Date: 09/07/08 12:52 am Title: I. Chapter Eight
Awwww. Sweet, dreadlocked boy. I wonder why Bill's thinking like that. :( Poor Tomi, sorta getting rejected and all. Haha. :) Awesome chapter :)
Date: 08/31/08 02:43 am Title: I. Chapter Eight
You have to update before I die!!! ASAP, plz?
Date: 08/30/08 01:13 am Title: I. Chapter Eight
Bill does like him! But there's definately something here he's not telling. Man, I really want to know! Update soon?
Date: 08/30/08 01:08 am Title: I. Chapter Seven
Progress! I think anyway. I wish Bill wasn't such a mystery, but this is from Tom's perspective.
Date: 08/27/08 03:37 pm Title: I. Chapter Eight
Why does Bill wish he'd never met Tom?! D: *hopes to find out soon*
Date: 08/26/08 07:43 pm Title: I. Chapter Eight
cant wait to read more!!!
Date: 08/22/08 06:21 pm Title: I. Chapter Eight
I love this story!! :DD
Can't wait for your next update! x3
Date: 08/19/08 01:46 am Title: I. Chapter Eight
You go girl! ;)
Date: 08/18/08 05:23 am Title: I. Chapter Eight
Great chapter, same thing here, I have a (huge) thing for feminine guys :P Anywayz I hope you continue soon ^^
xx Chi
Date: 08/15/08 05:28 pm Title: I. Chapter Eight
oh, I really can't figure Bill out in your fic
:s
first I thought he was working in a kinda erotic bar or something.. but it's just a normal one.. so why doesn't he want Tom to be there?
please update soon! I want to know how you're going to continue!
xxx
Date: 08/15/08 05:06 am Title: I. Chapter Eight
wow, i am dying to see where this is going. its a great plot, original and interesting. thanks for the updates, i look forward to more!
Date: 08/15/08 04:33 am Title: I. Chapter Eight
Hmmm. I have to say that I found this chapter good as usual, but only because I know that you write well and I have enjoyed your stuff before.
However...I found my interest waning a bit during this chapter and I was promptly horrified because that's never happened to me before while reading your fics. I went back and re-read and pondered and even discussed the chapter with my best friend (we always discuss once you update) and I realized what the problem was.
Nothing is happening. Or nothing appears to be happening. In pretty much every chapter Tom seeks Bill out or thinks about him and when Bill comes into the picture, Tom pretty much is obvious about his crush, right? Followed up with Bill either being nice or acting weird--sometimes both. All in all it usually ends with Tom--and us readers--more confused than when we started out in the first place.
Something has to happen soon! Bill's behavior is so erratic and while I was intrigued at first, now I'm finding myself just sitting here and waiting for something--anything--to happen.
I guess I'm just not understanding where this story is going.
Don't get me wrong. I'm still interested, but my attention is starting to wander because I'm just waiting now to figure out what the hell is up with Bill. Plus I wanted to give a bit of advice: The longer you draw out what is up with Bill, the more your readers are going to be wondering and trying to figure things out on their own. The more they do that, the wilder their imaginations become. So...all in all, that may backfire on you if you come out and reveal that it's something really tame to begin with. Because your readers' imaginations built it up to so much more, do you get me?
All in all, it's still a good story...I just sort of need something to happen in order to keep my interest going. I am afraid I don't get Bill at all. When I do think I'm starting to get where he's coming from, he does a one eighty and I'm like Tom--completely confused. It's making it hard for me to identify with his character because we don't know anything about him. Personally I'm starting to wonder if Bill is a bit unstable or something. Lately I've been silently urging Tom to "just get away and go home" to be honest.
Also I probably won't review for a while because I plan to take a break from this and let more chapters build up before reading again. I'm still with you on your other fics though. This one, though, I'm going to wait and see where it's going a bit first.
Anyhow, I hope there are no hard feelings about all this. I will not lie to you about your fics. I tell it like it is--even if it's something not favorable. I just try to do it in a constructive way. Just know that I don't mean to upset you.
Anyway, keep doing what you're doing. :)
Date: 08/14/08 09:46 pm Title: I. Chapter Eight
oh my,bill's activity in that bar later in te night doesn't consist of being a barman?Stripteaser?O.o
XD sorry,crazy ideas...Or he wanted to protect tom from the drunk and violent customers if he stayed longer?or he simply didn't want tom to start frenquenting that kind of place,he wants tom to be serious at school and he would do everything to keep tom from ending up like him.He wants tom to be a "good guy"?
As always, i love bill's personnality.He's carefree(or rather,he seems to be carefree),he still has that mysteriousness you know,this strange attitude,in a fascinating way that makes you want to know what exactly the guy's thinking!he's like a living enigma holding some secret at the corner of his soft lips.Said lips when turning into a bright smile,makes you forget everything,even if you were mad at him! oh boy, i imagine tom feeling that way! that confused teenager with strong feelings!
tom's like the guy you want to protect,because in spite of his apparence,he shows vulnerability so often: his hesitant move,his nervousness,his shy looks and above all that innocent frankness of his. Unable to lieproperly if needed,because he's exposed to bill...Or maybe,not entirely but still!
again, thank you for sharing your stories,every single of them is like a pearl to me!you're so talented i'd never tire of apraising you!
Date: 08/14/08 09:22 pm Title: I. Chapter Seven
omg omg omg!! that was so INTENSE! i forgot to breathe in the last paragraph,i was surely more nervous than tom!O.o
Date: 08/14/08 09:10 pm Title: I. Chapter Six
omg! poor tom! i felt sorry for him when he thought bill was ignoring him! and sooo relieved when he waved before getting off the train!
so i have some little hints,some answers to my endless questions in chapter six lol!! tom's gnna visit bill at work,my,i think he's gonna be surprised! bill wAs talking to his boss at the phone?hmm,i 'm just have to read the next chapters i guess lol
Date: 08/14/08 08:41 pm Title: I. Chapter Eight
lol @ iour comment. Update soon? *puppi eies und kitti pout*
Date: 08/14/08 04:24 pm Title: I. Chapter Eight
i love your story. im a bit curious to find why bill didnt want tom at his work. can't wait for the next update (:
Date: 08/14/08 03:41 pm Title: I. Chapter Eight
I love it! I've been waiting for this for so long ;D in my mind its a long time ;) LOVE IT ;D
Date: 08/14/08 12:24 pm Title: I. Chapter Eight
It's cringe worthy, but bloody amazing!
I need to start telling you other things, I'm getting repetitive, well, I've been repetitive since like the first three times I reviewed something of yours
But, if I were you I'd just take it as a compliment, something along the lined of, you leave me too awestruck to form a decent review, or in this case, I'm cringing too much to form one, but cringing in a good way, if that's possible.
I feel I'm rambling now, so I'm going to stop.