Date: 03/07/09 06:13 pm Title: Snow White
Man! Awesome story! Sooo... when are you
going to update soon??
PLEASE UPDATE SOON! I'M BEGGING YOU MAN!!!
Date: 03/07/09 06:05 pm Title: Snow White
*looks confused at the tomatoes* *eats tomatoes* YUCK! xD I loved it :D I now how the 'not-inspired-thing' works...sadly :( I do hope you continue soon :) You could always throw in a very cute chapter all about their blossoming relation x3
xx Chi ^^
Date: 03/07/09 03:18 pm Title: Snow White
sooooooooooooo CUTE! :D
love it as always! =^^=
Date: 03/07/09 02:49 pm Title: Snow White
i actuall yliked it, i was suprised that it was that good after such a long break. :D not that i'dquestion your writing skills, your awsome =) im really happy that someone pushed you to continue.. i kind of wanted to remind you, but i was too shy... :P
i love'd that they kissed
Date: 03/07/09 02:37 pm Title: Snow White
Definately not terrible, nor did it suck.
Cute ending. :3
Date: 03/07/09 02:29 pm Title: Snow White
Omg darling, you wrote on this again! :O
I jumped a little in my seat when I saw it was updated XD
I miss a "Next" button atm D:
Date: 03/07/09 02:04 pm Title: Snow White
How on Earth did you think that was terrible?
I fucking loved it, I swear to God.
I've only been reading since like, the 13/14th chapter.
Which is my excuse for not having review before.
But I've adored it since the first chapter.
There really aren't many fics that are as captivating and original as this.
What you've wrote all works so well and compliments the storyline.
It's made me really, really appreciate that this has such a good author writing it.
That kiss and how they're now properly together, has made me so fucking happy.
But I don't want to get my hopes up too much, with the character death warning.
Well, major character death.
It's daunting, and usually I'd choose not to read something with that warning when the characters are so lovable, but I couldn't help myself with this.
Tom being magic is a really nice touch, I think.
As were the references to Disney films.
The fluffy little, or big, moments that you write are beyond brilliant.
They warm my heart.
There's been a few times when I've felt like shit, that I've came and read this.
Well, a small part of it.
It always make me feel so much better.
Bill curling up on Tom - awww!
You've officially turned me to mush with this, and with the rest of the fic.
I want to say more, and gush over your work and skills.
But I don't have time, I will next chapter, which I really, really hope you find the inspiration for.
Author's Response: Wow, thanks for the incredible review :O! I'm glad that you enjoy this story so much! I tend to be overly critical of my own work, but that's what helps me improve. If I thought my writing was fine, I wouldn't be motivated to become better! Don't fret about the character death, although it is a major character, I promise a very happy ending. :) Thanks again so much for the review, I'm really happy that you enjoy my story so much!
Date: 03/07/09 02:00 pm Title: Snow White
*grins* OHMYGOD! I LOVE YOU!
This hasn't been updated for SO LONG and then... Today, of all days! On my BIRTHDAY! ^_^
Oh, what a wonderful birthday present! Even though it's just coincidence.
^__^
IT WAS. AMAZING! :D
I love the way you explained the whole magic thing! ^_^
:D
Author's Response: Oh, happy birthday! Glad you enjoyed the chapter :D
Date: 02/28/09 05:41 am Title: All in Good Time
Dude! Please update soon! This story is
way too interesting man! MUST READ SOME MORE.
Date: 02/28/09 02:23 am Title: So Close but So Far
*gasp*... I LOVE THIS STORY!
Date: 02/28/09 02:10 am Title: Smile For Them
Dude... I really love this story...
Date: 02/27/09 06:24 am Title: Secrets, Secrets, Secrets
Dude! Bill is so adorable with the way his
having an issue with the cereal and stuff... I'm putting this story on my favorites.
Date: 02/27/09 06:09 am Title: Revelations
Awwww... Tomi is so sweet...
Date: 02/27/09 05:41 am Title: Storytime and Soapsuds
Awww...Bill doesn't know how to eat...
I love this story dude...
Date: 02/27/09 05:30 am Title: Hakuna Matata
damn... this story is addicting to read man.
Date: 02/27/09 05:07 am Title: Baby Steps
Ohhh Dammit!.... I could imagine Bill with his sexy cat-like eyes... Ugh! His to gorgeous to imagine! I'm starting to love this story dude!
Date: 02/19/09 06:21 pm Title: Storytime and Soapsuds
“Well, what is it that antagonizes all humans, the one thing everyone lusts after?" Amery just blinked, his dull mind not exactly following along. Cole knew this, however, and didn't bother waiting for an answer. "Well, lust itself, of course. The cruelty of never being able to fall in love, to have anyone love you. That will be his curse. So even if he survives, he will still live a lonely nightmare."- ha ha not if he’s a twin lol nice!!!! OMG so impressed!!!!!!
