Date: 10/03/23 11:57 am Title: Chapter Sixteen
Wow… I had so many different predictions on how this could’ve ended and it went completely sideways in a good way though! I think even though this is technically not a “good ending” as far as Bill/Tom it was the best ending it could’ve possibly been! This took me a little longer to read than normal because it is such a heavy topic that the story covers, but I am amazed at how well you both have portrayed all the dark details of this kind of story! Bravo Bravo Bravo to you guys! My favorite Toll writers
Date: 09/15/23 05:49 pm Title: Chapter Two
This is going to be the first non happy ending Toll book I’m going to read. I am nervous but excited to see such a different story from what I’m used to!
Date: 04/01/23 10:41 pm Title: Chapter One
Not gonna lie this kinda fucked me up. Of course not every fic can be megafluff, lol, but damnnnn. Was def rooting for a happy ending.
Date: 01/02/21 11:41 am Title: Chapter Sixteen
Just sitting here trying to digest the end .you know you have written a good one when it causes your reader to do that. thanks!
Author's Response: Shaddix: Thanks so much! That means a lot.rn
rnStarling:This is the first story I have ever written without a happy ending. It had me processing for a bit too and I wrote part of it. I am glad you enjoyed it.
Date: 12/31/20 04:25 am Title: Chapter Fifteen
So many things happened in that chapter and the end is pretty full of emotions.
I just hope that Tom is honest now. That he says, that if he hadnt have to look out for bill, would have gotten killed because he fucked up his job.
and i also hope that he is honest and stands to other fakts, like that he was the older one and still got into this relationship and if he wouldnt have, david wouldnt have raped his own brother. And that he just because of this was able to eascape.
If bill will really have to sit for years or gets executed, tom gets into the prison too, that there is no differenz. both did what they did because of the drugs and rape. And bill couldnt have just ran away, even after david was dead, because someone would have stalked and killed him, because there would have been the risk, that he goes to the police. If someone really should pay for everything, than its georg, because he was the really leader and the only one, how was anything like sober and didnt got traumatized from being raped or fighted.
Author's Response: Shaddix: Definitely fully of emotions. Georg should definitely pay for something! I think Bill was defnitely stuck in this lifestyle, thankfully Tom found a way out eventually.rn
rnStarling: The end definitely had a lot. We wanted to tie up the ends. It was a hopeless situation all the way around. Just hope that DavidJr. will be ok and things will get better. As for Bill he's at peace. Thanks for reading and reviewingrn
Date: 12/29/20 12:37 am Title: Chapter Fourteen
Lets see how this is going. not sure what will happen next. I mean, I think Bill and Tom could get togehter again, because they still love each other, but now tom told the police everything and bill will go to jail, when they get them. maybe even tom, I mean, he killed people too and sold people ice.
Author's Response: Shaddix: We like to keep people on their toes.rn
rnStarling: Things definitely look pretty dark. Keep reading.
Date: 12/25/20 07:02 am Title: Chapter Thirteen
Well, this was different from what I expected. So bill is a bad guy now and tom a good guy. how old is david? if he is really bills child, he cant be older as five. or is he davids secret child and bill adopted him? but then tom should have relised that he cant be bills kid.
lets see when bill will recognize tom.
Author's Response: Shaddix: Bill got stuck in that lifestyle since he never managed to escape. Don't worry, alll your questions will be answered!rn
rnStarling: The tables have definitely turned. It is definitely an interesting story unfolding. All secrets will be revealed.
Date: 12/24/20 06:39 am Title: Chapter Twelve
Okay, well ... there was really much happening in this chapter. And much time went by.
Not sure what will happen now? I dont think that tom is dead. hopefully david is now.
Author's Response: Shaddix: The big time jump was intentional. Tom isn't dead, there is still so much to happen.rn
rnStarling: The time skip was deliberate. As for the deaths you'll just have to read on and see.
Date: 12/24/20 06:11 am Title: Chapter Eleven
Okay, that ... escalated quickly ... dont know what I think about that. Some things where predictable, some are so random, that I'm not sure if I believe them. Like the david thing. David never showed something different as brotherly love ... and how could tom and bill be so stupid, get the money and all the shit and then sleep at home? the risk was so high.
yeah, cant wait to read the next chapter
Author's Response: Shaddix: Yeah the risk was definitely high, they really arent the smartest boys in the world.rn
rnStarling: They definitely took several risks. As for the David thing I wanted to show that his protective streak toward Bill wasn't as... innocent and caring as it seemed. rn
Date: 12/24/20 05:45 am Title: Chapter Ten
The two are being really risky. dont know what got into them, but they are like too totally new people. its good to see tom happy after everything, but I'm worried, that will be over soon, when he is so forward.
Author's Response: Shaddix: They are definitely being risky. They are happy but I'm not sure it will last much longer!rn
rnStarling: In all senses Tom is a new person getting sober and all. There are still several twists
Date: 12/11/20 12:08 pm Title: Chapter Nine
Well ... things changed ... not sure if it will be long the way it is now. and not sure, if it really get better for tom ...
Author's Response: Shaddix: There is definitely a lot of twists!rn
rnStarling: This story is dark and they have a while before things get better.
