Date: 05/23/08 06:06 pm Title: Chapter 5 As it isn’t
I absolutely adored this chapter Lucy. The tenderness Tom showed towards Bill was so touching. I get the feeling that it was significant that Bill showed Tom that he trusted him, and I'm not sure it's to do with Tom's losing control.
For some reason, I'm linking this back to the nightmares you mentioned in the previous chapter. I may be way off track here, but I get the feeling something may have happened in the past to Bill... Something that affected his trust of people... Is that why Tom is so very caring to his little brother and feels the need to protect him so much. Maybe it's why Bill was so nervous around Tom; by Tom's actions and his own reactions to them? I'm not sure though, that was just one way my mind was going with this... Hmm, I love stories that make me think Lucy, and this certainly does that... ^_^
Author's Response: I'm so glad you're getting something out of this Emma! I must admit, I spendt some time to think about the oportunity to write about the twin's past life and maybe use some flashbacks or something, but I decided against it. Simply because it is such a 'present time' fic and I wanted my readers to get the chance to do exactly what you're doing here, think about it a bit :) Thank you so much Emma, I can't help but fel that you're trying to cheer me up here ;) by the way, it's working! It means so much to me that you find my fics good enough to read and review, thank you so much for being one of the persons who keep me going *hugs*
Date: 05/23/08 05:25 pm Title: Chapter 5 As it isn’t
Everyone can tell what ever they want.
Just continue..
Your works just rule.
Author's Response: you read the review didn't you *looks embarrased* but all of the nice ones are helping me through it so...I'll start writing very soon, I promise *hugs you because you're good to me*
Date: 05/23/08 04:55 pm Title: Chapter 5 As it isn’t
Great job as always, keep going
Author's Response: thanksies my little translator ;)
Date: 05/23/08 03:53 pm Title: Chapter 5 As it isn’t
Does it have something to do w/ the way Bill acts towards Tom? Is he doing the same thing to Tom as Tom is to him b/c he feels the same way? But that wouldn't explain the no touching period, unless he's just more self restrained than Tom... Love this story so much. You light up my world!
Author's Response: you're getting close, but there was actually only one little thing that happened to Bill that I wanted people to see :) however you have some very good points here Queen! and I love you! so thank you *beams*
Date: 05/23/08 03:44 pm Title: Chapter 5 As it isn’t
Did it have something to do w/ what he can't control? I though he was talking about his feelings. Please just give me a hint!
Author's Response: aha, there you have something, things he can't control !!! *giggles madly*
Date: 05/23/08 03:38 pm Title: Chapter 5 As it isn’t
Hey Chica! I saw the hate review. That's a little harsh but at least she had the nerve to do what I can't bring myself to do (to other writers not you). Honestly there are so many times where I just want to scream at people b/c they've screwed up an edning or something. *sigh* but never mind, your grammar was fine. A couple of mistakes (good vs. well) but nothing major as far as I can see and I've been going blind since I was 8 so that's not saying much. I loved this chapter. I was really cute and fluffy and it also gave me a lot of insight into their relationship. (Let the pondering begin) They both love each other very much that's pretty clear and neither one is totally in tune w/ the other one's feelings, actually they are but they just don't believe it's possible. I don't know what I'm missing. It's really frustrating me. (wow, side note, my mom just called me, she's accidentally put copper - she says pink but they're not - streaks in her hair! Can you imagine?!) Anyway back to you. I like the lying theme in this chapter. It was really frustrating not getting bills thoughts but you wrote it so well that I could pretty much guess. I liked the end about the promises. So much is going to come out. They're both going to hit themselves for being such idiots. But back to what I missed. I don't like this at all. Can you give me a hint? I'm about to go back and read the last chapter but I really want to know. Update this really soon! Please! Do it for me, your Queen (of freakin everything)!