His second curse complicated so much, and he knew he'd have to keep playing the innocent, airheaded catboy if he wanted to stay close to Tom. Tom couldn't love him, it was impossible. And Bill couldn't love him either. At least Bill couldn't... shouldn't be in love with him. That was impossible too. And whenever Bill really thought about it, he realized, he really didn't know what love was, and that scared him. Tom was kind to Bill, funny and handsome and all those good qualities, but Tom only saw him as a house pet. Bill knew that even if he liked Tom just a little bit, it was just not going to happen. – awh sad for Bill right now!
Bill was nothing to Tom. – awh you’re kind of right but lets see what happens!!!!
"Want help then?" – awesome bath time!!!!
"Tom, I've seen you naked before," he said, giggling and raising an eyebrow. – probably a lot!
"Oh, of course," she said, and looked back at her magazine. Her son mumbled a 'thanks,' and slipped inside the bathroom. It was then, that something clicked in Simone's mind.
"Tom, are you taking a bath with Bill?" – yeah I thought she accepted that a little quickly lol
had become the floor's victim yet again. – great way to put it!!!
Tom stopped circling him like a vulture, and looked back at Bill, those shockingly bright cat eyes pulling him back to reality.
"You look fine. Just tell everyone those are contacts, and you'll fit in, well, as much as you can in that get-up." – hey!!!! Says the white boy in gangster clothes and dreads!!!!
Date: 02/19/09 05:29 pm Title: Hakuna Matata
Now that he wasn't around Bill, the weight of the situation was really starting to fall on him. What were they going to do about Gordon? What was Bill's issue with him, anyway? What about next week, when Tom would have to go to school? And his friends? Tom knew he couldn't hide Bill from the world forever; people would start noticing Bill's absence, especially Gordon. What if Tom said Bill just ran away? Who would even believe that?
Bill was beginning to become a big handful, without even doing anything, and it was starting to stress Tom out. – yeah well it’s a lot all at once…you’ll get through!!!
He wondered if maybe it was more than coincidence that Bill and him had the same birthday, or not. He didn't know if he was reading too much into it, but hell, he had no idea just what to think any more. Suddenly nothing was too far-fetched.- dun-dun-dunnnn!
Tom tried to ignore how ridiculous the situation was; it was simply an innocent act, wasn't it? He gave Bill belly rubs all the time, there was no reason to take this as a big deal. In Tom's eyes, Bill couldn't be more innocent.
But in Bill's eyes, he couldn't feel more guilty. – *giggles* naughty, naughty Bill!!!!
"We can do online shopping, and then mum pick it up at the store. – ok they’re keeping him…it’s so weird!
He had one arm looped around Bill's waist, and the other at the keyboard of his laptop. It was becoming somewhat of second nature for Tom, to hold Bill, and he briefly wondered if that made it meaningless. As if to prove to himself it wasn't, Tom leaned back and pulled him closer, so that Bill was nearly laying against his chest. Bill smiled coyly, purring shortly in appreciation, before wiggling to get himself more comfortable in the new position. – oh my!! *giggles*
Bill shrugged. "They're better than anything that boys have got." He peered closer at the screen, reading the information on it. "Look here, they've got them for boys as well. Click," he urged, pointing.
Tom clicked indeed, making the small mental note in the back of his head that Bill could read, and saved it for later. – yup that’s what I said!
"It's like a regular, dreadnought guitar, but it's designed so that I can reach the higher frets, like on electrics, which is more or less perfect for this song I've been working on," Tom explained excitedly. "Of course, I run the risk of losing some of the depth of the bass, but I used one of these once, and I thought it sounded fine." – either someone plays the guitar, knows someone who plays or someone did some research either way well done.
Bill wasn't sure how close he was allowed to get to Tom, so he just shyly inched closer and closer, until Tom told him to stop.
However, Tom didn't tell him to back off, he was only amused by Bill's timidness in the situation. He put an arm around Bill's shoulders and pulled him closer, causing a small squeak from Bill at the sudden movement. - *squishes up nose* awh cute.
"I love you too."
Bill smiled widely; this was all he needed to hear. He pulled Tom a bit closer, and fell asleep to the sound of Tom's beating heart. – awh fluffy yummy goodness!
Date: 02/19/09 03:41 pm Title: Baby Steps
Bill personally hated being human, and just wanted to turn back into a cat and sleep his life away. On the other hand, Tom was completely estatic that Bill was human again, pleased that he could finally have a real, if exclusively friendly, relationship with his best friend. – I’m pretty sure Bill will change his mind!