Date: 12/06/20 04:24 pm Title: Chapter Eight
Hm well ... now everything is different ... is it? Not sure if it really will ... and if its good. probably tom will stay the doll for everybody.
Author's Response: Shaddix: Yep, things really arent as they seem. It could go either two ways!rn
rnStarling: Things are definitely different. As for what Tom will do, it depends.
Date: 12/03/20 10:56 am Title: Chapter Seven
Sooner or later david will know what is happening. Actually i'm surprised that he, in his job and position, doesnt have any cameras in the house and the garden, or the shed.
I'm afraid that tom will fall in love and then will get raped again.
Bill seems to be pretty thought. I mean, tom is standing in the corner, afraid of david and georg and bill doesnt even have a little pitty. seems like david did his job good on him.
Author's Response: Shaddix: Yeah, David isn't an idiot. He'll notice things for sure. David has been doing this a long time so he definitely knows what he is doing! But is Bill really as niave as he makes out?rn
rnStarling: David doesn't generally need cameras between Bill and Georg. As for Bill's disregard for Tom, he's seen things like that his whole life. He does get better but he doesn't want to draw anymore attention to Tom. Thanks for the review.
Date: 11/26/20 12:13 am Title: Chapter Five
On one side i feel happy for tom that he can be a little of his time be happy, on the other side i'm afraid that david will find out. Also that it will hurt him more when the others will touch him, when he just wants to do it with bill.
Author's Response: Shaddix: Yeah, it is definitely risky that David will find out but atleast he has a little bit of time. rn
rnStarling: This story was definitely hard to write. It as it's bright moments but the stress was different. I am glad you enjoyed it and the stress is coming across properly.
Date: 11/22/20 04:29 am Title: Chapter Four
Good chapter and good for tom, that he has a free day, thanks to bill. I think bill is a good boy, but his age and his little experience makes im somethimes to a brat.
Author's Response: Shaddix: He can be a good kid but he definitely has his moments. But at fifteen, he has had alot to deal with. He is cute though, I enjoyed writing him.rn
rnStarling: I am glad you enjoyed it. Bill is a good kid sometimes but he had definitely been forced to grow up fast. Thanks for the review.
Date: 11/18/20 12:44 pm Title: Chapter Three
DAMN YOU TWO ARE AMAZING! You know its fantastic.
Author's Response: Shaddix: You are too sweet!rn
rnStarling: I am glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for the review.
Date: 11/18/20 12:32 am Title: Chapter Three
Poor Tom. He is si deep in this shit, i dont think he will get out. I just hope that Bill gets what happened and will help Tom while its day, so tom just has to handle the shit at night.
I'm also wondering what happened with toms parents and how he got into this shit.
please update soon, great story!
Author's Response: Shaddix: Yeah, he is defintely in deep! All will be explained, I'm so glad you like it!rn
rnStarling: this is definitely a sad story. All secrets will be revealed. Thanks for the review.
Date: 11/17/20 07:13 pm Title: Chapter One
Hey you two,
heartbreaking story atleast from Toms point. His suffering is well described and comes pretty close to the mindset of a real addict. So kudos to you guys!
Personally I enjoy the length of the story since it actually gets the story going and does not break the flow like short 1000-2000 word chapters would do. So I really enjoy them as they are and actually couldn't find as many grammar or spelling mistakes (I'm not a nativ speaker though). Anyway, I know you receive quite few reviews for this one, but I still hope it continues^^
By the way, Starling do you think you can continue Mortia? If you don't feel it that's alright and I really don't want to pressure you. I'm just curious ;)
Author's Response: Shaddix: I'm so glad you are enjoying it! We really wanted the addiction to seem real and I'm so glad it came across that way. I'm glad you are enjoying the length of them. Thanks for your lovely review.rn
rnStarling: I am glad we nailed the addict's point of view. As I am not addicted to anything I was a little concerned about realism. I am glad you enjoy the length of chapters and can't find many errors. As for Mortia I am working on new chapters and will post as soon as I can. I am glad you enjoyed it and I do intend to finish it. I am sorry you have been waiting so long.
Date: 11/11/20 07:15 pm Title: Chapter One
x c LENT!
Author's Response: Shaddix: Glad you like it!rn
rnStarling: I am so glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for the review.
Date: 11/11/20 08:20 am Title: Chapter One
I want to enjoy your stories because you've both written great stuff in the past, but your chapters are just too long and you need to get yourselves a beta. Remember we're reading on a screen and our eyes get tired, split the chapters and please find someone to beta for you, your talent is wasted on something that could be perfection if you'd let someone help you out
Author's Response: Shaddix: Thank you for your review. Sorry you feel that they are too long - all our stories have chapters this long however we haven't had comments saying they are too long before as we try and make sure that although they are long, the story is kept moving. rn
rnStarling: Thank you for the comment. We appreciate every review. As for your concerns about length and a beta while I appreciate the concern we don't seem to have any other readers having those problems. If the length and lack of a beta keeps you from enjoying our stories, I am sorry. Once again thank you for your comment and compliments about our talents. It is appreciated.