Author's Response: ah the hate review...yeah, that hurt *sniffs* but she's in her total right to feel that way and I'm not gonna delete her review or anything because of it. What hurt the most though was that it was her first review in this community, she signed in today and her first review was to tell me how bad I suck...only thing that pulled me through it was to see all these wonderful reviews :) so I'm happy now, one bad comment is not gonna bring me down when you are all being so sweet to me, it might dull the joy over the story and make it harder to update the next chapter, but it'll come through I hope :) haha you called me chica, eres español ? donde vives ? gracias Queen, you know you mean a lot to me, it's nice to know you care so much! *hugs you real tightly for being who you are*
Date: 05/23/08 03:35 pm Title: Chapter 5 As it isn’t
Haha ^^ They're both totally into it, but each thinks that the other is only being affectionate -- poor boys! Come on, Tomi - just go for it :D
Author's Response: if it was your twin would you 'just go for it' ? xD yeah I know, I'm being mean to them ;p thank you so much for this !!! means so much to me
Date: 05/23/08 02:40 pm Title: Chapter 5 As it isn’t
IM REVIEWING THIS TIME!!!!
yay!!!!
lol
sorry hun!!!!!!! i've been so busy... =_='
and my cat is sleeping on my chest right now and i can barely reach for the keyboard =P so this is not gonna be long cuz i still need to study...damn
you...ARE THE BEST WRITTER IN THE WORLD
YOU
DONT
DO
MISTAKES
YOUR GRAMMAR IS PERFECT AND SO IS YOUR VOCABULARY!!!!!!!!
so, for the bitches who dont think so...
TASTE MY BAZZOKA u stupid raised-by-monkeys creatures!!!!
thats all i have to say ^_____^
dont mess with my queen!
u mess with her,
u mess with me!
^__^
...
and i have a bazzoka... you dont ^_______^
love ya hun!!!!!!!!
*hugs*
Andy
Author's Response: aaah *smiles contently* I'm under the protection of the Mighty Bazooka :) life is good! You know you make me smile so bad Andy ;p I really don't know what I'd do without you! and aaaaaaaaaaaaaawwwwwwww to sweet cat *beams and pets* you should call it Bill, kittyBill...Tom'skittyBill...just cus it's so cute !
Date: 05/23/08 02:32 pm Title: Chapter 5 As it isn’t
Ugh! I can't express how much I love this story, Lucy! PURE BRILLIANCE! It's all fluffy but not too fluffy. The sweet marshmellow-fluff with the hint of fiery passion that's BOUND to happen. Right? Right? Tell me it's bound to happen. =D *crosses fingers*
Here's to waiting for another chapter, and may it be as extraordinary as this one, if not more so. Oh and good luck with all the school work stuff. =] I know I need luck for mine too. >.>;
I feel like this review is incomplete but unfortunately I have some chores to do so, just know I love it! =D Their interactions are adorable and loving. And I love how because Tom's so loving toward Bill, he's not straining in his control as much. And even with Bill's new inner turmoil his love for his brother calms it. =] At least that's my view on it.
Wow, this review doesn't feel so incomplete anymore! =D Alright now off to my chores! I have company coming!
Author's Response: oh Summers, you really understood my message behind this chapter it seemed :) thank you so much. I just need to tell you something, and that is how much you mean to me. I know it's really clichey and everything, but try to bear with me ;p YOU MEAN SO MUCH TO ME !!! it's really lovely how you seem to undersatnd my writing and I love you for reviewing even when you have a lot of work at school...and chores ;) I'm lucky, I don't have those seing as I'm tecnichally living 'outside' of the house xD so Summers *huggs you* thank you !
Date: 05/23/08 01:53 pm Title: Chapter 5 As it isn’t
Mm...I love this, the sweetness, the build up...it's lovely. The emotions behind it kind of make me ache. I think this one is wonderful.
Author's Response: it made you ache ??? oh that is good, that is really good because that is what I've been trying to do all this time :) thank you so much girl
Date: 05/23/08 01:26 pm Title: Chapter 5 As it isn’t
"it was surprising how much touching each other put them both to ease"that sentence just jumped out of the screen and hit me in my eyes and made me almost start to cry
thats a very good thing lucy beacuse no sentence have ever doen that to me before
and I think i know what Bills secret is...lol
I cant wait for both if tehir truths to be revealed!
love you and your words, your words are...amazing! *hugs you*
Author's Response: my words are amazing ??? *squeals and giggles very madly* hihi oh Em you're precious to me you know that? thank you so much for this, I'm sure you've guessed right about now that I really do relie on you and cherish you beyond much :) *hugs you for being...exactly who you are*
Date: 05/23/08 01:21 pm Title: Chapter 5 As it isn’t
Lovely chapter! ♥
Author's Response: thank you...man, I've always wanted to know how you make that heart ;p
Date: 05/23/08 01:05 pm Title: Chapter 5 As it isn’t
Ohh :O I think I was right with my last review! So... Bill dressing up, lying, accepting and caressing... eh? ;D shall I assume that..? :D oh I love this *-* Tomi Tomi, soon your efforts will be repaid *-*
Author's Response: haha oh sweety, I must admit that my secresy was more aimed at something that happened to Bill rather than any feelings, but you might be right :) I'm not saying anything about 'Tomi's efforts being repaid' because I still do not know where I'm going with this ;p thanks darling!
