Date: 05/05/15 01:24 am Title: Chapter 1
This seemed interesting, but I read through the entire chapter, and unfortunately the initial interest just disappeared. I dislike giving negative reviews, but I'm afraid that I will have to say that this was disappointing... I am so sorry if I sound cruel, because I understand that you're trying with your writing and all, but perhaps this slipped the moderators' eye as your work did not make much sense. Good luck for your future work - and maybe find a Beta that speaks your mother language, so you can communicate with each other and to be able to convey the message you intended in the story. :)
Date: 05/05/15 01:09 am Title: Chapter 1
This was short, so despite the summary I decided to give this a shot-- I regret that. I read this slowly from beginning to end and did not understand a single thing! Your English is very poor. Even if I was your beta-reader I wouldn't know how to fix this because I don't understand what you're trying to say. I'm sorry for the harsh criticism, but in my opinion this fic should not have been accepted for submission. :(
Date: 05/04/15 03:52 pm Title: Chapter 1
Like it :)