Date: 10/21/08 07:39 pm Title: Ch.5 - Midnight Tackle…On Halloween At That!
haha bills a dumbass in this story
Date: 10/21/08 05:45 pm Title: Ch.5 - Midnight Tackle…On Halloween At That!
hahaha love love love
Date: 10/21/08 04:58 pm Title: Ch.1 - The New Guy
waa i cant believe that someone would actually hate bill o.O
gd story!!!
getting more cusious every minute!!!
Date: 10/21/08 06:14 am Title: Ch.5 - Midnight Tackle…On Halloween At That!
cute so far!!!haha...nice story.Bill and bianca..nice pair they'll make!
Date: 10/20/08 04:33 pm Title: Ch.4 - Disastrous Dinner Parties Are Soooo Normal
Hallelujah, an update, I am impressed! No sarcasm intended. Nicely written overall, although I'll admit that some parts it is sketchy, but I've read far worse.
I'm liking the development of the polt so far, and the bit in the girls locker room was absolute brilliance!
Update soon!
Date: 10/18/08 10:14 am Title: Ch.4 - Disastrous Dinner Parties Are Soooo Normal
i Cant Wait Until You Update :)
Date: 10/18/08 01:57 am Title: Ch.1 - The New Guy
Awesome story! :]
Date: 10/18/08 12:34 am Title: Ch.1 - The New Guy
tragic cinnamon
Date: 10/18/08 12:13 am Title: Ch.4 - Disastrous Dinner Parties Are Soooo Normal
hahah love this story
Date: 10/17/08 11:32 pm Title: Ch.1 - The New Guy
oh man. her class semester was exactly like mine. I have calculus every morning first class! and there is this guy who sit behind me who talks so much...which gave me difficulty to sleep in class
Date: 10/17/08 11:13 pm Title: Ch.4 - Disastrous Dinner Parties Are Soooo Normal
Lol, there's always the girl that's saying- I'm not into this bunch of idiots and then keep receiving the punition. So I just understood that when there's trouble in class, you're better to relax and follow the others 'cause if no you just sound like a pathetical thing that is only a victim of the bad bad teacher. Well I would be Bianca, I would hate Bill! And always trying to beat him up,lol. I wait the next chapter!
Date: 10/17/08 11:11 pm Title: Ch.4 - Disastrous Dinner Parties Are Soooo Normal
Oh my gosh this is a really good story and I love it. I like the plot and shiz, it's awesome. I can't wait for the next chapter. *smilez and hugz*
Date: 10/17/08 11:00 pm Title: Ch.2 - Jerks
Oh the trip... it was mean but i used to do a lot of things like that- but now I'm mature and all these things,lol. I didn't understand who was talking during the talk. I mean is it something like- bill talks, now it's bianca,then bill's turn and after bianca's....
Or is it possible that Bill spoke more than Bianca? I'm just mixed up and since english isn't my first language, I get some problems.
Date: 10/17/08 10:55 pm Title: Ch.4 - Disastrous Dinner Parties Are Soooo Normal
Omg I think I laughed through this whole thing lol. Liked it when Andreas said it sounds like ya'll are doing it lmao. I usually don't read Het fiction stories, but this one is very funny. I can't believe she called Bill and Tom "satan's twins" lol. Anyway I love this story so you have to update asap.
Date: 10/17/08 10:54 pm Title: Ch.1 - The New Guy
ah ah, Bill's perfect teeths... it was a complete fantasm before but did you see his new smile at the MTVLA? I like how you introduced your characters and Bianca- I like the name ;) good point for you- seems to be really deep. I mean, she doesn't seem like a flat character and I'd like to know more about her.
Date: 10/17/08 10:24 pm Title: Ch.4 - Disastrous Dinner Parties Are Soooo Normal
Cool story. =)
Just a little bit of critique, if you don't mind. Try not to rush through when you're explaining what's going on.
Explain things how you would explain them when talking normally and you'll find your chapters are longer and more clear. =)
Anyways, keep up the good work! Can't wait for the next one. XD
Date: 10/17/08 10:06 pm Title: Ch.4 - Disastrous Dinner Parties Are Soooo Normal
lol bill's shirt is honkin'
no wait
everything about him is honkin'
Date: 10/17/08 09:50 pm Title: Ch.4 - Disastrous Dinner Parties Are Soooo Normal
loooooooove it :D
Date: 10/15/08 07:58 pm Title: Ch.3 -The New Neighbors
Now, I'm going to let you off this time, but just be aware that you've used up you're only chance, do we understand one another?
Just a couple of things (not as bad as it seems - honest!!): there should have been a hyphen between 'love-hate' at the end; and finally, try not to repeat things you've already said too many times - it just gets repetitive.
Other than that, superb and I'm super happy you updated!
Date: 10/14/08 06:56 pm Title: Ch.3 -The New Neighbors
to u long
i really like this but i know what u mean i have yet to update one of mine