Date: 07/27/11 09:46 am Title: Chapter 1
Well I'd never really consider writing or reading much in second person narrative but this was refreshing! I enjoyed reading it, it definitely had a different spin. It's always nice to read something different. And the pairing, well this isn't a pairing I'd turn down too often, especially written in such a sexy way. This was gorgeous!
Date: 01/07/09 05:27 pm Title: Chapter 1
Penis envy very much xP Loved this :D *strokes your ego* You may be proud ^^
xx Chi
Date: 10/13/08 02:31 pm Title: Chapter 1
it works... Georgs 'voice' is convincingly 'male' but is still sweet... and Bill watching him sleep is so cute
Date: 05/18/08 03:26 am Title: Chapter 1
I must give you kudos.
one, for using second person well. So few can pull it off, and you did without making it seem awkward.
two, for using the word slumberous. It's nice to see adventurous vocabulary on the site. Quite often authors feel the need to use smaller words to make sure that everyone can understand. I say if you can read fanfiction, you can pick up a dictionary. *nods*
The fic was hot and sweet at the same time, and the wake up scene was nice and comforting. I liked everything about the fic. Great job.
Author's Response: One: Thank you! I think it's one of the more interesting styles to write in, and it's definitely not something I see a lot; when it's done well, though, it's absolutely incredible (which, er, sort of sounds like I'm complimenting my own work. Which I'm not xD;;;;;;).
Two: There are just certain words that can't be substituted. "Slumberous" in particular has a quality about it that...well, I just can't find a synonym that expresses what I think that word does. I try not to be hyper-vocabularic (wtf that's not a word x_x), but I'm not going to avoid using long words if that's what I mean. Also, Google is a wonderful tool xD
Thank you again! You comment on a lot of my fics, and I don't feel like I thank you enough...I love getting reviews, and yours are always on the constructive-criticism side (as opposed to hot <33 or something, which, you know, is cool, but...yeah, concrit is better xD). So yes. Thank you.
Date: 05/13/08 12:29 pm Title: Chapter 1
Hot! And love the way they fall asleep together, so sweet.
Second person has been growing on me lately, and it worked really well here. It really does take you into the story on a whole different level.
Um, yeah...penis envy... >.>
Author's Response: I have a thing for cuddling. It's just sort of...yes. I will do anything sexual with ANYBODY AT ALL if I can't cuddle afterwards xD
Thank you! I'm glad to see it's so well-received, 'cause I really was worried....
Ugh, me too. Is that weird, that I have penis envy from my own fic? xD;;
Date: 05/10/08 05:31 am Title: Chapter 1
awww ^_^
this was the sweetest ending EVER =D
i normally don't like 2nd-person views, but ur right, it does make it easier. i always have trouble making everything understandable with the whole "and he touched his neck" etc etc... i mean.. for all ppl know he's touching his own neck! >_< u found a gd solution to that it seems =P but i'll let u keep it as ur trade-mark =D
really well written and i hope i'll be seing more fics like this one soon (A)
Author's Response: Aww, thank you! Yeah, second-person...it's not the easiest thing to write, but pronouns become a hell of a lot easier xD I'll read over my own third-person stories sometimes and be like, "What? Who's touching who?" (@__@)
xD It's not my trademark! Please, write it! Not enough people do second-person, and it really is an interesting style.
Thanks for the review!
Date: 05/09/08 08:24 pm Title: Chapter 1
That was a very well-written second person. :)) I'm very impressed, the detail was incredible. I loved it. Great job.
Author's Response: Thank you! It's a lot different from my usual style, so I was nervous xD
Date: 05/09/08 08:00 pm Title: Chapter 1
yah know, I'm a big one for safe sex, but for some reason I'm not picky about blowjobs either. Great job!
Author's Response: My guess is that I forget because I haven't given one in so long xD I'm more about dental dams, so YA KNOW....
Thanks, I'm glad you liked it :)
Date: 05/09/08 07:20 pm Title: Chapter 1
i liked this.
and the second person thing totally worked. :]
x
Author's Response: Yay, thank you!
Date: 05/09/08 07:10 pm Title: Chapter 1
That was really well done, the second-person wasn't weird at all it was perfect for the feel of the story! I totally loved it and your Bill was amazing. Great job, very hot!
Author's Response: Oh, good. I really was worried about it xD
And my Bill is a manipulative whore. I'll be writing a story for a completely different fandom AND HE WILL SOMEHOW END UP IN IT. *flail* I DON'T KNOW HOW IT HAPPENS.