Date: 07/01/08 11:37 am Title: Chapter 4
I think you should GO ON!!!
Author's Response: okay okay...i'm trying! lol i swear these chapters are being posted because of you! XD i promise more soon!!
Date: 06/30/08 10:43 pm Title: Chapter 4
Oh! Poor Bill and Tracie, and Tom too. I can't imagine what Bill and Tracie are going through. My mom got cancer, but she's ok now. It wasn't bad. Simone's sounds really bad, like even w/ chemo she wouldn't really get better.
What are Bill and Tracie doing about food? And paying the bills? And... everything. Bill's too young to play the dad and it doesn't sound like anyone's interested in contacting their dad.
As for Tom, he better go fix things w/ Bill. I don't care if he's scared, Bill needs something in his life to make him happy, and I bet Tom could do that. Plus, he obviously really likes him.
More please!
Author's Response: yea...can only imagine what bill's going through...literally. thanks for reading promise more is coming soon! =D
Date: 06/29/08 03:19 pm Title: Chapter 3
omg i CAN'T WAIT FOR MORE! =0
this is such an awsome fic and i don't really mind the time jumps... details are good and all, but too many of them gets tiering.. (that's why i HATE the LotR books...)
su just keep on writing theway u do hun!! i'm loving it =D
Author's Response: soo happy you liked it!! next chappy coming soon!! *typing* n.n
Date: 06/29/08 01:37 am Title: Chapter 3
Aw its so cute how nice Tom is with the little kids.
Author's Response: yeah...*looks off into space* i just adore Tom...lol XDrnthanks!!
Date: 06/27/08 04:15 pm Title: Chapter 2
aww =(
this was a REALLY sad chap )=
but it was really sweet too and i liked tom's dream (A)
update soon?
Author's Response: Thanks! ^^ i promise to update soon!! thansk for the review
Date: 06/26/08 10:53 pm Title: Chapter 2
write faster damnit faster
do u want me to go crazy
Author's Response: lol i'll try!!
Date: 06/26/08 09:03 pm Title: Chapter 1
I like it so far! I cant wait for the next part!
Though I have to say to things are kind of bugging me you seem to leave big gaps that left me confused to where I had to re-read it.
Like in the intro when Bill was wondering where his class was. He had the thought and the poof hes walking into the class room.
Also it confused me at the begining when "Bill took one last drag before he dropped it to the cement."
You never actually specified what 'it' was. Of course then I realized we were back to where he was smoking, but it was still a bit confusing because youhad just gotten done speaking about tracie and bill packing their bags.
The second chapter was good too! But also here I got confused. Where exactly was Bill? Im guessing the halway but you wrote it as if he was in the room with his mom and sister but then Tom wouldn't of been able to just suddenly come up to him.
Besides the slight confusion I liked it!It makes me happy to read in the third POV. No one really ever does it and when they do its not always done properly.
I hope you don't take offense to any of this. =] Good job!
Author's Response: none taken at all!! i'll try my best to improve it. comments like these help me since this is my first. hope you keep reading!
Date: 06/26/08 08:31 pm Title: Chapter 2
Ah this is a good story so far cant wait to hear more. Never thought Tom would be one to work at a hospital...with kids, but its a really cute idea.
Author's Response: yea, i thought since it's alternte universe why not actually chage it up? Thanks for reviewing!! Keep reading!! o.~
Date: 06/26/08 03:55 pm Title: Chapter 1
omg! =0
please update soon! =0
u can't leave me hanging like this! i NEED to know how this continues! =0
ur writing RULES and i LOVE the plot already! xD
pretty pretty PRETTY please update soon? (A)
Author's Response: i'll try to keep my updates to twice a week. keep reading! ^.^
Date: 06/25/08 07:52 pm Title: Chapter 1
Well, I'm German myself, so if you have any questions regarding names, culture or translations, feel free to ask me. ^^ My mail's Dark_Spike@gmx.de
And yes, I'll definitely keep reading. *g* About the school system thing, could we just do that per mail? I don't want to write this here as a review, since it kinda is spam.
Ciao,
Shiruy
Date: 06/25/08 04:52 pm Title: Chapter 1
I was a bit surprised at Bill's sister's name, since Tracie is not a German name at all, but whatever. This story looks like it has potential, so I'll wait and see where you take this. ^^ If you want, I could help you with the German school system.
Author's Response: haha i know what you mean with his siter's name, i don't know but i'll try to make teh name more german...and if you could i'd appreciated it!(school system i mean)^.^ keep reading!
Date: 06/25/08 11:35 am Title: Chapter 1
Go on!!! omfg, go on, please!
Author's Response: i shall i'll type as fast as i can!! thanks for reading!! n.n