Date: 05/11/15 11:36 am Title: THE WILD
When Tom got excited over Bill talking to him after that night he blew him, I pictured like inner chibi Tom squealing and flailing. XD
I guess my head should be rolling then lol. Though I'm not gonna ask you for a third part(because I think it ends nicely), I'm just going to ask you to at least consider it. Even if its really short. And even if you don't, it's understandable.
Author's Response: OMG, so freaking cute... inner chibi Tom! Haha, YES!! That's totally him there. Tom was totally a mush-ball in that scene. lol. But he's totally mushy throughout this whole fic IMO. lol. I'm super glad you liked this fic, but no, I really really really won't be writing a part 3, and I'll tell you why: because you already know what's gonna happen. It's going to be a happy ending. After they kiss and all that stuff, eventually they turn all steamy and smutty, and it would be a total PWP chapter. lol. I'm so over writing gratuitous sex scenes... I have this other fic in the works, called Sense & Sensibility and its so freaking porny, I can't stand it. haha. So for this one I took it lightly. Just imagine a slow-ish progression of their intimacy in this universe, but they get there obviously, because Tom's figured himself out finally. ;) Thanks for the review. :)
Date: 05/11/15 10:59 am Title: THE WILD
Amazing! I don't want a part 3 because it's perfect just like that!!! I'm so happy for them!
Author's Response: YAY! Thank you so much! I'm happy you liked it!! :)
Date: 05/11/15 09:49 am Title: THE WILD
Love it!!!
Author's Response: OMG, how did you read it all so fast?? Haha! I'm so happy you liked it. Thank you.
Date: 05/11/15 01:54 am Title: THE CALL
I think this was well executed. Like another reviewer said, it's like they have lust for each other but not love. I think that's unique
Author's Response: Ahhhhhhh.... noooo, I can't have you thinking that. Tom is taking it lightly exactly because he loves Bill. The more I thought about it, the more I had to write part 2, and so here it is, I've just posted it. I hope it clears a few things up. I'm so glad you liked part 1!! Thank you. :)
Date: 05/11/15 01:45 am Title: THE CALL
omg! Too fucking hot!!! please do a sequel? *.*
Author's Response: OMG, rofl.... So I did a sequel. Part 2 is up now. ..... You have no idea how much I wanted to leave this fic alone. It had been born of thin air and even with that shitty open ending, I wanted to leave it that way. But noooooooo, the plot bunnies attacked. Haha. I'm so glad you liked part 1. Thank you. Hope you like part 2 also! :)
Date: 05/11/15 12:12 am Title: THE CALL
I think what may feel off is how...completely lightly Tom took it? Like, if it's them, it would mean something, you would hope. Maybe that's it? I enjoyed anyhow :). I am seeing them in Anaheim, CA! Soooo excited :D
Author's Response: Hmm, IDK, I think it means a little more than Tom thinks in the first part. And Bill too, he's feeling something for sure, he's just still confused in part 1...... so I wrote part 2!! I know, crazy!! I wasn't expecting to! hehe. But I started thinking about it, and I couldn't have you guys thinking it's just sex... after all, this is our fav twins we're talking about. :) Please enjoy!! :)
Date: 05/10/15 10:26 pm Title: THE CALL
No, I understand perfectly. Yeah, Bill... well, I feel like this is going to continue with them... Obviously, this isn't the best way, but when I need stuff to have been building for a while, I just time-skip. Like, maybe this continues for a while with Bill getting more and more scared and sure of his feelings, while Tom's feelings are getting more and more romantic but he doesn't realize it (like falling in love with a best friend - you can't really say at what point best-friendship becomes love), and eventually one day Bill just snaps and tells Tom that he's in love with him, and he knows it's wrong, and he knows Tom still only thinks of him as a brother, so they have to stop because Bill's feelings are wrong and what they're doing is wrong, and it forces Tom to face his own feelings about his brother? That could be GORGEOUS *w* Also, it'd continue over the tour time-line. So Georg and Gustav and David would all be in the mix, watching as Bill gets more anxious and Tom gets more worried about anxious Bill, but not anxious himself, and... it'd be pretty long. Like, chapters. I feel like you accidentally started a huge multi-chapter fic XD
Author's Response: I BLAME YOU!! I BLAME YOU I BLAME YOU NESSIE-SAN!!! lmao. After I read this review, the plot bunnies came to be and I tried to write kind of what you said here, but I tried really hard to make it shorter, so there wouldn't be this long chaptered monster taking up all my time. lol. So I stayed up all night and as a result I present part 2 (the finale)! .... Yeah. Thank god for the words "time skip", honestly, I couldn't have managed without that. It's what sparked things off for me. Thank you. But also, not thank you, lol, cuz I wanted to leave this fic alone!!! Gah!!! Well, now it's done, and I hope the new 2nd part will be satisfactory. Ria jumped into the mix completely of her own volition. lmao. I've never written her in a fic before, I don't think... seeing as I hate female characters. lol. Anywho, so just wanted to let you know that this is your fault- you're the reason I haven't slept all night and why there's a long-ass part 2 now. haha. Please enjoy! :) ..... But really, thanks for the help. ;)
Date: 05/10/15 08:38 pm Title: THE CALL
