Date: 01/03/25 08:41 am Title: Chapter 2
I like this, it's really sexy hahaha
Date: 07/04/09 01:04 pm Title: Chapter 2
Tom giving a blow job is so hot!
The lime was well written. Loved it!
Date: 08/13/08 09:57 pm Title: Chapter 2
eh good but I liked the original better...but you never find out what happens.....^^
Date: 06/10/08 02:15 pm Title: Chapter 2
That was awesome... very well written and just.. hot.
Well, most TH fans wonder if Tom shows off or if he has really fucked that many girls, but... we'll never know XD
Author's Response: Only Bill gets to know that ;)
Thank you :)
Date: 04/04/08 06:08 pm Title: Chapter 2
OMG TINK YOU'VE MADE JUDING SO HARD! XD hahaha I'll judge sometime this weekend. The prize is on another computer and I can't get on that one atm. -_-
but anyways..WOW HAWT omfg XD
Author's Response: Thank you :D
Date: 04/04/08 05:14 pm Title: Chapter 2
OMG NOW I'M GOLD !! *does a happy dance* lol.
Aww this chapter was so hooooot! Made me droool *giggles*. Seriously though, it was very good written! But what personal problems hun :( ? I worry! You're the best! Du bist für immer meine liebling author (and that ladies and gents was my awesome German LOL XD) ♥
Author's Response: Long story; I've been threatened and attacked and had to be moved to a safe location and blah blah blah... Und danke shon! (and that was my German, lol)
Date: 04/04/08 03:32 pm Title: Chapter 2
wow o.o
That was hot! xD jesus...
lovelyy smut :D
Author's Response: Thank you :D
Date: 04/04/08 03:31 pm Title: Chapter 2
I loved it! I love fluffly!Tink as much as I love angsty!Tink. Even though fluffy!Tink, can still be angsty too. ^_~
This was really good. Sexy and sweet too. I liked the hand-holding part and the fact that there were still feelings involved. And despite the fact that Tom closed his eyes to imagine someone else... I still get the feeling that on some level, he's pleased it's Bill, by the way he wants to make Bill moan. But maybe that's just me^^
Really, really good Tink ♥
Author's Response: Angsty!Tink is always there, lurking in the shadows... *lurks* Thank you :D
Date: 04/04/08 03:27 pm Title: Chapter 2
Hmm interesting! Oo I like this. Very sexy and steamy and hot and any other adjectives you can think of along those lines ya know! Sexy sexy!
It's pretty well written as well, flows well and very...descriptive ;D Only thing wrong are a few typos here and there (damn typos! I always have them as well :( *smites typos* and to think, they said using computers would make things easier...not likely, I make more mistakes on the computer lol) - Please please don't get offended or anything ok cos other than two or three typos it's GREAT! hmm...wonder if I could borrow Bill and do good things to him as well heh to show off ;D
More please? *gives cookies and gummibears* :D :D
Author's Response: Well, seeing as I never proof read myself and my sister was busy, no wonder I had typos all over, lol. Thanks :D I'm not planning a continuation of this, though. I am, however, likely to write a lot PWP, possibly even a sequel to this. Thanks :D ♥ *starts eating gummibears*
Date: 04/04/08 02:57 pm Title: Chapter 1
Because you seem to think there aren't that many spelling mistakes, I'm going to go through them with you to prove that, yes, there are. It may not be THAT many, but for someone who claims to be a beta, it's pretty bad.
Not exactly a spelling mistake, but this: "He can't see where's all the fun in retelling someone..." would flow a lot better as "He doesn't see where the fun is in retelling someone..."
"His brother can be so annoying at the times." Random "the" should not be there.
"besides, he knows each and ever time Tom has had..." that should be "each and every"
"Bill climbs into the bunk tiredly and outs his head on the pillow" Bill should put his head on the pillow, not out his head on it.
"he feels the madras shift..." Not only should he be capitalized, madras should be mattress.
“You just have to be so.... so caveman,” Again, not a spelling mistake, but it would flow better as "You just have to be such a... caveman"
“I should just fuck you right here and now to prove you that...” That should be "prove to you"
"Tom proving a girl that he is as good..." Again, should be proving to a girl
"Bill makes a strangled sound i the back of his throat." Should be "Bill makes a strangled sound in the back of his throat."
Like I said, it doesn't seem that much, but when you're reading, it kind of detracts from the story.
Author's Response: Do you see my sister on the Beta Readers list? No? No wonder, she isn't official. Most of the things you've pointed out are just typos which happen to everyone. If you're a writer, you should know. I will not correct the mistakes, she will if she finds it necessary. I have noticed that these things happen even to people who for beta readers take people whose native language is English. It's impossible to make anything perfect, even if you reread it twice or even three times, you're bound to miss something. Also, when people read the story, they normally focus on the story itself, not the spelling and those things. I get your point here. However, I still don't find it really bad or distracting from the story. Maybe you should concentrate on what happens in the story more, rather than on spelling. --Alexx
Date: 04/01/08 09:35 am Title: Chapter 1
ooh! Soo darn hot!!
Author's Response: ♥
Date: 03/31/08 09:37 pm Title: Chapter 1
that. was. so. freakin. hot.
agh, i loved it so much
ahaha, and it fits perfectly with the song
looking forward to the next story(:
Author's Response: Ohhh *blushes* Thank you :D
Date: 03/31/08 08:03 pm Title: Chapter 1
Tom know his stuff. Definatly not lying. LOL. Soooo sexy!!
Author's Response: He still has to prove himself, though ;)
Date: 03/31/08 05:55 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oh my.
Please do write a water sport fic...I think it would be rather interesting.
I loved that line about their fling not being personal because they weren't kissing. That really stood out to me.
Author's Response: Because the kiss is the most intimate thing in the world ;) *iz writing the WS*
Date: 03/31/08 03:10 pm Title: Chapter 1
Ps. go with the water sport :)
Author's Response: I am, I am! And it's damn weird *le gasp*
Date: 03/31/08 03:00 pm Title: Chapter 1
YOu knowww I liked the other one best o.o but this was gooooood toooo hottttt!!
Author's Response: I like the other one more, too. Thank you :)
Date: 03/31/08 02:52 pm Title: Chapter 1
Tinkieeeee, that was véry nice! =D
Kiszz.
Author's Response: Thank you ♥
Date: 03/31/08 02:37 pm Title: Chapter 1
hotness!
Author's Response: :D