Date: 12/20/08 06:02 pm Title: Chapter 3 - Tunnel Vision - part 1
But for today, he’d hide from Bill, and tomorrow would be better.- nice parallel line from the last chapter.
He knew Bill was singing, he could see that, but the voice, the sound was a million miles away. The tunnel vision made no sense, but no matter how much the voice in the back of his mind riled against it, with Bill staring at him, singing to him, Tom could do nothing but stare. His fingers went on distant memories, but his playing became sloppy and slow, and by the end of the song he strummed the entirely wrong chords and spilled a few sour notes. - *cringes a the ramifications and embarrassment of playing badly*
”-Local boy arrested for apparently teleporting an entire family to the Arctic-” – lol very subtle *rolls eyes* and *laughs*
Author's Response: And yet people were still confused, lol.
Date: 12/20/08 05:33 pm Title: Chapter 2 - Guessing Game - part 2
Oh my poor Tom. I'm all sad and depressed for him.
You did a really great job of setting the tone, making me connect with all of these characters in such a short time.
Date: 12/20/08 05:14 pm Title: Chapter 1 - Guessing Game - part 1
Whatever it took to keep Bill in good spirits was usually worth the cost, and today it was a newsprint coloring book. Today was cheap. – charming line!
Fabulous, I’m getting all gushy! Miss Muffin it’s really good. I really like how much you made me hate Jorg!
Date: 12/16/08 05:09 pm Title: Chapter 16 - I Think - part 2
MEAN GIRLS!!!! His hair is so big because of all the secrets!!!!!
Or was that unintentional?
Author's Response: It was intentional for sure. I took my sister Kala to see that movie and that was one of the best lines in movie history to me, haha. I loved that line so much, and I think of it every time I see Bill's big hair XD
Date: 12/16/08 11:28 am Title: Epilogue
aww i shall miss this story ^^ good job
Date: 12/15/08 03:13 am Title: Epilogue
waywardmuffin
you amaze me yet again
thanks for the story
Date: 12/10/08 08:29 pm Title: Epilogue
“Tom, you wanted to retire to the Playboy Mansion.”
“I can dream, can’t I?”
lol sure tom!
Jeej a happy ending!!!!
Ja I'm DYING to read more of MFCT, just one question will it be exactly the same as the TH one or has is has loads of different things? I'll read it anyways^^
Date: 12/10/08 06:43 pm Title: Epilogue
Also, while I'm thinking of it, will you Update Carbon? I love that story and am hoping for some reselution in the near future! ;)
Date: 12/10/08 06:41 pm Title: Epilogue
I loved this ending! I'm so happy with it I don't even know how to talk (which is astonsihing, trust me...)
That's what I call a happy ending! Right here! You nailed it! This is quite possibly the best ending I've ever read!
Date: 12/10/08 03:19 pm Title: Epilogue
This was a really great story! It's well written, and different. I like it! :)
Date: 12/10/08 02:03 pm Title: Epilogue
thanks for epilogue!!!!! )))
Date: 12/10/08 11:28 am Title: Epilogue
I loved it :D Why aren't you continueing My Favorite Conspiracy Theory over here? :( Anyway, of course I'll watch ^^ But that is it :P
xx Chi ^^
Date: 12/10/08 06:59 am Title: Epilogue
AHHH It's finished!
I'm so happy right now, I love this story so much.
*made my day*
Date: 12/10/08 04:31 am Title: Chapter 9 - What You See - Part 1
*everything clicks and finally gets it*
You. Are. BRILLIANT.
Author's Response: Lol, thanks. I have my moments I guess.
Date: 12/10/08 03:58 am Title: Chapter 7 - Curtain Call - part 1
WHAT?! WHAT?!
*is totally confused*
Stiilll loving.
Date: 12/10/08 03:34 am Title: Epilogue
Great ending!
Author's Response: Thanks, glad you liked it.
Date: 12/10/08 03:29 am Title: Chapter 5 - Best Laid - part 1
Haha! Funny ending.
Date: 12/10/08 02:54 am Title: Chapter 2 - Guessing Game - part 2
Things I liked:
*Bill's reaction to Tom's ability-insightful!
*Bill giving Tom the pudding cup
*Simone's phone conversation that didn't give too much away
*Bill's character development
you're a very clever writer-good job
Date: 12/10/08 02:46 am Title: Chapter 1 - Guessing Game - part 1
This fic is really good. You can right youn kids well. You use some really good literary techniques. Some of the things I liked:
*Long-neck-asuarus
*the cost of keeping bill happy being cheap/high
*the bean thing and squash thing
*Tom's eerie number guessing at the end
Date: 12/10/08 02:15 am Title: Chapter 1 - Guessing Game - part 1
AHHHHHHHHHH I LOVE THIS!!
Omg im so excited I get to start it when ALL the chapters are posted!!!