Date: 05/23/08 12:47 pm Title: Chapter 4 As it is
:O :( maybe... maybe Bill thinks Tom's acts are innocent but wishes they were true and asks for him to stop becaus it hurts him to receive them and think they're just affectio and not the love he wants? Aaaaaaaa :O
Author's Response: well it's not so much about the feelings or thoughts as about the way Bill reacts to things...phusically...if you get my point ;p
Date: 05/23/08 12:44 pm Title: Chapter 5 As it isn’t
oh i can see this becoming one of my faves =] its a great story, really emotional and sweet, keep it up =] x
Author's Response: thank you so much, you have no idea how much it means to me to have you saying that today! the day had rather sucked, but you just made me smile :) so thank you !
Date: 05/23/08 12:06 pm Title: Chapter 5 As it isn’t
Reading this chapter and make me avoid sugary food because it's so amazingly sweet. All these cuddles, petting, innocent kisses = sweetness overload.
Billa got his undies changed for tomi, I wonder what he's gonna do.
Thank you for the great chapter.
Author's Response: hahaaaaaaaaa not my original intension about the undies, believe me ! he just did it so that he didn't need to be naked in front of Tom when they got home that night :) thank you so much darling, I'm really feeding of every nice review I'm getting today :D
Date: 05/23/08 11:16 am Title: Chapter 5 As it isn’t
Orrr a love this!
Bill and Tom are utterly adorable!
Especially how Tom treats Bill as if he was made of glass and would break far to easily.
You're almost to good of an author.
Author's Response: *blushes* oh my, that is way too sweet of you...are you trying to kill me? ;p thank you so much, and the 'fragile as glass' comment *melts* so nice
Date: 05/23/08 09:27 am Title: Chapter 1 As we were
okay. so far this is really badly written. im sorry. its hard to follow and the grammar is kinda eh...you are also very reduntant. and yeah. you need to work on your writing skills.
Author's Response: Wow, my first hate review *blushes* when you say ‘reduntant‘, I suppose you really mean ‘redundant’? yeah see, typos are really easy to make! I would very much like for you to tell me what grammar mistakes there are in this fic, if you could be bothered of course. Also I would love to get your opinion on my writing skills, would you mail me? firelucy@gmail.com I find it confusing as several of the Admins on the site has commented quite nicely on my work. Thank you for being so honest to me, although I must admit, it hurt a bit! Hope to hear from you, Lucy
Date: 05/23/08 09:20 am Title: Chapter 5 As it isn’t
You were? Maybe I'll have to go back and re-read that chapter...It wasnt simply the fact that Bill got turned on by Tom was it? I noticed that.
Anyways, this chapter is no exception, it was amazing. I adore how much emotion you put into all this, its just...breathtaking. As always, cant wait for the next one. ^^
Author's Response: 'simply the fact that Bill got turned on by Tom' ok and here I was thinking that THAT had to be a big deal xD guess I was wring ;p just kiddin with you hun, loved the review! promise to update as soon as I get my courage back!
Date: 05/23/08 08:05 am Title: Chapter 5 As it isn’t
Lol, I didn't review the last chapter, but in response to your chapter end notes, I did get what you were trying to show us about Bill. You've hid it well by the exclusiveness of Tom's pov, but I should think that not many readers actually thought that Bill was completely innocent of their activities. =P
Anyway, I really like the structure of this story, with the italics and first pov at the start and end of each chapter. I like how simple the plot of this story is and how it's all about the emotions and feelings. Don't know how you are going to continue with the chapter titles though. There ain't that many tenses, lol. 'As it wouldn't'?
Ooh, I just realised that you missed out an 'it' in this chapter title. ;)
Ah well, I've babbled long enough.Update soon!
Author's Response: aaaaaaaaaa I missed an it...*looks wierdly at title* mad that really sounds odd now o.O hihi thanks xD oh my God *grinning like mad* sweet review darling :) you make me smile so bad ! and I love you for it, believe me ! I'm so happy you like the part in italics because at first I was unsure if I should continue with it, but seing as peple seemed to like it I continued ;p thank you again, so so much