just as they had been for the previous two weeks – very subtle very good use of a time indicator! It’s always hard to get those in there with out saying….two weeks later blah blah blah!

Ever since then, Tom had watched what he’d said and done around his brother – never saying anything that would truly hurt Bill’s feelings but teasing his brother just enough that they would end up wrestling or in a similar position that required just as much body-on-body contact. – oh my yes it’s going to get complicated!

Tom gaped, impressed that his brother had not only managed having his period for the first time all by himself but also remained a civilised human being for the entire week. – Thank you for NOT doing the cliché OMG I’m really a girl I have my period bit in this story!!! Seriously that bit is soooooo over used!

Bill sighed and looked at his feet. “I’m horny as fuck.” He muttered. Tom tried not to die of embarrassment.
“I mean, I’m usually a seventeen-year-old boy.” Bill continued. That converts to an average of a wank a day but since I’ve been a girl – I don’t really know…I mean…shit…” – OK hilarious! You are sooooo smart…avoid the cliché period stuff and go on to a problem that most writers avoid! AWESOME!

“You want to get me off?” Bill asked in an astonished tone. – he’s not more disturbed by this? OMG I totally would be!

“I don’t know what to do –” Bill began.
“That’s okay.” Tom cut in. “I’m sure we’ll work it out.”
Bill nodded; gaze still firmly on the floor. – oh sooo cute! *giggles* I’m all embarrassed for him!

This scene is all in the details!
Tom’s mouth was dry, his tongue practically adhering itself to the roof of his mouth.
Bill’s hair was fanned out around his head on the pillow, his eyes were glazed and half-covered with drooped lids, lips pink and wet with saliva. Tom could feel Bill’s hot breath against his neck and ear.
Tom soon discovered that Bill made the most delicious sounds when he was being thoroughly kissed. The soft satisfied whimpers pouring from his brother’s lip coupled with the almost obscene smacking sounds their lips made as they parted and met again sent shocks of pleasure racing down Tom’s spine.
There are more that made it but who needs every line repeated to them?!

Very hot twincest het? Yeah that falls under “fucked up”

plz plz plz when are you going to update androgyny i really like this story

I love love love that you write gigantic chapters. It makes me so happy.

Your writing is so fantastic, and I'm so in love with this story. I usually don't go near anything remotely resembling het, but I really love this one. That's saying a lot, haha! I don't think I've ever reviewed this story before which is dumb of me. Soooo, I think that's about it. I can't wait for more!
:)

i like it
it was awesome
can't wait for next chapter :)

Excellent! Wonderfully written, great plot! And aah! Cliffhanger!

Those two are simultaneously adorable and scorching hot. Can't wait for the next one! Love it!

-Ami

*shudder* Well that was steamy! :P *drool*

I like how Billa was worried about it affecting his voice but he went through with it anyway. Hawt!!

Author's Response: Wow. Speedy reply. Thanks darlin.

I knew they'd say Bill's missing... lol
Bill in skirts... Sexy Sexy :)
this chapter was great
hope you update soon :D

Hahahaha, missing... Good one xD
Update soon!!!! =]

missing...lol

"uh, yeah, no, Bill's fine. He's right here -- I was just totally making out with him dirty, no worries" *lol* I really can't wait to see how this turns out ^^