Date: 01/17/09 09:18 pm Title: Chapter 1
I absolutely LOVE the beginning, and I'm going to read the rest now. :)
Date: 01/17/09 10:31 am Title: Chapter 6
I can't wait for the last chapter. Really, I can't. Why is Tom completely alone?
Date: 01/17/09 10:07 am Title: Chapter 5
Oops...Guess Bill's plan wasn't foolproof, eh? I like this!
Date: 01/17/09 02:00 am Title: Chapter 2
I just fainted.
loooove it!
Date: 01/16/09 08:56 pm Title: Chapter 3
Oh, wow, that was close. I'm still completely confused and this doesn't really seem to have much of a plot...
Date: 01/16/09 08:43 pm Title: Chapter 2
Wow. That was unbelievable HOT! You can really write sex scenes! But I still really want to know why Bill randomly became a girl...Is this just one of those "willing supsension of disbelief" things?
Date: 01/16/09 05:06 pm Title: Chapter 1
I like this so far. I'm glad it isn't one of those "Bill gets a sex change operation!" fics, but I'm confused as to why he randomly changed genders during the night.
I normally hate reading het, but I like this so far.
Date: 01/16/09 04:49 pm Title: Chapter 6
Wow! This story is really nice! Like, I don't really like het, and I don't read it often. But I found this fic in the featured section and I thought I'd give it a try. And I have to say, I was hooked immediately.
I'd read a femaleBill/Tom story before but I didn't finish it because I was kind of overwhelmed by how much of female Bill was. To say this simply, he was refferee to as "she", while here it is "he"- the only difference is the body, so that's the difference.
Sure, it was a teeny bit awkward at first, but it is beautifully written and the plot is just right. I can't wait for the next chapter, I'll be anxiously waiting to see what happens.
Have a nice day! :-)
Date: 01/16/09 04:11 pm Title: Chapter 4
Awwww! So sweet and yet so fuckin HOT at the same time! *runs off to take a cold shower*
Date: 01/16/09 03:58 pm Title: Chapter 6
final chapter already?
dumb me i was thinking maybe about a little child...now that bill has her/his period...u know *grins*
or a sequel....
Date: 01/16/09 03:48 pm Title: Chapter 3
I held my breath when Georg walked in.
Then released it in a fit of laughter when Bill faked passing out.
Date: 01/16/09 03:44 pm Title: Chapter 2
HOLY SHIT HOT.
But it's a shame Bill didn't come :( ...
Oh well. I'm sure Tom will more than make up for that in the future!
Date: 01/16/09 03:25 pm Title: Chapter 1
OH WOW.
Is there gonna be some kinda scientific explanation for this later?
And if there is already. I should just click "submit" and keep reading.
Date: 01/16/09 02:48 pm Title: Chapter 2
*_*
that...was...so...HoT
shame on me that i didn't read it before it got featured *blush*
Date: 01/16/09 02:41 pm Title: Chapter 6
“I, um…God, I don’t know Bill. I love you, I guess.” Tom’s eyes widened even as the words left his mouth. - *giggles* means something different to a girl you fool around with eh?
If the plan didn’t work, he couldn’t even begin to imagine the consequences and if it did – Tom decided he didn’t really want to think about it and motioned for Bill to start. - *closes eyes and cover face* OMG I hope this works * peeks through fingers to read more*
“Tom, Bill.” Jost’s voice was unsettlingly level. “My room. Now.” - *makes face* so fare looks like it’s working. *shrieks*
Tom observed Bill for a moment. His brother was wearing his long pyjama pants that were almost entirely hidden by the folds of one of Tom’s hooded jumpers as Bill was sitting with his feet tucked up beneath him. Bill’s hair was down and naturally flowing in soft waves over his shoulders. His face was washed and void of makeup. Tom felt his lips pull back into a smile. – more lovely details!
Tom gritted his teeth, feeling ashamed as the lump in his throat rose even higher and his eyes began to burn. Bill wouldn’t understand at all if he broke down now. Bill had no idea that he’d just come to the realisation that he was very much in love with his younger brother and oh God, where did that leave him if Bill ever turned back into a boy? – awh Tom broke himself! Oops
Tom sighed and finally opened his eyes, unshed tears gluing his eyelashes together slightly. He was greeted to the sight of the off-white hotel ceiling above his head. – delicious details! Oh and awh he’s all broken see?!
But now, as Bill’s hands found his wrists and pushed them over his head, Tom found himself giving over to his younger brother. He realised that Bill was really the only person he allowed himself to be vulnerable around anymore. - *nods* I understand why? Their life is hard and you don’t get to be intimate without consequences. Another good detail.
The way Bill’s throat squeezed him as the younger twin gagged made Tom see stars. Bill pulled off him a moment later and before Tom could apologise, Bill was speaking.
“You want to fuck my mouth?” – OMG! Hot! So hot!
