Date: 04/29/08 12:30 pm Title: Chapter 1 As we were
wonderful start. The style is amazing, with the first person point of view mingling with the third. It was brilliantly written and I can't wait for more.
Author's Response: oh my goooooooooood *is smiling and can't stop* you totally made me loose it with that comment, thank you so much !!!
Date: 04/29/08 12:23 pm Title: Chapter 1 As we were
First, the idea of Bill and Tom taking a shower together is hot. I like Bill being innocent and oblivious to tom lusting after him. The last paragraph totally had it.
One thing I'd say is that I don't think bill can fix his hair and make up in 5 mins, more like 50 mins.
This will not be a one shot. You must write on!
Author's Response: haha I saw the mistake about Bill's beautifying just seconds after I uploaded it and thought what the hec, we'll just say that he went for a more normal look that day ;) I will obey you, it shal not be a one shot :) I promise
Date: 04/29/08 12:20 pm Title: Chapter 1 As we were
ps: you stop. i kill u.
^^
Author's Response: me: *is hiding from bazooka and writing franatically*
Date: 04/29/08 12:19 pm Title: Chapter 1 As we were
My little baby brother will never know the reason for why I hold him just a little to tight at night, why my lips linger on his forehead just a little too long. - this was impressive.
oh my...that as not depressive. that was intense!!!
and the shower scene...thanks god for the cuteness...it made me fell so warm inside! such a good feeling x) so much innocence.. *sighs*
damn you. you always do the most incredibles heart-touching stories..!
and we made one without any perv scene! (they're naked and rubbing each others back...okay...but STILL..it wasnt THAT perv.)
*walks on the stage and pulls out a microphone*
*clears throat*
THIS!!! IS FOR ALL THE PEOPLE WHO THINK PERVS DONT HAVE A HEART!!! *acts like a politician*
well...we DO!!! we DO HAVE a heart! we are lovely, little creatures WITH A FUCKING BIG HEART! *makes a pained face and wipes tears*
crowd: ... ohhh.. poor child... =(
me: we can be very emotional when we're not raping someone!
crowd: ...o.O...
me: 'cause rape is love!!! and love is good! rape is just love you dont think you wanted and we can all...arghhh!
you: *drags me off the stage* - that was enough =_='
Author's Response: hahaaaaaaaaaaaaa oh princess when does the hilarity stop ??? not that I ever want it to though ;) it shall live as long as I stay the ruler of pervertedworld with you by my side ! oh and by the way *snatches your mike* just in case anyone reads this besides you: ANDY HAS MADE ONE HEC OF A GREAT COMIC ABOUT THE DREADLOCK FIGHT FROM MY FIC, TORTURE HER UNTIL SHE SHOWS YOU !!! ok there *hands mike back* now go make me proud girl cus perverted people rule the world (and look I'm riming)
Date: 04/29/08 11:06 am Title: Chapter 1 As we were
Poor, poor Tom. Gosh, I feel so sad for him... But he's really cute when he is like that xD
Really good story and first chapter, i can tell this will be good. Yes, it was a little bit depressing, but I don't mind. I just hope it'll end good :D
Update soon and you'll get cookies :D
Author's Response: aw I want cookies, thank you so much, this really meant a lot to me and I promise to continue (for the sake of the cookies of course) :P
Date: 04/29/08 10:37 am Title: Chapter 1 As we were
Aw, Bill is so clueless and innocent, it's cute! Poor Tom, he's really got it bad. I see potential for lots of lovely angstyness!
I think you should definitely write more of this, it's interesting. I like stories where it's Tom who has feelings for Bill like this. It makes a change to it always being Bill who's suffering from unrequited love.
You know, I love your writing style Lucy, and the stories you write are quite different to mine. I'd love to write something with you one day and see what we could come up with together. Just a thought.
Author's Response: I just have to say THANK YOU, god when will you stop making me blush ??? :) I agree with you on the unrequited love!Bill, I actually like to write Tom that way even more than Bill because I somehow feel it's easier, much like I love writing submissive!Tom ;p I would love to write with you sometime Emma, although I'm not quite sure how that works. We do write very differently, but I think we write out of the same meanings, the same thoughts behind our stories. There are very few authors who can make me cry or laugh or get my heart to flutter the way you do, I would feel honored to write a fic with you one day !
Date: 04/29/08 09:57 am Title: Chapter 1 As we were
I think you should continue!
I like it a lot, and I definitely wanna read more. I like that it's kind of sad in a way, because it isn't all pefect and fake like some fics. So, no, it definitely shouldn't be changed to a oneshot! :D
Author's Response: thank you so much, it won't be a one-shot then :) *hugs you for review*
Date: 04/29/08 09:17 am Title: Chapter 1 As we were
yes! a tortured tom fic! great. i wanna see how far you can push a clueless bill.
Author's Response: hahaaa I'll try to push him as far as possible without it becoming too stupid ;p thanks
Date: 04/29/08 09:14 am Title: Chapter 1 As we were
give us more lucy.
i love your way to present the twins' intimate relationship.
i love innocent Bill.
please continue sweetie.
its one of your best
Author's Response: oh my God...ogmygodohmygodohmygod *goes momentarely crazy* aaaaaaa thank you sooooooooo much !!!
Date: 04/29/08 09:07 am Title: Chapter 1 As we were
mmm dunno whatever you do with the story i'm sure it's gonna be great! i really like it so.. keep going!! kisses...bye :D
Author's Response: I'll keep going then darling :)
Date: 04/29/08 07:46 am Title: Chapter 1 As we were
moaaar!
Author's Response: haha will do love ;)
Date: 04/29/08 06:22 am Title: Chapter 1 As we were
Noooo, continue it! It's very interesting! I like innocent Bill xD I'd like to see where this is going :)
Author's Response: aw my little fluffer (dorky name I know) thanks, I'll keep on writing then :)
Date: 04/29/08 05:29 am Title: Chapter 1 As we were
OMG don't stop it there!!! I love it :D This will come out to be a great story! Yeah its a little depressing but hey don't all the good ones start out that way?? ;) I love it!! Don't give up on it :D
Author's Response: oh thank you, that means I'm difinatly continuing, it makes me so happy to hear this !!! I was a little nervous about it, but your review really helped :)
Date: 04/29/08 05:28 am Title: Chapter 1 As we were
I think this first chapter is great! You have to continue with this story *puppy eyes* ^_^
Author's Response: thank you, I absolutlywill :)