Date: 09/04/08 12:13 am Title: Epilogue
*dabs eyes* That was really beautiful. Tragic, and you spend every sentence of the first chapters waiting for the worst. The amount of tension is unbearable. Bravo =)
Date: 09/02/08 10:34 pm Title: Epilogue
man.....i dont even know what to say about this one except....wow.
Date: 09/02/08 03:57 am Title: Epilogue
This is still one of my absolute favorite fics on this site. I was spoiled to find it so early. However, all of your writing is superb and I hope you update all your other stories soon. You are one of my very favorite writers on here. Keep up the great work. :)
Date: 08/31/08 10:14 am Title: Thursday 8:00 P.M.
This story is really amazing!
I have never read a story as good as this one!.
It seamed so real.
You are a great writer ;D
Date: 08/30/08 11:14 am Title: Epilogue
This is the best story I have read ever :)
Date: 08/30/08 09:37 am Title: Friday 3:00 P.M.
Oh my god ..
I`m not the type that cryes when i read stuff, but this... Wow, it was like you could feel what Tom felt. It was like looking at a movie, or it was like it was real. You are a weary good whriter :) (Sorry for my bad english)
Date: 08/26/08 07:56 pm Title: Epilogue
OMG. This is so totally heartbreaking and breathtaking. I love the way you describe the things, leave out details. You feel the same numbness as I think everyone involved would have felt, and it really adds things to your story. It's one of the best I read, and I want to thank you for writing it. Wow.
Date: 08/22/08 07:12 pm Title: Epilogue
Incredible story. I couldn't take my eyes off the screen as I read. Amazing work. At some point, even I was treating this as if it were real, and wanted to find that guy for Tom to murder.
Date: 08/21/08 12:25 pm Title: Epilogue
omg...that...that really was...omg it nearly had me crying...
it was really really REALLY good!!!!!!
Date: 08/19/08 04:53 pm Title: Epilogue
I can jst say 1 thing wow
Date: 08/17/08 08:55 am Title: Thursday 8:00 P.M.
Oh, god.
I'm going to have a fuck of a time reading this fic. Today has been... well, you know, I barfed my angst over you after all. Everything just seems more today. I probably shouldn't keep reading but screw you, now I can't stop.
I blame you for making things so real. It's usually not hard for me to separate myself from a fic - it's easy to say it's fiction and just read for the sake of reading and I do it often when it comes to fics that are suspenseful, or scary, or angsty and just uncomfortable to read... but not with this one.
A few days ago I was asked to describe how a story should be written so that it seemed like you were being shown, not told. And I couldn't put it into words, so I told them that the showing had to be shown for one to understand. If I had to give an example, your writing would come to mind immediately.
It would have been so much easier to disconnect from something that doesn't feel so real. It's near impossible to distance myself from this fic... in part, I think, because I've been through this before. The kind of worry that becomes so intense you physically cannot think about anything else. Though, instead of pacing like Tom, I bite my thumb to the quick. Gets blood all over the place, not very hygienic. D:
Saying you depicted the tension of the situation very well seems silly to mention since it's so obvious. You have to know how well you managed to do it. I thought the characterizations were spot on too - and while I felt just as pissed off at Gustav as Tom in the beginning, I can easily connect with his annoyance at Bill.
The ending was like you tugging on my green leash and directing me to the next chapter. ...I don't think I've mentioned how much I hate you enough.
One thing though, I wondered why you capitalized 'he'. It's a little off-putting and I'm not sure you meant to have that much emphasis put on that word. I thought the bolding did a good enough job of that.
I think I have to wait a bit before I can read the next. I'm expecting the worst and chanting 'happy ending happy ending'. Actually, part of why its so difficult for me to read is because I *haven't* read the ending. And I don't know what exactly your definition of happy is.
But I'll trust you and read the whole thing through. It might take me several deep breaths in the middle, but I'll do it. Wait for me.
-Ella
Author's Response:
Just keep reminding yourself that there isn't a character death warning on this fic.
It's not a terribly fluffy ending, but it's resolution and hope. I'm not sure it's fluffy enough to make up for all the angst of this fic, but I don't end the story with either of the twins broken mentally or physically.
Thank you for all your compliments. :)
Date: 08/11/08 02:56 pm Title: Epilogue
oh, very, very good. Interesting maybe it would be better with a more detailed violation, but it's only my opinion 9___9 I'm a bit sadistic (XD)
Anyway...
Date: 08/10/08 09:36 am Title: Friday 3:00 P.M.
This is so exciting!
Date: 07/31/08 11:28 pm Title: Epilogue
This fic was sooooo good! It was well written with amazing imagery. Well, the images I got were a bit... well, dark, as you set the mood.
During reading this, I was listening to "Rette Mich", and it seemed to fit so well. Again, this was VERY well written, and I loved it. The ending was satisfying. Good job.
Date: 07/28/08 01:06 am Title: Epilogue
OMG this story is so good. I loved it. I cried like a little baby. I hope you cont. to write. You are really good.
Date: 07/27/08 11:04 pm Title: Epilogue
...I don't know how to explain how this fic made me feel.
God, this was amazing.
Date: 07/20/08 02:53 pm Title: Epilogue
I've read it before.
Ive read it before, so why does it make me cry so much?
You're a real talent, that's all I can say :D And this story... Well it's definately my favourite story here. God, I really need to calm down to think clearly, lol :D
Date: 07/19/08 01:49 am Title: Epilogue
I loved this fanfic. It captured my eyes and I couldn't venture away no matter how hard I tried. Perfect 10 out of 10!
Date: 07/16/08 07:34 pm Title: Epilogue
That was beautiful, so very beautiful. I was scared for Tom, even more so for Bill, but in the end, things ended okay for the both of them. You captured their personalities with such perfection, and I feel that this was probably the best fiction I have read for a very long while. Not only that, but you made me cry. I rarely cry for stories now, our world is so much more dangerous than the fiction I read, but it felt real, and everything seemed so like it could all happen in the blink of an eye. For that I applaud you. Keep writing, you have such talent. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.
Date: 07/13/08 01:47 am Title: Epilogue
Well written. Dark but very well written.