Reviews For Poor Bill
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Reviewer: Heiligx Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/24/08 12:10 am Title: Chapter 1
Date: 03/24/08 12:10 am Title: Chapter 1
The plot is good, but it's too rushed and people are running around everywhere. Add more detail and it'll be good to go.
Reviewer: EmmaKafrum Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/23/08 07:28 pm Title: Chapter 1
Date: 03/23/08 07:28 pm Title: Chapter 1
POOR BILL INDEED! O.O
xD fans are the worst xD LOVE IT!!!! =D
Reviewer: cadixa Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/23/08 06:43 pm Title: Chapter 1
Date: 03/23/08 06:43 pm Title: Chapter 1
awsome!! please continue!
Reviewer: myEbrokenMheartO Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/23/08 06:27 pm Title: Chapter 1
Date: 03/23/08 06:27 pm Title: Chapter 1
LOL!!'there ever where' Love it!!XD
Reviewer: Froggy Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/23/08 06:24 pm Title: Chapter 1
Date: 03/23/08 06:24 pm Title: Chapter 1
I would like this better if it was written in past tense rather than present tense. Present tense is more appropriate for writing plays than writing stories.
It's a little dry to read. People are running around a lot, but there's really no explanation of why. You need more detail in just about every aspect.
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