Date: 02/02/26 09:14 am Title: Chapter 1
If Tom is so observant to detail and mature one would think he would pick up on that Bill has had and have a crush on him, and I think it should be more apparent in Bills reactions to Tom too like he wouldn’t be able to be so restrained and quiet when Tom started the fore play and kisses and touches and it would have been even more obvious when he started to touch and seduce Tom back I think or it should have been… also why does Tom have a loose dark mop of hair? Shouldn’t he have either dreads or braids or else loose brown hair, I don’t know but the more then once use of mop of hair didn’t suit Tom hehe.. made it sound like he had some kind of hedgehog Bill hair or something, also how old is Tom? I’m guessing not much older then 20 what it sounds like at least though and in that case Tom doesn’t have any chest hair, but yeah I know it’s fiction, I hope Tom and Bill end up together or confess feelings before the end, I haven’t yet read the whole thing though just wanted to write this while I paused. It’s quite good in many ways though / endearing, I’ll continue now
Date: 02/02/26 09:14 am Title: Chapter 1
Andreas and how he looks doesn’t really fit to be a “popular, handsome brat character” I mean Tom is like a million times more gorgeous and pretty and handsome but I guess that was why he made those bullying remarks about Tom since he’s very jealous xD I wanted Bill to hit him also and for Tom to hit him again / harder. I really didn’t like that Tom had been around so much in a way that seamed “easy” rather then “cool player” but I guess it’s unique. And he seamed to have wanted to take his mind off of Bill / was perhaps insecure and wanted to be nice towards people or something who knows. I’m very glad that they ended up together though, I wish they had made more comments during the love making that made them both more aware of the others feelings.. and I wish Tom said something more direct that let us know that he was aware that Bill has liked him a long time also ^^ And I wish there was another sex scene between the twins at the end. But anyway I enjoyed it :)
Date: 02/02/26 08:55 am Title: Chapter 1
Andreas and how he looks doesn’t really fit to be a “popular, handsome brat character” I mean Tom is like a million times more gorgeous and pretty and handsome but I guess that was why he made those bullying remarks about Tom since he’s very jealous xD I wanted Bill to hit him also and for Tom to hit him again / harder. I really didn’t like that Tom had been around so much in a way that seamed “easy” rather then “cool player” but I guess it’s unique. And he seamed to have wanted to take his mind off of Bill / was perhaps insecure and wanted to be nice towards people or something who knows. I’m very glad that they ended up together though, I wish they had made more comments during the love making that made them both more aware of the others feelings.. and I wish Tom said something more direct that let us know that he was aware that Bill has liked him a long time also ^^ And I wish there was another sex scene between the twins at the end. But anyway I enjoyed it :)
Date: 02/02/26 08:27 am Title: Chapter 1
If Tom is so observant to detail and mature one would think he would pick up on that Bill has had and have a crush on him, and I think it should be more apparent in Bills reactions to Tom too like he wouldn’t be able to be so restrained and quiet when Tom started the fore play and kisses and touches and it would have been even more obvious when he started to touch and seduce Tom back I think or it should have been… also why does Tom have a loose dark mop of hair? Shouldn’t he have either dreads or braids or else loose brown hair, I don’t know but the more then once use of mop of hair didn’t suit Tom hehe.. made it sound like he had some kind of hedgehog Bill hair or something, also how old is Tom? I’m guessing not much older then 20 what it sounds like at least though and in that case Tom doesn’t have any chest hair, but yeah I know it’s fiction, I hope Tom and Bill end up together or confess feelings before the end, I haven’t yet read the whole thing though just wanted to write this while I paused. It’s quite good in many ways though / endearing, I’ll continue now
Date: 04/02/23 12:17 am Title: Chapter 1
Loved it! Tom is so sweet. Stupid Andy got what he deserved for sure, too!
Date: 06/20/21 08:19 am Title: Chapter 1
please do a sequel to this!!
Date: 11/01/20 05:44 pm Title: Chapter 1
Excelente!!! Tom&Bill my favoryte!!
Date: 03/04/20 01:39 pm Title: Chapter 1
this was a really good story!!
you should do a sequel to this!
Date: 03/04/20 07:12 am Title: Chapter 1
Eeep! I love a good deflowering and you wrote it so beautifully. Good job!
Date: 03/04/20 06:27 am Title: Chapter 1
I like it a lot!!! Tom was so cute and tender.
Date: 03/04/20 04:49 am Title: Chapter 1
I loooove this! It was so good and I absolutely love the way you use your dialogues! It all reads and feels so natural, it's hard to stop reading once you start. Veeeery good, well done! < 3