Bill clambered up onto the mattress between his brother’s legs, all elbows and knees and Tom couldn’t help but smile at Bill’s awkwardness. – description uh! Perfect!
Tom’s laughter died immediately. He studied Bill carefully and the younger twin folded his arms across his chest as though protecting himself from his brother’s intense scrutiny. Tom could see Bill’s jaw was set firmly and knew his younger brother was trying to hold back tears. He felt like an idiot for not realising the seriousness of the situation.
Bill, basically, had just admitted that he was romantically in love with him. Tom knew that he should be freaking out but he couldn’t suppress the happiness aching inside his chest. – yes well Tom you were thinking it earlier. Time to spill!
Yeah they love eachother! Now make them have sex! *grins* yes please!
Date: 01/16/09 02:18 pm Title: Chapter 1
OMG!!!!
this is really different
i thought that it'll be like "meridian hour" and that bill will do an operation
but no...this is AWESOME
i'll keep an eye on it
Date: 01/16/09 02:03 pm Title: Chapter 5
Bill had dropped to his knees without a word and proceeded to give him one of the most amazing blow jobs he’d ever received. – positive reinforcement?
“I always think about you.” He admitted, chest clenching when Bill’s face broke into a beautiful smile. – awh!
“Tom, don’t be…” she cut herself off, obviously thinking better of what she was about to say before beginning again. “Don’t be silly, Tomi. Your band mates let me in. Said you needed some company tonight.” – OMG!! Lol
“I’m coming out partying tonight…” Bill repeated, eyes dancing. “Dressed like this.” – the cross dressing is AWESOME!!!
This is totally genius!!! OMG!!! Do you see the exclamation points???!!!
“She was a bit of a diamond in the rough if you know what I mean.” Tom relaxed a little as Gustav laughed. - *Giggles*
They’d stopped grinding at some point, in favour of just standing and kissing one another. – not that I don’t LOVE this but? Aren’t they worried about the consequences of Claire maybe showing up in country after country? And about the G’s response…I’m just worried that someone is going to figure this out.
“Bill’s gone missing.” – SHIT see I knew this would come back to bite them in the butt!
Date: 01/16/09 01:04 pm Title: Chapter 4
Even though everyone had been fully convinced by Bill’s fainting spell, Bill completed the performance by staying close to Tom, holding onto his arm and shoulder as they walked from the show venue to their van. Tom could see Georg and Gustav shooting Bill worried looks when the singer wasn’t looking. They walked suspiciously close to Bill, as though preparing themselves to catch him if he fainted again. Bill finally spoke up when Gustav offered him a hand into the van. – well done Bill!
Your dialogue is convincing which is lovely. Sometimes that can break a perfectly good story!
Bill was worrying the cuff of one of the jumper’s sleeves with his teeth. – You English and your jumpers…you know I wouldn’t have a freaking clue what that was if I didn’t watch so much BBC! Oh hey great line…I love when people use the word worry for a physical action like chewing on cuticles and the like.
Bill was whimpering again, mumbled sentences of Tom’s name, breathless demands and unintelligent words. – lovely line! Lovely!
Bill dragged his nails down the centre of Tom’s back, hard enough to mark, and Tom had to bite down on his brother’s shoulder to keep for yelling in pleasure.
“Please Tom?” Bill hissed, pushing his hips up.
Tom shied away from the contact, knowing the roll of Bill’s hips would be almost enough to make him lose control and hump against his brother’s leg until he came.
“You should feel how wet you’ve got me.” Bill was saying. “I can feel it drenching my underwear.” – ah-ah-ah oh god! *shudders* OMG! I’m totally shattered!
His mouth opened in a silent scream, his eyes jammed shut, as his body shuddered uncontrollably against his brother’s as his warmth rushed between their meshed bodies. – fab detail, description is flawless!
“You get hot from jacking me off?” Tom mumbled, moving his lips to assault his brother’s neck. “Did it turn you on Billa?” - *smirks then snickers*
He should have known that Bill wouldn’t have understood the teasing. The younger twin didn’t have nearly enough sexual experience to realise what Tom was doing was all part of the game that they were playing. – good detail
Tears glistened on his brother’s face as Bill shuddered in another breath that Tom realised was, in fact, a suppressed sob. –awh he broke him!
This is so weird having to remember that Bill does NOT have a penis.
Date: 01/16/09 12:09 pm Title: Chapter 3
“Have you any idea how hot you look when you play guitar?” Bill whispered. – this is why he’s mad? Ha ha ha and yes Tom is fucking hot when he plays his guitar!
OMG you are SO fucking cleaver!
“Go with it.” Whispered Bill, his lips brushing the shell of Tom’s ear as he spoke.
Tom was surprised just how quickly his brain caught on to what Bill meant.
“Shit! Georg, help me. Bill’s passed out again.” Tom grunted, pushing at his brother’s weight.
OMG you are amazing!
You being clever is what this story boils down to. You think outside the box and pick things that are sometimes used but never developed! Amazing!