Date: 07/05/08 09:56 am Title: Chap. 11 : Break, Broke, Broken
O_O
WTF?
Author's Response: good wtf or bad wtf ?
Date: 07/05/08 09:35 am Title: Chap. 10 : Hold my hand ?
Hey girl
I missed you like crazy Luce *hug*
Sorry for my late review. I was away this week and when I got back my computer broke :o Can you believe that, that was so awful, first I had to survive without it for a week ( that wasn’t easy luckily I had lots to do;-) and then he didn’t want to start when I got back. Ah, Spain, I wanted to go there to ;-) I bet you got a nice tan now :-p
I bet it isn’t easy for Bill and Tom being who they are, people judge them easily, my brother does that to. I really can’t deal with people like that. He can’t even give my an answer to why he doesn’t like them and I don’t count because they look gay as an answer. And It’s really good that you don’t care anymore, you just don’t let them get to you. They’re not worth your time anyway. I believe that you should get to know someone before you can form an opinion ;-) You know, I did know this girl and when I first saw her I thought she looked a bit strange but when I got to know her she was indeed a bit weird but I really like her because she was that way actually and she’s one of my best friends now ;-) Yes I’m afraid that Bill will be Bill :-p And I really like those sex scenes of you. It doesn’t matter that you don’t have lots of experiences because you sure know how to write them ;-) And you know it isn’t that you can really know how Boy to Boy love feels unless you got a gay friend :-p But even then so you managed to make it feel very really and steamy ;-) I’m happy you like my reviews that much, actually I must confess that’s why I try and make them so long ;-) And don’t forget that also because I really seems to get carried away with your story ;-)
So back to your story that I missed like crazy when I was away ;-)
“”None taken. And yes, I do have nice hands. You should know.” Bill gave him one of those sly smiles. Which of course, resulted in Tom blushing and Gustav barking out a laugh.”
No really how would he know :-p
”Would you be my…um…boyfriend?” Did he actually say that out loud?”
”I’m in love with you, Billa,” Tom whispered, blowing a puff of air into his boyfriend’s ear as he did so. The small giggle that followed put a smile on his face; Bill really was too cute to be true.”
Oooh, that was just so cute. There officially together now * dreamy look* and *squeal* :-p
“”The wounds were on his wrists. I saw them the other day. The scars, that is. Probably made from some rope or handcuffs or something.” Bill shivered at the thought of being tied up and bound, only to fight so hard it slashed your skin.”
I just knew where this was going to. But I wish I wasn’t right :-p Poor Andreas I wonder if he really doesn’t remember or just choose to forgot as a defence mechanism.
”…was tight as a virgin and struggled like a hero.” Jorg pushed open the door at the end of the hallway and only received mild resistance as he firmly guided his son through it. ”He wasn’t like you, though. It only took me four days to break him entirely. How long did it take with you? Four years?”
That basterd didn’t even try to deny it . He feels like it’s something to brag about because he know that Tom can’t do anything to him. Man He is so confident that no one can stop him.
”You kept him here, one entire week…oh my God.” Tom felt hot tears sting behind his eyelids. He hadn’t been able to protect the world from his dad. This was his fault.”
OOh, poor Tom, I feel for him. He feels responsible all though he couldn’t have done anything. It isn’t his fault, it’s his dad and him alone.
“It took Jorg four years. Four years of weekly sessions in the attic to break Tom’s strong spirit. After those fours years, everything went just as he had wanted. Tom couldn’t remember much of those horrid years, but he remembered everything hurting a lot less as soon as he stopped fighting.”
I believe that Tom isn’t really broken, he just let his dad ‘win’ because he wanted to survive. He maybe stopped fighting but he still has his friend and he can still laugh. He did fought a long time so he is a strong person and I surely hope that he can overcome his dad in time.
“No, that wasn’t true anymore. Tom had Bill.”
You are right Tom, you have him. I can’t wait to know what will happen. What will Tom do if his dad go’s after Bill. I think he wouldn't let that happen. How long can he hide his secret from Bill and what he knows about Andreas. Aah, so many questions.
This is my review for this chapter and now I’m going to read the next :D that’s maybe one benefit of being so late :-p now I get to read two chapters all at ones, wiiii :-p
*Kisses and hugs*
-xXx- kristien
Author's Response: God you make me so extreemly happy! I think that friend of yours is a very lucky girl, getting to know someone like you! I think it's easier when you at least have one person backing you up to really be who you are and I think that's the deal with Bill and Tom. They know they'll always have each other and that they will always support the other and that's just love at it's greatest I think! Haha I had so much fun writing the 'be my boyfriend' scene, it was just so nice to be able to write something cute in all the angst that follows! And about Andreas' memory, let's just say that the brain can play sick tricks on some people, and be the greatest strenght of others. And your words about Tom, you're so right. He's blaming himself because Jorg has broken him so hard that Tom really dosn't know how to stand again, but in some ways that as well was a defence mechanism, letting his dad win. Well, the next chapter might tell you exactly what would happen if Jorg went after Bill...enjoy. *hugs you so bad* yours, luce
Date: 07/05/08 09:28 am Title: Chap. 11 : Break, Broke, Broken
I was like OMG!!! GO on!!!