Tom almost laughed, and maybe he would of, if the situation wasn't so awkward. "No... you can't. Things have changed, you can't exactly cling to me anymore." He frowned, not wanting to have to let Bill down, but if they were going to be friends, this would be just a smidge weird. – NO!!!! let him snuggle it’s all he’s got left now!
"You're silly, Tomi! Nothing's changed. I'm just slightly bigger, not as fuzzy, and I can talk." – this should be in the warnings “Bill logic”
He had thought Tom would've drawn a line somewhere, but he hadn't. Bill was proud of him. – Because Bill is just Bill.
"I'm Bill," he said, smiling lightly at her. It was slightly amusing to Bill that she didn't recognize him, even when they both knew each other.
"Bill, really? That's--" Simone paused, eyes widening. Bill. Long black hair, with a white stripe in it that was characteristic of only one creature she'd ever seen. Cat eyes, with bright, almost orange irises. Pale skin, a catlike face, long nails, slender figure....
"Mum?" Tom asked, knowing what was going through her mind. It was painfully obvious who Bill resembled, and his mother was starting to see it. – Ok I know it works for the story but I would NEVER have put that together especially if I had never met a person who used to be a cat. But ok suspended disbelief ok!!
As far as she knew, Tom never had had any gay tendencies, but this guy - 'Bill' - was all over Tom. Only one 'person' ever received Tom's attention like that. And, well, that was Bill. – lol!!!
"So.... Can I keep him?" Tom asked childishly, eyes wide and face hopeful. This raised Simone's spirits effectively.
"As long as he doesn't pee on the carpet ever again!"
Bill pouted. "That was once, only once! I know better than that!" he whined, wrinkling his nose. – you get the details right! I love that!!!
Bill had known something was wrong as soon as he heard the car pull up the driveway, and had known by the footfalls who is was before the door ever opened. His senses were still as sharp as they were as a cat, and his hearing was very acute. Bill had immediately slipped into the dining room connected to the kitchen, slowly making his way to the front of the house while Gordon made his way to the back. When Gordon entered the kitchen, Bill ran across the foyer, and stole away up the stairs, completely silent. – nice!!!!
wrapped his arms tighter around Tom, stroking his stomach, and nuzzled the hand in his hair. Tom was surprised at the level of intimacy Bill was so willing to share with him so quickly, but a part of Tom liked it. –but it’s not any different for Bill only different for Tom.
“You called me Tomi," he pointed out.
Bill nodded, getting comfortable under the duvet again, curling up in the pocket of warmth that Tom had left behind.
"I usually do," he said - *giggles* this story is endlessly cute!
Date: 02/19/09 03:22 pm Title: A Rude Awakening
A young boy, looking Tom's age, was curled up in bed beside him. He had messy black hair that was practically everywhere, and Tom caught a stripe of white in it. He was pale, with a thin, lean, and slightly toned body. Most notable, he was stark naked.
Tom stared in shock, unable to form words as the strange boy stirred.
Bill opened his eyes, feeling like his body was heavier than normal, and he was definitely colder than usual. Still, it was his and Tom's birthday, and not just that- their eighteenth. It was going to be a good day.
"Happy Birthday Tomi," Bill purred his usual good morning greeting, today a bit changed for the occasion. However something unexpected happened when the words came out-- they were actual words, not an innocent mewling like normal. – this entire bit is Purrrfect!!! Just the right amount of shock out of both of them. *grins*
Bill blinked furiously; crying was a new thing to him, and he didn't know how to handle such a physical reaction. – you catch and remember that this is all new to Bill. I’m very impressed! You stick to your characters’ motivations and “realities” very nice! Very nice!
and the fact that he secretly watched America's Next Top Model - and not only for the models. – I like this intimate detail best *giggles*
Bill felt himself be pulled away from the scene before him, and sucked back into reality. – good flashback. I was starting to cringe when it started but it worked out. Well done.
Flashback? He called his own little dream/memory a flashback? Um no this is the only thing that doesn’t work for me so far. I don’t have them I have memories. I would call it a memory too.
Bill darted out the door. Now what? He couldn't just leave Tom alone, so instead he made his way back to the bathroom, standing at the mirror. He held himself up with the sink, elbows locked, and he finally took the time to study his human body. – good boy Bill I’d go back to the bathroom too.
It included love, but what....
With a hard thump, Bill collapsed to the floor. He was having another flashback, but as his head collided painfully with tile, he was knocked out cold. – that worked out well! Not being sarcastic here, it was coincidental and appropriate. And damn we were about to get an answer!
Good one’s POV then the other’s POV very nice!
"Make it yummy," Tom said, grinning. – lol oh god he’s a girl! lol
So um they’re going to tell Simone that Bill the cat is gone and is now Bill the human? Oh my I guess we’ll see how that goes.