Date: 03/22/17 07:42 am Title: Chapter 6
this was a good story!
i hope there is a sequel to this
Date: 06/11/09 02:21 pm Title: Chapter 6
His hand twitched around the gun, but didn’t release it.
“Tom… do it. Please.” Bill was crying, more or less, his hands up in the air, his body shaking. Only now did it dawn on him. His composure was crumbling beneath his feet giving him only quicksand to stand on.
Tom was different. Tom saw this coming ever since he picked up his knife.
“Drop the gun!” the policeman repeated again.
He looked down at his hand and saw that it held around the gun he had just given Bill. Strange. He didn’t remember picking it up. – this is so much better then I thought it would be…you know I almost gave up before I got to the second chapter.
OMG this is so disturbing and twisted and confusing. *giggles* I love it!
Author's Response: i'm glad you do. I wanted a bit of disturbia in it, just to fuck everybody up
Date: 06/11/09 02:17 pm Title: Chapter 5
The smell in the car was starting to emanate outside. Tom though wasn’t sure if was just his imagination or not. It couldn’t already be smelling, right? They only ki… he had only died a few hours ago. – no he wouldn’t smell unless the car was really hot, which would speed up the decomposing process.
Oh God Tom is losing it!
“Shit.”
He picked up the phone and called the only number he remembered.
Tom heard a mumbling sound coming from the other side of the door as he was washing his hands. He involuntarily grabbed the knife he stole back from Bill and squeezed his fist around it before he pushed the door open. – oh fuck!!!!!
Author's Response: yeah, i know it wouldn't smell, but Tom's just gaga by now, i guess.
Date: 06/11/09 02:13 pm Title: Chapter 4
Things had gotten out of his grasp and hat was always something that terrified him, - woops hat? Typing error!
Oh god theyr're fucked!
Author's Response: yeah, typos fuck up my life. thanks for pointing it out
Date: 06/11/09 02:07 pm Title: Chapter 3
Why is the one who is MOST shaken the one who is driving? Why isn’t Bill driving?
“Calm down…”
“Calm down? Are you fucking serious?! How can you even say that?!”
“Just that simple. Calm down. There’s no use in trying to act all scared. I know you liked it.”
“What?!” – yes I agree what?!?!?!?!
“It’s not like that,” he croaked, unconvincingly.
“What? You’re not tired of being treated just like a profit margin? Just like a toy? You’re not tired of keeping those dreads just because the studio tells you to? You’re not tired of tripping on your jeans just because they won’t let you change your style?”
“Bill…”
“You’ve been waiting something to come along and change your life for at least 2 years. Well it came. Aren’t you glad?”
“No… not like this…” - *groans* Bill is not a good person *pouts* too bad…*whispers* shhhh I like it! Don’t tell any body!
“How can you even say that?!” he asked, this time turning his head.
Bill looked back at him, a bit scared, and asked, “Say what? Tom, I haven’t said anything since we left the city. Are you okay?” – OMG O_O Fucking awesome!!!!
Author's Response: thank you :D i liked mind fucking everybody in this chappie :D
Date: 06/11/09 01:24 pm Title: Chapter 2
“Not if they don’t catch us we’re not, Tom.”
“They’ll catch us, Bill. They always catch you.”
“Then we’ll give them a run for their money they’ll never forget.”- They’re running? What? Why it was self defense? And they’re rock stars they could get off pretty easy!
Author's Response: Really? i don't think they cut you any slack for being famous
Date: 06/11/09 12:14 pm Title: Chapter 1
“Tomi… what… you… you killed him.” - what? no what? no what? no...what?
Author's Response: ??
Date: 07/24/08 08:46 pm Title: Chapter 2
This is a really good story.
Author's Response: thank you :)
Date: 07/24/08 03:58 pm Title: Chapter 6
Oh, Tom... You'd do anything for Bill, we get it.
He's gonna take the blame, isn't he. He'll take the blame for everything. Cause Tom loves Bill. :(
Author's Response: Indeed he is. He's literally loosing his mind for him.
Date: 07/13/08 05:03 pm Title: Chapter 4
Which one of them were they talking about when they said "he couldn't have..."? OMG, do they know something we don't? WHERE ARE YOU TOM/BILL???
Author's Response: They're not implying it's one or the other. They don't know anything we don't know, so it's okay :P.
Date: 07/11/08 07:14 pm Title: Chapter 3
I'm confused! What the fuck is going on? Is Tom crazy? Is Bill crazy? I wanna know more!
Author's Response: Depends on what your take on crazy is. But no, in the general medical sense of the word, no, they're not.
Date: 07/09/08 06:56 pm Title: Chapter 3
I love insane!Tom. It suits him so perfectly it's crazy.
lol, "“I just never thought you’d scoop this low, really" I think in here you meant to say STOOP instead of SCOOP.
... Tho it does make some sort of sense...
Author's Response: T_T typos kill me!!!
Date: 07/09/08 06:50 pm Title: Chapter 2
... Tom is the devil, omg.
Thank goodness for Bill and his geniousness.
Author's Response: Really? I thought it was the other way round really... but you'll have to read the whole story through to get that idea, i guess...
Date: 07/07/08 06:54 pm Title: Chapter 2
I'm really enjoying this. I love how you present each character. It's very well written and done extremely well. I can't wait for more.
Author's Response: Thank you very much :)
Date: 07/06/08 12:48 pm Title: Chapter 1
Yes he did. Very good Bill. AND HE ALSO SAVED YOU!!
Author's Response: Now don't start throwing logic at Bill cause that will get you nowhere with him.
Date: 07/06/08 11:47 am Title: Chapter 1
:O Dun Dun Dun!!!
Author's Response: dun dun dun indeed :P
Date: 07/06/08 07:12 am Title: Chapter 1
O_______________O
omfg....
Waaaaaah...
More!
Author's Response: More will come.
Date: 07/06/08 06:17 am Title: Chapter 1
Oh noz! Tomi is a murderer! Meh, I'm okay with that, anything to protect precious Bill! Anyways...it's good and well written but you just had a few spelling errors here or there (but then again I always do too). It's kinda interesting, I might just stick around to read on...
Author's Response: Die evil typos DIE! thanks for telling me ::brings out gun and hunts them down::