Date: 05/25/08 10:51 pm Title: Chapter 4
AWWWWWWWW BILL!! *hugs bill* this fic is amazing!! And this chapter was adorable.
Author's Response: I am so happy your enjoying it. I can't tell you how much it means to get such a positive response with my first fic :-)
Date: 05/25/08 10:42 pm Title: Chapter 3
Smells like a brothal in here!! This is hilarious.
haha. And Blaming the stink on bill. That was funny!!
Author's Response: It made me giggle writing it because I can imagine Tom doing something like that to Bill. Lol. Well, there are hard times ahead, I thought the story needed some humour in it to keep it balanced. Thanks for reading!
Date: 05/25/08 02:01 pm Title: Chapter 2
I like it :D
ADDED TO FAVOURITES :)
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I`m glad you like it, it's very encouraging to get positive feedback.
Date: 05/25/08 01:55 pm Title: Chapter 1
maybe you should go back and space out the first two as well. You'll get more people reading it I'm
sure.
I LOOOOVVEEEE this fic. It'll do well :-)
Author's Response: Yeah, I`ll do that. It definately makes them easier to read. And I`m so glad you like the fic.
Date: 05/25/08 01:35 pm Title: Chapter 2
Holy scheiße!! For your first this us sooooo amazing!!
One tip tho. After each character says a new line leave a space. You need to space thus out more so its not all clumped together. Makes it easier to read. Some people get annoyed if its all clumped. ;)
U see what I mean?? Still. REAALLLYYY GOOD! Please do continue!
Author's Response: Aww thanks so much, and thank you for the tip! Yeah, I realised I`ve made a bit of a mistake with clumping it together. I`m working on spacing Chapter 3 out as we speak lol.
Date: 05/25/08 01:16 pm Title: Chapter 1
Lol, cute. And interesting enough so I'll read the rest too. ^^
You might want to separate the paragraphs a little more, because otherwise it looks a little chunky.
Author's Response: Thank you! That`s good to hear. I do hope you enjoy the rest of the story. And thank you for the advice. I`ll remember that in my future chapters.
Date: 05/25/08 12:26 pm Title: Chapter 1
I like this. It's an interesting idea. Poor Bill and Tom... ;) Wonder how they're going to cope with having everyone else there.
Just one point, be careful with your dialogue again, and make sure you always end it with the appropriate punctuation.
For example, "Come on," he said... Dialogue always requires its own punctuation. If the speech is tagged with 'he/she said, etc, it needs to end with a comma. If it is unrelated to the next sentence, it should end with a full stop.
Author's Response: Thanks for the advice. I'll be sure to correct this in further chapters.
Date: 05/25/08 12:11 pm Title: Chapter 1
oh my god this is awesome!! Sounds interesting. You must write more soon !!
Author's Response: Oh thank you so much! Was a lovely first ever review to recieve. I hope you enjoy the rest of the story.