Date: 05/05/20 08:06 am Title: 22
Oh poor Bill, he's so conflicted. The guilt and shame he feels is totally understandable. I honestly have no clue what to expect next because this story is anything but unpredictable, but I'm excited about it because you're excited about it :D
Author's Response: Thank you so much and I'm so glad you find this unpredictable. Next chapter is up, THEE CHAPTER, thank you< 3
Date: 05/05/20 08:03 am Title: 22
Hm, I dont know ... Tom is for me like ... a hollow character. We cant see deep inside, we are just seeing a bit from the outside.
Tom isn't in love with Bills mother, and he isn't in love with Bill (yet? - hopefully!)
Actually I think the whole thing is a revenge. Maybe Bills mother broke his brothers or best friends heart and maybe did suicide and now Tom wants revenge? And if he includes Bill it's a better and bigger revenge for what she did? It's the only thing I can imagine.
I'm really curious what is behind all this :O
Author's Response: Yep, Tom is like a closed book. Bill hasn't had enough life experience to be able to read him properly. Hopefully the chapter I've just posted can give you some further insight into Tom and his character. Thank you < 3
Date: 05/05/20 07:46 am Title: 21
This was breathtaking! I loved the way you wrote their first time together. It was much more realistic than the usual smut (that I write lol). I've just seen you've posted the next chapter so I'm running off to read lol.
Author's Response: HEY, YOUR SMUT IS THE BEST SMUT. DON'T EVEN. Thank you so much < 3 I hope you enjoy the next chapter!
Date: 05/05/20 07:46 am Title: 21
This was breathtaking! I loved the way you wrote their first time together. It was much more realistic than the usual smut (that I write lol). I've just seen you've posted the next chapter so I'm running off to read lol.
Date: 05/05/20 03:47 am Title: 20
Ah so much going on! Firstly so hot between Bill and Tom at the beginning, yessssss. They are gagging for it lol. Really curious as to what is happening with Andi, and what's happening between Bill's mum and Tom, as in if she is growing bored (lol imagine it, I can't). Haven't worked out yet whether Tom is actually into her or just needs to be around because he's that into Bill!
Author's Response: There is, I'm afraid. I hate writing filler chapters, mainly because I also make them seem choppy and abrupt when the rest of the story kinda flows?? ? I love reading your thoughts on this, though. Thank you, hopefully I've managed to answer some of your questions with the new chapter I've just uploaded. < 3
Date: 05/05/20 03:36 am Title: 19
I'm just catching up now, I've basically been consumed by Animal Crossing outside of starting a new job! - I'm glad they went for the drive, and that Bill got to pour his heart out about his friends, and Tom understood! I love how you are writing Bill as a teenager so spot on, he's in that in between stage where he's not a kid anymore but not quite mature enough to really be an adult, even though at that age you think you are lol. On to the next chapter!
Author's Response: You're not the only one, I'm sure. That's all my twitter timeline consists of these days. Congrats on the new job?? ? I hope all goes well for you. < 3 I'm so, so happy you think I'm writing teenage Bill well. It's quite difficult in the sense that I haven't been a teenager for the last 6 years, I'm not a hormonal teenage BOY and I've never quite managed to get myself in a predicament quite like Bill has. THANK YOU < 3
Date: 05/05/20 01:03 am Title: 21
I really loved this, it was like Bills POV version of what happened! I love it. b29;
Author's Response: Thank you so much < 3 Next chapter is up!
Date: 05/05/20 12:43 am Title: 21
Great chapter. Wonder if we will find out why Tom was so distant though.
Author's Response: Thank you so much < 3 I believe you'll get those answers in 23! For now, 22 is up!
Date: 05/04/20 08:06 pm Title: 21
The chapter was good, simple and to the point. Bill is losing control, Tom's distancing allowed him to create that atmosphere of jealousy and surprise him to the point of having delivered himself on a silver platter of his own free will.
Author's Response: Thank you so much < 3 Yes, I quite like the direct writing style, I'm not a huge fan of riddles and twists and turns at every opening and exit. Your analysis of Tom is really good to read, I absolutely adore reading reviews where the reader tries to pick apart my characters. It makes me think???!!! Next chapter is up! Thank you < 3
Date: 05/04/20 02:05 pm Title: 21
Oooh I didn't expect this to happen !!! I thought their first time was going to be in Hamburg, I really liked it a lot, especially since I wasn't expecting it at all.
You have explained so good, I understood what you wanted to convey and I think did perfect. Bill’s first time had to be special , lets have more smut when Bill gets more experienced :D
I noticed that he’s so in love, poor thing…
In sex Tom was selfish, at no time he bothered Bill’s pleasure. I have a question, why Tom tipped his head skyward and laughed when he came? Whats the meaning of this?
I cant wait for the next chapter!!