Author's Response: will do ,) thanks
Date: 07/05/08 08:54 am Title: Chap. 11 : Break, Broke, Broken
Do you know what makes me happy? Maybe I already told you before, but it doesn't hurt to hear it again. Andreas is such a good character in this and for once he isn't forced between Bill and Tom :D I really love him for gathering all his courage and finally taking revenge, although nothing can make his rape undone.
Author's Response: oh my God, those are such strong words love! kinda made me sad for him...and I'm the one writing this oO bad lucy! byt anyway, for once I wanted Andreas to actually be straight so that there was no chance of him getting together with one of the twins, just easier that way ,) thank you so much !
Date: 07/05/08 08:40 am Title: Chap. 11 : Break, Broke, Broken
oh my... oh my god.
i'm so effing speechless *stares like mad*.
Author's Response: awww thanks ,) you made me smile girl !
Date: 07/05/08 08:36 am Title: Chap. 11 : Break, Broke, Broken
Oh, my...!
Andreas! Bless him!!! He's heavensent, yeah ("Let them know you're heavenseeeeeent..." oh, sorry, zoning out on Cinema Bizarre XD)
Well, what to say? Another wonderful chapter.
It would've been better if Jorg didn't manage to have his fucking fingers in Bill, but I think those are better than...something else!!!
Good, so... everything's solved, now?! XD
Oh, for the record, I don't pity Jorg... not at all... U.U
Well, waiting for the next chapter ^^
Author's Response: I'm glad you don't pity Jorg because that was not my intention, but I think there's always a story behind the monster and so this is his. Ehm..now about everything being solved...well, not quite, but soon. I'm so happy you liked this, reviews really mean the world to me !
Date: 07/05/08 08:29 am Title: Chap. 1 : House sweet home
Lucy, when I got this chapter to beta and I read through it the first time, I actually ended up yelling at the computer monitor when Jorg caught up with Bill in the attic, and then cheering out loud when Andreas busted in to save them. My husband officially thinks I'm nuts, and it's all your fault. lol Wonderful, FABulous chapter. You're just plain full of awesome :)
Author's Response: haha well tell your husband he just have to live with it ,) I ain't givin you up for anything girl ! I just had to do the whole Andreas!hero thing...couldn't resist! Thank you so much Mel, mailed you btw ,p ...again
Date: 07/05/08 08:12 am Title: Chap. 11 : Break, Broke, Broken
O____O
Oh my God.... I think I love you
Author's Response: aw *hugs you* that is so cute !
Date: 07/05/08 07:47 am Title: Chap. 11 : Break, Broke, Broken
Luce,
You have written one more great chapter.
Every single word of yours is so carefully collected,so the reader is always stuck in front of the monitor.
The fact is in this chp, my heart achs a lot about these poor boys.
i beg you for the next one, of course when you ll be ready for that.
You re my best company girl :)
Author's Response: aw thank you so much chris, this really meant a lot to me! I'm happy that you feel my stories are carefully put together because I always read them through a lot and try to make them as good as I can! I'm sorry that I don't know when the next one will be up, but I hope it will be soon! much love, luce
Date: 07/05/08 07:41 am Title: Chap. 11 : Break, Broke, Broken
Thank god Jorg got what he diserved. Way to to Andi. Yay!!!! I'm happy Tom and Bill are going to be ok.
Nooooo.... You cant leave!
I must have more!!
Author's Response: hihi thank you so much for this, and honey I'm really sorry that I have to go away but I will try to write more ! promise
Date: 07/05/08 07:41 am Title: Chap. 11 : Break, Broke, Broken
:O dramarama! I really thought Bill was going to get raped then ._.
Author's Response: he was originaly, but I figured it might destroy the story, so I did it like this instead ,) thanks !
Date: 07/04/08 05:50 am Title: Chap. 10 : Hold my hand ?
OH MY GOD YOU'RE BACK! *multiple hugs*
AAAAA! I MISSED YOU SOOO MUUUUUCH! *sobs* i hope you missed me too *selfish nature of your stalker*
My computer is broken... I've lost all my files! The translation of Educational Purposes too ;( thank god I sent the first chapter to my beta and it's saved.
Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaanyway.
