Date: 09/17/15 08:17 pm Title: Chapter 1
I'm going to offer you a tiny bit of advice in my review. This was a very good story line but needed some help grammatically. You probably speak another language and that is more than likely the reason why. If you want to get stronger you might want to try a beta. They can really help you to improve your writing. You have very good style and this is very realistic. I can imagine Bill totally reacting like this. He would come back not only for his loved ones but for his fans no matter how hard his heartbreak might be. Keep up the good work. :)
Author's Response:
OMG thank you?! I've just started on this site and yes, english is not my first language. I still don't know how everything works in here, so thank you for your advice! I'll try to improve my writing, thank you :)