Author's Response: Thank you so much < 3 Yes, I did went their first time to be in Hamburg, too. But I really wanted to portray that Bill has no control over this, hence why it was so sudden and so unexpected. Sure he wanted to see and feel Tom like he did at the weekend, but he didn't anticipate Tom taking them the whole way. Teenage Bill may have thought another blow-job, etc. But not SEX. More SMUT incoming in the next few chapters. I have to agree. When writing this, I did want Bill to also get off. I wanted him to include Bill's pleasure, too. But in that moment, I kinda thought Tom wouldn't think to do that, especially when he's been waiting and wanting this moment for so long. He laughed in elation and disbelief, he simply can't believe that Bill allowed him to take it that far. Thank you for your wonderful review, I've had a great time answering it! Next chapter is UP < 3
Date: 05/04/20 12:50 pm Title: 21
Cant wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: Thank you so much, lovely < 3 Next chapter is up!
Date: 05/04/20 09:32 am Title: 21
He did it! He get what he wanted finally. Nobody deserves that Tom did. Hoy manipulador :(
So good chapter. Love it! Hoping for the next ;)
Author's Response: Thank you so much < 3 Yes, it happened. They had sex. I agree!! Let's say 'hypothetically-speaking' that Tom is a bad person, I wouldn't wish this type of abuse on anybody. It's such a fine line and manipulation is KEY. I feel when I'm writing this story that I'm constantly pushing boundaries that shouldn't be pushed, however I do what to make the reader invest themselves into it enough so that they'll THINK. Next chapter is up! I hope you enjoy it < 3
Date: 05/03/20 03:49 pm Title: 21
Great chapter :)
Author's Response: Thank you so much, Sylvia < 3 Next chapter is up!
Date: 05/03/20 03:26 pm Title: 21
I love the way you’ve written this. It feels very much like a first time together for them, if that makes sense. Love it as always.
Author's Response: Thank you so much < 3 I'm really glad you're onboard with the vaguely written smut, but even happier that you understood the intention there. Next chapter is up!
Date: 05/03/20 12:34 pm Title: 21
Wow! It happened. Quite unexpectedly too.
My too favorite scenes were the following. When Tom and Bill simply cuddled in the loveseat and Bill felt loved. Wish they enjoyed that moment longer. But it’s natural that a hormone-driven teenager would need more than just a cuddle. Btw, how old is Bill? I cannot recall.
The second moment was during the intercourse when Tom looked intensely into Bill’s eyes and vice verse. I could feel their connection in this moment.
The thing I did not like is that Tom did not even try to help Bill reach his peak (e.g., Tom could use his hand to do so). Their first time felt more like a self-sacrifice on Bill’s part than anything else.
What else? I think it’s very cute how mature Bill tries to act. He has all right intuition for that too. The question is whether he loses something in the process. But may be not.
You described Bill’s guilt really well in this chapter. Quite realistic. I wonder what Tom feels.
Tom is still a mystery to me. On the one hand, he seems to really care for Bill. On the other hand, Tom is a skillful manipulator. He kind of manipulated Bill to initiate their first time. I wonder if it helps Tom feel less guilty about what he is doing with Bill.
Anyway, great chapter! Cannot wait for more!
Author's Response: Hi omg I love you < 3
Thank you for sharing your favourite scenes with me. I agree, I enjoyed writing the normality of the cuddling on the loveseat as that's what couples do when they're together. It isn't all about sex and being sexually intimate, it's about mental intimacy, too, but Bill being as young as he is, he's under the impression that sex makes a relationship and proves your maturity. Bill just turned seventeen years old. The sex was super easy to write for me, mainly because I didn't have to be super informative or think about the technicalities of each action. I needed it to flow so vaguely that it gave the reader the impression that each part rolled seamlessly into the next, that it happened so fast and without thought. Bill didn't have the chance to overindulge, so neither should the reader? If that makes sense. I agree that Tom should've put a little more thought into getting Bill off, but I did also think that Tom's been waiting and wanting this moment for too long, that he simply doesn't THINK to do that when he's caught up in it.
Thank you so much! < 3 Next chapter is UP!
Date: 05/03/20 11:02 am Title: 21
this was a good chapter!!
I can not wait for the next chapter!!
Author's Response: Thank you so much < 3 Next chapter is UP!
Date: 05/03/20 09:54 am Title: 21
Good chapter
Author's Response: Thank you so much < 3 Next chapter is UP!
Date: 05/01/20 06:00 am Title: 20
I love filler chapters!
Keep the chapters coming, they are amazing!
Author's Response: Thank you and I'm really glad you do, there may be a few more before this comes to its end < 3 Next one will be posted very soon!
Date: 04/30/20 05:09 pm Title: 20
Great chapter :)
Author's Response: Thank you < 3 Next one will be posted very soon!
Date: 04/30/20 04:20 pm Title: 20
this was a really good chapter!!
I can not wait for the next chapter!!
Author's Response: Thank you < 3 Next one will be posted very soon!