Date: 07/12/08 09:55 am Title: Chapter 1
Pretty :]
I know what that feels like, I'm going through it right now. I've never been through it before because I'm young and what not, so... yeah. It burns :(
Poor Gusti ;__;
Author's Response: oh...i hope things work out for you...but please dont do what gustav did...it doesnt work...trust me i tried...though for a different reason... rnrnthanx for the review XD!!!
Date: 07/11/08 08:31 pm Title: Chapter 1
man I seriously thought it was Bill!
you sooooo got me!
Very good written:D
Author's Response: haha! that was the idea!!! i wanted people to think that...it was originally gonne be Bill...but then i thought it would be a good twist if it was Tom....sooo. yeah!!!rnthanx for the review!!!XD
Date: 07/11/08 06:52 pm Title: Chapter 1
Not very long? Long enough I might say. Longer would get unbearable, and shorter might leave too many things unsaid. I just didn't have really clear what happened to Tom, was him unconscious? disabled? plainly hurt and in observation while they take care of him until he gets better?
Anyway, really emotional, and straight to my little oversensitive heart.
Author's Response: ummm...Tom was like...unconscious...its kinda however you want it to be...i couldnt have made it any longer if i had tried...so...yeah...i only wrote in in like a double lesson which at my school is....1hour 40minutes....thanx for the review!!
Date: 07/11/08 06:27 pm Title: Chapter 1
That was a very good story. uhm if you dont mind i just have a couple of things to critique. Please dont take them offensively. It wasnt really, emotionally pulling for me. For a one shot it could have been better. And you dont really know as a reader that its a suicide letter until the end, the last paragraph. So it was really confusing until that point. Also, it was a little repetitive, especially with the emotions and such. But above all that i think it was a great concept and a fairly good story.
Author's Response: i really DONT take that offensively at all...it means a lot to me for ppl to review it like that...id rather you tell me that...than say "it was good" when it really wasnt...thank you...though to be fair to myself...im not much of a one shot writer and iam still only 15 (i havent been writing ffs very long) and like i said...i was bored in food tech..and i didnt work on it at all...and as far as the repetativness(sp?) is concerned it was supposed to be like that...it was supposed to show how confused gustav was feeling...i obviously didnt get that across...now i know for next time XD!!! thanx for reviewing and sorry for the reeeeally long response...
Date: 07/11/08 06:15 pm Title: Chapter 1
i love it ferni...its beautifuly writen:)
Author's Response: thanx...tho i dont think it is...XD liebe dich...