
It's so... Awesome! :D
Please continue! :)
Date: 07/31/08 09:11 pm Title: Chapter 4
i dont get this one
Date: 07/29/08 05:08 pm Title: Chapter 1
Not to be rude, but hurry and add more lol. really good story. and for the username "Jay", Ben is Tom's father enemy. Tom's dad stole toms mom away from Ben.
Date: 07/29/08 01:17 pm Title: Chapter 1
I liked it. :]
It's different, but goood.
Date: 07/28/08 11:59 am Title: Chapter 4
wait so Tom is Bills brother?
Date: 07/27/08 02:18 pm Title: Chapter 4
OoOoOoOoO I love it!!! *jumps up ans down* hee hee I love it!!! Oh, have i already said that??? Oh welll *sings* I love it, Oh oh oh, I love it!!!!! hee hee, Come on keep me happy and jumping and singing, post more!!!!!! XD
Date: 07/27/08 04:47 am Title: Chapter 4
When I saw this I just had to read, how come :-p I really thought it would be all funny and happy but you surprised me with the twist :-p Don't get me wrong I absolutely don't mind ;-)
Well first I was confused about who Ben was and than it hit me, must be the man Bill worked for.:-p But than I want to know how come that Tom knows Bill.
Gordon really is something giving his son they name of a boy he used to shag. (Did I get that right?)
I kind of feel sorry for Ben but I don't think I will for long, I think ;-)
So I really hope you continue this fast because I want to know more ^^
Author's Response: LOL...rnrnI can never write something all funny =/...but a twist is good imo...rnrnYou got that right...Ben is the guy that took Bill in. you'll know soon about Tom and Bill's relationship =P...rnrnYes, you got that right, Gordon's first born was named after his lover back at school.rnrnYou'll see =P...there's more to Ben that gives to the eye XDrnrnDW, next chapter should be out is a few days...Stay tuned =D
Date: 07/27/08 01:30 am Title: Chapter 4
MOAR MOAR!!!
but i like the bill pov's better... seriously cool writing though
:)
Author's Response: MOAR? does that mean more?rnrnOh well, Bill's always one of the loved ones...but this had to be put in the fic...rnrnI'm gladyou like =] && thanks =D