Haha I love Geo the freaked, wild kind of love :P he acts like i used to in... kindergarden? ^^
Haha I loved the "would you be my boyfriend" scene. It is one of the moments when I squeak and behave like a kid with downs syndrome :D luvluvluvvv
I thought that Tom knew that his dad raped Andres, but he just didn't talk about this (why would he?). He MUUUUSTT save Bill from his father! I hope that he didn't follow Tom to his house *bites her nails* and it's just some postman or the neighbour wants to borrow a glass of flour or something *gets nervous*
"Tom whimpered.
Jorg moaned."
I hate him. UHHH you can't imagine how much I hate him.
PRETTY PLEASE update soon! I am going to lay dead on some hot polish beach from Monday n____n maybe i will be able to use my dad's laptop one more time (he doesn't like when i touch it;o) so please please please update before Monday!
BUZIIIIIII:*
Author's Response: yes I am *hold you tight* God, of course I missed you too, life just isn't the same without you :'( Geo's like a five year old in all my fics I think ,D lol hihi still trying to get in the cute parts even though it's getting harder as the story developes, but very happy you liked the boyfriend scene! Nope, Tom didn't know it was his dad...now he does though. I promise, I will update before monday, actually I have the next chapter in front of me now, betaed and all, but I need to respond to all the reviews first as the site has been messing with me for a while and refused to be nice about it *pout* but I hope it's working now! so, see ya girl, loves <3
Date: 07/03/08 09:21 pm Title: Chap. 10 : Hold my hand ?
sooo far this story is amazing
Author's Response: thank you, hope it will continue to be!
Date: 07/03/08 09:56 am Title: Chap. 10 : Hold my hand ?
no, you're not going to let that bastard rape billl, fuck.
Author's Response: haha oh sweety, how do you know it's Bill? maybe it's the pizza guy ,)
Date: 07/03/08 08:14 am Title: Chap. 10 : Hold my hand ?
Okay since you're FINALLY back and it seemed like you were gone for a MONTH instead of just a week or so, I'm going to do something special. I'm going to review WHILE I'm reading! O_O Just for you =]
Okay. Starting now!
I'll bet he has nice hands! *laughs* Bill and his flirting! *dies* XD *smirks!* Oh god! Tom's gonna ask now isn't he. >=] OMG! He is! *dies...again* XD Oh jeez! What a passionate answer! Little, fragile...AWW! =] Favorite line so far: "I'm in love with you, Billa."
XD Georg's all like *Answers back for Bill* XD Aww, Bill makes Tom feel lucky even though Tom is repeatedly raped by his father. =o
Aww! Tom's so sensitive! With Bill worrying about Andreas. =]
... Well look at that just falling into place. >.>; Uh oh. o_O NO TOM! Don't go! o-o Who knows what will happen in that house of your's. O_O Specifically the attic. >.>;
UGH! Tight as a...Struggled and *gags*
*shutters* Ew. UGH! Keep it in... OH JEEZ!
... Oh god.
OH NO! *Just realized* *SCREAMS* NOOO! It's going to be Bill isn't it. Or. Please tell me Bill was smart enough to put the clues together or something! I know he noticed Andreas' reaction to the mention of Tom's father. And then how Tom acted when he left for home, in the middle of lunch! Oh please let it not be Bill at the door and some cop or something!
*cries* Update soon okay! =o I HAVE to know!
I missed you! Don't go away again! ;.;
Author's Response: breathe girl, you need to breathe! Great lord Summers this is so extreemly sweet of you, I love reading while you are (or something like that) and see how you get my points at the perfect lines and how you seem to highlight the same places I did when writing it! I feel that Tom can call himself lucky because at that moment he was in his life outside of his house. It's like he lives one life there and then one life outside where his father basically don't exist. haha don't get too worked up now hun, I never said Bill was the one at the door (hinted at it extreemly though) it could just turn out to be the pizza dude ,p God I've missed this, missed YOU, I'm never going away again (maybe next week though, but I'll deal with that when it gets here) thank you so much for this Summers, love ya <3
Date: 07/03/08 05:10 am Title: Chap. 10 : Hold my hand ?
What a fucking bastard!!
Please kill him girl!!
i really enjoy the two boyfriends and their tenderness.
another great chapter.
My Lyce, always rulezzzzzzz
Author's Response: with a chainsaw love, with a chainsaw! aw I love writing them all sweet and tender, it's just so much fun! thank you so much for this Chris, hope you'll like what comes next as well.
Date: 07/03/08 02:28 am Title: Chap. 10 : Hold my hand ?
First i want to welcome you back.
I hope that you had a great time in my country.
I am here to drink up all your inspirated stories.
Love ya babe.
