Date: 06/10/08 07:40 pm Title: Sunday 1:00 P.M.
omgeezers is it really over? please dont let it be over! that was the best thing i have ever read and now you say its over. you disgust me.
Date: 06/09/08 03:12 pm Title: Epilogue
I Looooove it!! It's just perfect, couldn't get any better!
Date: 06/09/08 02:58 pm Title: Sunday 1:00 P.M.
Awww,, I'm so glad it's ending like this:D
Date: 06/09/08 02:21 pm Title: Sunday 12:00 P.M.
Yes!! I'm sooo relieved Bill's not dead...:)
Date: 06/09/08 01:54 pm Title: Sunday 4:00 A.M.
Nooo! Bill can't die!!
He has to live, and he has to come back to Tomi as safe as possible!
Date: 06/09/08 12:33 pm Title: Friday 3:00 P.M.
Oh No! Poor Bill!! I hope nothing bad will happen to him :S
Date: 06/09/08 06:45 am Title: Thursday 8:00 P.M.
the boys are hotheaded?
Date: 06/08/08 11:32 pm Title: Epilogue
This is really, really good. Nice job.
Date: 06/08/08 02:26 pm Title: Saturday 9:00 A.M.
hey im a native speaker (German) and i still found some mistakes... or at least i would say some things differently.... so if your interested... i would say it like that:
1. its not "Lässt mich gehen" but "Lasst mich gehen"
2. instead of "ich möchte nach Hause gehen" i would say "ich will nach Hause!" there is more emotion in that- the "gehen" is not necessary in this case!
3. instead of "nicht mehr" i would either say "aufhören" or "hört auf!"
btw i love your fanfic!!
Author's Response: Thank you. That's very helpful. I was too lazy to find a native German speaker and ask.
Date: 06/08/08 02:10 pm Title: Epilogue
amazing story! :)
it makes me really want a twin :(
Date: 06/06/08 09:21 am Title: Epilogue
This was lovely :)
Date: 06/05/08 09:29 pm Title: Epilogue
Absolutely Amazing!!
I have no words to describe how I feel about this story.
Fantastic Job :)
Date: 06/04/08 02:31 pm Title: Epilogue
Loved It :D
It Was Awsome =)
And Yea I Loved The Ending :)
Date: 06/04/08 08:57 am Title: Epilogue
Bravo! This was exceptional. I really enjoyed it. Thanks so much for sharing. :D
Date: 06/04/08 08:49 am Title: Epilogue
This story was so intense, my breath caught so often!
Thank you for the happy ending, I wouldn't have been able to deal with a sad one.
It's good to see that Bill didn't give up.
Date: 06/04/08 01:39 am Title: Epilogue
Wonderful end :D I really like it!
Date: 06/03/08 10:49 pm Title: Thursday 8:00 P.M.
That'd be great thanks. I'll send you my fic tommorow.
You are friggen amazing I hope you know. I sooooooo envy you. :/
Date: 06/03/08 10:32 pm Title: Epilogue
AWWWWWW!!!! Beautiful!! This is an amazing fic. It depresses me reading your fics. Because you always describe things with so much detail and its just so amazing. My chapters always come out like shit. I'm jealous.
Any tips you could pass on to a fellow writer?
Author's Response: I can never think of specific tips to give anyone besides the stuff that's already included in our Guides, but that's all pretty basic. If you'd like, I'd be willing to beta read a few of your chapters for content and style. Most people beta read to look for errors, but if you can tak the con-crit I could give you some tips on how to improve your style rathe than just correcting your grammar errors and typos like most beta readers do. Just e-mail me through my profile if you have any specific questions or want me to take a look at something.
Date: 06/03/08 09:43 pm Title: Epilogue
A fantastic end to a more than fantastic story. I'll be sad to see it go, but what a way to end.