Well, I just think it could be explored more. 'Cause Bill seems to have romantic feelings for Tom (or thinks he does, at least), and Tom just wants to have his brother back normally, along with the skinship they used to have, but maybe them slowly falling for each other, coming to terms with the fact that they're brothers who are sexually attracted to each other and that that's probably okay. Like... Tom seems totally fine with it, probably because he doesn't care what other people think, while Bill... I'm not sure how you could show Bill coming to terms with it, but that's what I feel the next chapter could be. And maybe Tom's feelings deepening and he gets to know his brother better again... *shrug* I'm not the best writer, even when I do have ideas, so, again, I have no idea how this might play out. But the end felt wide open, so you could really play with it a lot ^-^
Author's Response: Ugh... I know, the ending felt wide open. I can't think of how to move them forward beyond all the stuff you said too... which isn't a concrete plot at all. :( I'm so glad you replied. Talking this out with you is helping me grasp what it is they feel about each other, and I think you're right- at this point Bill must have some sort of romantic inclination, cuz he's def fighting against something. I wonder if he knows its there tho, or if he just knows his feelings are headed in the wrong direction. I agree that Tom, in this fic, seems easier to interpret. I think at this point he loves deeply, but in a brotherly way. I would probably still have a hard time blurring that line between when lust and funtimes turns into "in love". BIll is giving me a headache though... how do you walk over a line when you don't even know where you're headed. Unlike Tom, he has that curiosity, but is deathly afraid of it. I think he's painted himself into a corner cuz he sees lines everywhere now and he's afraid. IDK if that makes sense, cuz at the same time I don't think he knows what lies over that line. Bill is just difficult.. lol. I don't think I'll be tackling another chapter for this universe anytime soon, esp if i don't have their feelings clearly mapped in my own brain. :( If anything, I really feel this would only need one other part, right? Or two more? Gah. I don't think this is a good start for a chaptered fic. ...Lol, this is what happens when you write without direction!!-It bites u back later. :( :( lol
Date: 05/10/15 07:48 pm Title: THE CALL
maybe cause they just lust for each other and not love each other in that way? i get that idea in this fic
Author's Response: Hmm, interesting. I def think there's feelings they haven't yet tapped into or thought about yet, so maybe you're right, at this point. Thank you for the review. :)
Date: 05/10/15 02:25 pm Title: THE CALL
I liked this. Very much so, I've already read it twice! So idk what you think was off with it, I found it vert realistic and the flow was really good!
I have never read anything like this though. It was... refreshing and I can't put my finger on all these new feelings and all, but I think you did a good job!
Author's Response: Wow, twice already? lol. Thank you so much!! This review really made me smile. I'm glad you liked it, that whatever felt strange to me is probably what's making u feel it's refreshing- that's just really great. I'm so so happy now. Thank you!!! You're wonderful. :)
Date: 05/10/15 04:59 am Title: THE CALL
This is wonderful idea. So carefree Tom (about twincest thing) isn't usual in fanfic. I like it! :-)
Author's Response: Haha, yeah, I thought that would be an easy way to cut through the drama and get to the kissing. lol. Nessie-san (review below) explains my twins really well. I'm glad you liked this. Thank u for the lovely review. :)
Date: 05/10/15 04:20 am Title: THE CALL
I'M GOING!!! I'm really excited, I've never seen them live before - arrived too late to the party until now. I agree something felt off, but it felt... I dunno. I think it was because Bill's a lot more serious and has thought more about it than Tom. Like, I feel like Bill read all the fanfics where they get caught and none of the ones where they didn't, and Tom didn't read any of the fanfics at all because it never actually occurred to him. So Tom's kinda like, "Eh, we're brothers - we used to jack off in front of each other, this isn't that different," but Bill's more like, "I kinda maybe like Tom romantically even though he's my brother but at the same time, EW, he's my brother, but he's also sexy help," because I feel like Bill's this innocent little angel who would get sexual attraction and brotherly affection swirled together into romance, whereas Tom would be like, "This is my brother. My brother happens to be sexy. But he's still my brother." ...if that makes sense for why the end felt off XD That's why it felt off for me, at least. I think you could possibly write another chapter *w*
Author's Response: OMG, thank you so much for this review!! :) It's so funny, but thank you for explaining my own story to me, I actually needed that. Lol. I think you got it all right too. I love that you always tell it like it is, I really appreciate that. And the way you explain my characters, that's exactly how they should be. I'm so glad.... When I read this review I almost felt like I was reading a little fic in this universe, imagining those scenarios in my head. I love this. Please please don't make me write more for this universe though, I wouldn't even know where to begin. This all just started so randomly and I kept writing without any plot or direction in mind, which is why I think it would be hard to give it direction now. If you have any ideas for a second chapter however, please do share, cuz I'd love to know what you think would be good here! Thanks again for a great review. :)
Date: 05/10/15 04:17 am Title: THE CALL
Love it 💜💜💜
Author's Response: Thank you!!! :) I love those purple hearts too. Hehe
Date: 05/10/15 01:22 am Title: THE CALL
Cute story!
I am going to see TH in San Francisco.
Author's Response: Thank you! :) YAY! Enjoy! It's been too long since they last toured.