I wiil come back to review your new chappie:)
Author's Response: your country was beautiful chica! really was. I ha a very nice time, but ten days is bordering to ilegal without my comp oO a lot of inspirated stories and a new chap and all, but it will take some time to get them all down on my comp! loves <3
Date: 07/02/08 09:03 pm Title: Chap. 10 : Hold my hand ?
So I saw this in the updates and I just read the entire thing! It's quite interesting but EW Jorg is horrible! Poor Andreas, and especially poor Tom :( He should call Child Protection Services or something! Jorg is messed up and no one deserves all that abuse! I'm glad that Tom is strong enough to open up to Bill, unlike Andreas :) But yeah I really like this story! It's quite interesting :)
Author's Response: Oh my God, thank you so much! it's so nice to see when some of the athors I myself like to read from reads my stories. I've truly enjoyed the ones I've read from you and I'm really happy you liked this one!
Date: 07/02/08 07:02 pm Title: Chap. 10 : Hold my hand ?
HIJAAAAAAAAH! HA! *MAJOR NINJA GLOMP ATTACK!
Oh My Lucy!
I've almost stopped existing while you were gone.
*munches A-drug*
I've almost faded away in the time you've been on, was it vacation?
Oh look! *looks at hand in amasment* I'm getting my physical form back. *devours more of the A-drug*
I've REALLY missed you! I've had this major wb while you were gone.
And I haven't even been able to read a single fic in here, it's just not the same without you!
I've been in some kind of trance! I've been on my computer everyday for the last ten days reading ANIME FICS!
About... No! I'm to ashamed to tell you!
Seriously! What has happened to me?
It's just NOT the same when my god isn't around! And James missed you too!
Right James? *looks at pink unicorn*
He says yes! Don't EVER do that again! *sobs* It's SO good to have you back! God (Lucy) I've missed you!
Oh yeah! And by the way.. GREAT chapter! My guess is on Bill!
Author's Response: *is being major ninja glomped and is therefore unable to move and give you a proper hug* Spain took away your A-drug girl, it's been keeping me away from you! OMG oO some of those things you aid there...just OMG !!! thank you *whimpers* haha now you're making me ask you know, what anime fics ??? ,p aww hi James *pets unicorn* missed him too! uhm...you know about never doing that again...well you see next week...on monday actually...I just might go away again...maybe...*hides* but I'll take my comp so maybe I'll get to do some wrighting...no internet though, I think...help...*is a little to scared for angry ninjaes to hug you...pets james though*
Date: 07/02/08 06:39 pm Title: Chap. 10 : Hold my hand ?
Well, that explains how Tom didn't know his father was the one who hurt Andreas. I can't believe he'd do that though. Why take the risk? Why'd he send Tom away in the first place? Was he planning it? Did he set Andreas up in a way? Is he planning the same thing w/ Bill? I hope Bill never makes a comment to him about being a son-in-law. That could be very bad.
Isn't Tom going to be missed? Doesn't he have bruises on his body? Anything to make people notice? Why did't Bill notice in the last chapter?
Who's a the door? Is it Bill? I's somewhere in between hoping it is and hoping is isn't. Tom's father makes me cringe just thinking about him. I take it as a good sign that you've done an amazing job w/ character development. I'm a little worried that Bill and all of Tom's friends seem so oblivious to his problems. He'd show some signs of being abused. No one can go through what he's dealing w/ and still stay normal.
I want to know more about Tom's dad. Was he like this to Tom's mom? When did he start hurting Tom? What made him do it? Was he always crazy or did something put him over the edge. What did he do when Tom was little? He couldn't possibly have gotten away w/ rape and not been caught if he's done it too many times. He's lucky Andi doesn't remember. Acutally Andi probably does remember he's just to scared to tell anyone. He must know what's happening to Tom then right? That must make him feel guilty.
I'm expecting more super soon! You've had plenty of time off! (me being overly bossy)
Author's Response: I'M MAILING YOU...uh I just have o write some in between so I'm half way on your mail, but it's coming ,) feel bad for not writing so often though! haha man you have a lot of questions, and as a writer you know I can't answer them all. Tom isn't going to be missed because Jorg isn't kidnapping his own son, just locking him up to answer the door. If he does have bruises on his body how would people notice? with the hunmongus clothes he's alway wearing. I agree with the part that no one can go through abuse and not be normal, but if Tom isn't normal than how would Bill notice? Bill dosn't know how Tom was before the abuse began so how is he supposed to know it if Tom has changed. Next chap will tell more about Jorg's story and there will be a lot of background information coming along later on! I have a lot of explaining to do I feel ,) okay, so rethorical question to answer one of yours; if one gets raped and decides to 'forget' his rapist, would he accuse the rapist of raping his own son? he's family after all, no one does that right? and yes, there will be more super soon, as soon as I'm done replying to all the reviews I will post the next chapter which is done and betaed ,) love ya for this girl, see ya soon!
